Love your descriptive writing, your a very good writer (: x

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that rocked
you write like one of the greats
you ned to put more

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I very much like the style you use to write in, it very much reminds me of film noir. I would like to also comment that perhaps your description can be too over descriptive. Take the first paragraph for example, you describe the air, the heat, breathing, more than once for each. Too much can suffocate the beauty of the prose you are using and take away from the point you are trying to make. I'd definately suggest usuing a site like dictionary.com to help vary the language you use, this of course is just a suggestion, which you can feel free to ignore. I do like your characterisation of Draco, you have captured his tone of voice well. I've enjoyed reading this, let me know when you update.

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I take it back, this is my favorite chapter. Your imagery was beautiful, and I have to say that I love Skye. I know nothing about her other than she's extremely beautiful and kind, which would normally make me dislike an OC right away, but there's something about her. I don't know, maybe that's what you want from the readers, because I seem to have the same attitude as Draco. Something about her eyes really hits a right note with me, black with gold? And the graphics are a great touch, I think I might have to look in to getting some. :) Either way, this is coming along nicely. I'm glad you asked me to review your fic, it was a pleasure. Good luck with everything!

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"The waft of her hair hit my nose, numbing my senses, the bitter tangy apple scent bringing back old memories and my mind fell into a darker pit. I’m going to kill this girl, I thought. That's very powerful. Great job, I love that bit.

This was the best chapter yet, I think. It's so sad about Desdemona (though the petnames are kind of... odd?) and I could picture that scene perfectly. Poor Draco... I'm excited to read on!

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Ah! I can't believe Lucius would do that to his own son. Well, actually, yes I can. You've done well with their characters and building suspense--I'm excited to see how this continues and what it has to do with Skye.

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Hey! This is really interesting so far. I loved the opening scene mostly, it set a good tone for the story. I think you've got a strong writing style, and this is a good plot so far! All I have to nitpick about is that you have some punctuation errors, such as putting "Shut up, Potter." spat Draco instead of the correct form: "Shut up, Potter," spat Draco. I'm sure that's nothing that a Beta reader couldn't catch for you. This is interesting--now off to Chapter Two!

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This was a good opening, I can picture her apartment completely. I can't tell much about Skye, because I haven't read much. But right away I can see she is unbelievable caring, has a good heart and a neat name, things which might be heading toward "Mary Sue." We will see though as I read on. Great opening, I'm excited to see how the story unfolds!

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it's a cute idea and you are talented, update soon

Author's Response: Cute idea? Hopefully, or else this fanfic will never ever fly. I'll update, but I'm pulling another long one on you guys, I'll write up the chapter surely after all my finals and all, too much pressure now, but I also have a Dramione coming up, so yeah, I don't know when the update's coming, hopefully in two weeks at the max.

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I MADE A TYPO
ARGGHHH

*between

Author's Response: LMFAO.

*grins*

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wow.

your stories are breath-taking.

ooooohhh, i'm just jumping out of my seat! I can't wait to find out what will happen bettwen Skye and Draco.



Author's Response: You'll just have to wait I guess, sorry for the long wait guys, it's just my life's been slightly crowded lately. So sorry.

And thanks for the review. :-)

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really great chapter
its amazing how you manage to portray every breath of each character.
outstanding - keep it up

Author's Response: Aww, thanks hon, you're not so bad at giving compliments either. I don't know what to say. Again, thanks for the review, it's greatly appreciated.

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WOW!

Your stories are brilliant.
I looovee them.

I can't wait till the next chapter!!!

p.s- I love the new banner!

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm thinking of changing the banner again. And thanks for the compliments as well!

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Hello There.

I love your stories. Simply amazing. I cannot wait until the next chapter!

p.s - would you mind telling the name of the girl in your chapter graphic?

xxx

Author's Response: Same as below . . . or above, whichever one. :rolls eyes:

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Hello There.

I love your stories. Simply amazing. I cannot wait until the next chapter!

p.s - would you mind telling the name of the girl in your chapter graphic?

xxx

Author's Response: Which chapter graphic? The first one or the last one? Both of them I think I found lying around on the web somewhere, i'm sorry, I can't seem to find the link for the life of me. Thanks for the review, by the way, the next chapter will be put in queue next Wednesday, and hopefully get validated in time. Again, thanks!

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exciting chapter

Author's Response: Thanks again, dear.

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Brilliant

Author's Response: Muchly appreciated for the review, thanks for reading!

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awsome

Author's Response: Thank you. *bows*

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Your keeping me at the edge of my seat with this story.

Author's Response: Glad to know, hopefully it's suspenseful. Thanks for the review, love!

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It's a girl. Oh geez. I see where this is going. Actually I really don't. Your keeping me at the edge of my seat with this story. It's really odd. Oh and no, I'm not going to say the same old boring this this time. Chapter Graphic = uber cool, fan-tabulous, I wish I could do that, you have much talent, I luh it, I luh yew. lol. see? That was different. :]

Author's Response: At the beginning of this review, I was like oh no, someone doesn't like the sound of a girl entering. I don't know, some people just don't like romance you know? Well, gladly, this story isn't centered around the romance, it's more of a long stretched character study. And glad you like my graphics, they're not the best believe me, I've seen far better. But it's good enough for me. Thanks agian, dear.

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That's really upseting. Especially if you were placed in Draco's position. He may not have loved her, but to care about someone that much would be a hard blow to the heart. Im faaling in lov with this story. Yet again, I will say, Chapter Graphic = ammmaaazzzing

Author's Response: Aww, thanks hon, I'm great the entire vibe I wanted from the story is coming through. Glad you like this story so much. Thanks again.

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Well, this has certainly been a exciting chapter. I'm guessing he's not going to overcome the curse and kill his father? No. I didn't think so. For some odd reason I'm in love with the story title. I dunno. Chapter Graphic = Ammaaazzzing =]

Author's Response: Really? I was thinking of changing the title, but then I got slightly scared that people who read my story would wonder what happened with the actual story. And no Draco doesn't overcome his father. That'd be slightly unbelievable, and so not exciting. Thanks for reading, again.

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Wow! I have to say this story is amzing even though this is only the second chapter. I love you don't write about only happy cheer things. It makes the story more enticing to read. Also your chapter graphic = Amaazzing. =]

Author's Response: Hopefully the entire part of not writing happy things is taken literally, for it's quite true. Glad you like it, the chapter and the graphic. Thanks for reading!

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wow. this is an awesome story. poor draco. plz update, can't wait for more.

Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much hon, yeah, I make Draco suffer tons, don't I? Don't worry, more evil stuff making it's way through, as soon as my wonderful beta, Jas (icy) finishes correcting my horrendous, numerous mistakes, I'll be submitting the next chapter in. I know it's been a long time since I updated this fic, but I'm back in the swing. The 6th chapter is 1/3 finished, I'll have it out by next week. Thanks for ya'll's patience! Thanks for the review too, toms_gurl.

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this is really good!

Author's Response: Thanks hon, glad you like it. Thanks for the review. Next chapter is going to go into validating line as soon as I can get to the new chapter link, right now it's not allowing me. Thanks for waiting, all of you!

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