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Review #1, by Sky Goddess

Chapter One: Sentences

12th July 2006:

yay! Surius stays!!!!!!

Author's Response: xD

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Review #2, by angeleyes

Chapter One: Sentences

7th February 2006:

haha good chappie keep it up!! and are u asking for ides or u want us to guess? (i wasnt sure) if you want an idea maybe siruis could see how bad hary is with girls and try and help him out :P just a thought !!

Author's Response: I dunno... I'll consider it... It may not work with what I have planned, though. Oh well, we'll see I guess. Thanks for your review ^^

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Review #3, by LoVeMeTrUe

Chapter One: Sentences

5th December 2005:

This is good. I like the concept and I think you projected Sirius very well. Very creative about the death lady. I'm still laughing over the last two sentences lol. My suggestion for you is to go through and fix some grammer things. It's not too bad but still noticeable.I really hope you continue this it is quite interesting.

Author's Response: I'm on my way to the forums when I'm done responding to this =D I'm not used to writing in past tense, so I expected a lot to be messed up. I promise it will get revised asap ^^ Thanks for the review!

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