Wow. This is so intense. Good job! ~Drunkies

Author's Response: Thanks, io'm not completely happy with it, but hey, It's a start, now for the rest, though at the moment I'm working ono liek the 5th chapter of a story that they keep rejecting for some reason, still dn't know why, as no one I know has found anything wrong with it. Oh well, keep up your great work.

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amusing unnessary violence. i suggest double spacing between paragraphs or at least indenting for easier reading

Author's Response: yeah, sorry this was my first post, didn't know about the weird formatting on the site. Anyway, more soon.

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Okay, awesome :D, but one thing: Double spacing! Or at least get yourslf a beta, or editor, or whatever! Or..hey, I could be your beta if you wanted me too. Or not, you know, whatever. But if you do, you can contact me at my email: smartstuff543@yahoo.com. I really love the story, Its just that it would be so much easier to read, not to mention appear longer. This is an awesome story, though, and the summary made me tilt my head when I read it. This is going to be very interesting;)

Author's Response: yeah, it was my first story on the site, and I was really having trouble trying to figure out the formatting, I spent like half an hour trying to indent the lines and it just wouldn't do it. Yeah, I'm sorry about the grammer mistakes, I've been really busy, and also just wanted to make sure it actually got up on the site, I was afraid if I edited it it would reset and I'd have to wait an extra 3-5 days for validation. But now I'm gonna go back and fix some of the little things, Though I'm not gonna overhaul all the slightly awkward parts at the moment. Don't have the time, once the semester is over I probably will, and maybe update with a chapter a day as well. Thanks for the offer, if you're up to it I may take you up on that, it'd be helpful, but we'll see, I've got to figure out this site's blasted formatting first. How do you double space? Thanks, Randall

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I never EVER do this... but I'm making an exception for you. I know I already told you how much I like this and how I can't wait to see where you're going with it, but I thought, hey, why not tell you again? Something must be wrong with me. Not only did I just read a Lily/James, but I actually REVIEWED it. You're corrupting me slowly, darling... ;) Excellent job! Kissels, Huggels, Squishels -Kitty-Cat

Author's Response: Thanks, I appreciate it, miss Kitty Cat. Side' everyone loves Lily James, you know it.

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