love this story. have just reread it after like 2 years. am v much in love with it again, so please do me a huge favour and update again. i swear i don't care how badly written it is. also, i read some of your other stories, they are fabulous. i wish to propose a deal: if you read and review my stories (there are only three and they're all only 1 chapter at the moment) and update, I will read all of your stories and review every chapter. good deal?
xoxo Report Review
I've enjoyed reading this story so far =)
Hope you update soon! Report Review
Nice chapter, short, but sweet :)
*added to favorites* Report Review
Lol, I like this start ^_^
Yay for the 1%! :D
10/10 for the chapter Report Review
Hmmm... Again, a great chapter. Just needs to be longer :P Report Review
Aaaww, again it's too short. Well, a short chapter needs a short review. :P Report Review
I hate kids, especially slutty kids. I like it but the chapters are too short! I want more. :( Report Review
I think, it's a good start. And boy, don't I know how Audrey feels. Report Review
Pretty good start. I like this.Author's Response: Glad you like it. [: Report Review
i like the fangirl action as much as the next person, and this chapter was a little dull, but still good, im guessing it moves along the plot somehow. every story has a filler chapter, that the author uses just to move along the plot. its ok. still a wondeful story. 9/10 Report Review
Sam-loff, this was a very good chapter. It's very hard to write when you know you need to but you can't really . . . oh, you obviously know what I mean :) It is very difficult to come up with things, I know, and trust me, you did a marvelous job! For one, I'm really looking forward to finding out what Peeves wanted.
Really, the only criticism I have to offer has already been repeated to death - punctuation, punctuation, punctuation :)
Hugs, AlAuthor's Response: Lol, I think next chapter (*cough*whichisn'tevenstarted*cough*) Peeves'll pull his big prank. Although, I doubt it'll be that great. Buuttt, I want to put more Sirius/Audrey interaction next chapter too. Whenever I get aroudn to writing it. Thanks again! You are a reviewing machine! Report Review
Actually, it's a rather nice length ^^/ But this . . . this was just wow. I am literally on the edge of my seat, waiting for the next chapter (well, the sixth, really, but I'm waiting to read the fifth).
Still with the punctuation thing! I think this just about sums it up: ‘Nice going Audrey.’ I thought to myself ‘You’ve really. . .’ ought to be >‘Nice going Audrey,’ I thought to myself. ‘You’ve really. . .’ I'm picky, I know :)
Hugs, AlAuthor's Response: Oh, geez. It'll probably let you down. I'm pretty good that way, I'll have myself a nice cliffhanger, and then I totally ruin it next chapter. My grammer is horrible, I tell you. [: Thanks for yet another review!! Report Review
Well, this was very much better lengthwise! It was very amusing, and I'm glad there was some conflict between Lily and Audrey - I really don't enjoy stories where the only confrontations are between, say, the main character and her hated rival from the opposite House whom she really has a smoldering love for without knowing it until he romantically kisses her in front of the entire school. [/rant] Also, your depiction of people here is v. v. accurate, fangirls especially ^^/
For the punctuation - “Oh.” The girl said. ought to be “Oh,” the girl said., and “Hey” came Sirius’s reply ought to be “Hey,” came Sirius’s reply. Those are only examples, by the way :)
Once again, 9/10.
Hugs, AlAuthor's Response: Haha, I also haaatttee the mary-sue stories. Thats why I try to make mine non-Mary-Sue. I may have exagerated on some people, but I do try and keep Audrey as normal as possible. Thank you! Report Review
You have a quite a few punctuation errors, and one for capitalization - Transfiguration - but other than that, it's nearly perfect.
This was a very lovely chapter, and I like it very much; I think it deserves a 9/10 :) My prediction for the story so far: Audrey pairs up with Sirius, and Lily pairs up with James [really?!]
Hugs, AlAuthor's Response: Lol, nooo! What made you guess that! :o Maybe I'll switch it around and dooo.. Audrey/Dumbledore, Sirius/Ms.Norris, Lily/Giant Squid annnnd James/himself. That would be an interesting story. [: Thanks for the review! Report Review
Wonderful chapter! However, one of the things I noticed was that you spelled bawling 'balling', and the last sentence doesn't quite make sense - I believe there might be a word or two missing?
Apart from that, I know I am definitley going to enjoy this story. It's interesting, it's different, and, like 'fangirl-ism', it sucks you in, but in a different, more positive way. I look forward to the next four chapters :)
Hugs, AlAuthor's Response: Lol, I know, I'm a grammer-killer. [: I like the writing part, but not the grammer/spelling/thinking part. ^_^ Thanks for the review! Report Review
I liked this chapter!! please update soon *pleading face* I'm addicted, and I need to know more... now!!! *heh* good story =) Author's Response: Lol, great to know. I know the addicted feeling, I read a ton of fiction. Thanks for the review! Report Review
BeccaAuthor's Response: That's probably the best review I've got, ever. [ : Lmao, thanks for the review.
Ha ha ha! I love Audrey! This is fantastic writting!
BeccaAuthor's Response: Thank youu. I love her too. Thanks for reviewing. Report Review
Hey, don't be so hard on yourself, I actually enjoyed this piece of writing and can't wait until you update again. Keep up the great job!!!Author's Response: Lol, it's a bad habit, I'll write something, and then be like "nope, don't like it" I'm weird like that. Thank you very much! Report Review
I like it!! Update soon!!Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'll try and update as soon as possible. Report Review
... they're short. Sorry! Make'm longer and more interesting with much more jokes and pranks and "action" between Aud and Siri. KK?Author's Response: Oh, oh, oh, there will be more action. I sound like a creep, don't I. Lolll, I was hoping for the next chapter to be the 'flirting' one. Thanks for the review! Report Review
... it's a bit short. Anyway, it's nice 2 read. Most definitely going down in my top thirty list.Author's Response: Thank you! I know, I'm terrible with short chapters. Working on it! Keep reviewing! Report Review
It's okay to have a filler chapter here and there. I just hope next chapter has more Audrey + Sirius in it. heheh. Like them flirting ahahha. Anyways great job Author's Response: Awweh, thank youu! Yes, there will def. be more Aurius. Woot, I've made myself a joined couple name! Lol, keep reviewing! Report Review
So far, I like it! IT's great, she's witty, she's snappy, and she's so very strong willed that it's great to see the Muarders have finally met someone immune to their charms.... somewhat ^.^. Lol. Keep it up and grat job! And, sometimes there needs to be a break from the drama to make a good story... well... good ^.^. Never down play the "boring" or "poorly written" chapters, sometimes, they are very much needed. I cannot wait to read more.Author's Response: Lol, thank you very much. I was really worried with that chapter. I did develop Audrey as a very strong girl, but it will be challenged in later chapters. Keep reading! Report Review
I'm putting this on my favourites, it's hilarious, but I'm getting annoyed with the really short chapters! :-( Update soon and please write more!
10/10 cos I can't stop laughing. Author's Response: Lol, I'm glad it made you laugh. I apoligize on behalf of those pesky short chapters. They are annoying to me too. Thanks for the review! Report Review
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