Pretty and well written. Report Review
This was sweet and yet, sad. I liked it. Report Review
I don't think it was boring, if that's what you want to know. I think it was an honest piece. And I really like the idea of it. Maybe you could add to the plot a little more, or something. But it was a good story, and I enjoyed it!
~Alex Report Review
I think it was beautiful. You captured the emotion well, you portrayed Luna and Neville's relationship wonderfully and have explained these real values, to believe in ourselves and stay true to ourselves. This was very well written. I'm glad I read it. Report Review
Wow, the previous reviews are extremely short... Lets see if I can do better! Ill start with critique and then at the end add my praise lol.
Ok there are only a few minor details. First I thought Luna could have been a little bit more floaty, you know more in character, but techicnally I like it better how you did it. I like to think Luna can think straight if she wants to. I also would have liked a bit more description of scenery and maybe Luna or Neville's feelings maybe? I dont know like Luna feeling flustered by Nevilles answers, and Naville thinking about Luna's doeful eyes...
But on the other hand, I absolutly love your writing style! It is very similar to JK's and it flows along smoothly, never having a boring spout. I also love the lyrics. I think they fuit in very well and really add the extra umpf to the story.
Neville is also very well developed and the story of his parents rings very probable! I praise your amazing detail and pacing of the events as they happen. Oh and I agree with you, it should probably stay a one-shot. The ending is just too powerful!
Shellz! Report Review
Cool.Author's Response: Thanks, i wasn't sure how this would be recieved. Report Review
aawwwwwwww!Author's Response: Aww thanks, lol. Report Review
So lovely- always had a soft spot for Neville- this has increased it!! Good work- love James Blunt too!
Don't put your quill down Charisse xoxoAuthor's Response: Thanks, I really like Neville aswell and i wanted to see how it must feel for him as he isn't really in any 'group' at his school. Report Review
i think it's really cool. I haven't really read any fics about luna/Neville, but this one seems cool. Keep going! Author's Response: thanks! Although I'm not going to carry this on, i think it'd be better as a ONE-SHOT. Report Review
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