Well, it's not bad, it has a good storyline, but you may want to make a little more... flowy. I can't think of a different word, but it sort of just jumps from section to section right now. Like I said, it's really not bad (I quite like it!), it just has a few revisions that could be made. Keep up the good work! Report Review
hey, i love your story, please update soon!!! Report Review
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