umm.. i want to say two things.
1) please don't use so much adverbs to finish each and every sentence. it becomes monotonic.. i have read all of your stories and they all have this particular problem.
2) please check the grammatical errors and edit them.
apart from these 2 problems your stories are very good.

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I noticed that you have few spelling mistakes, if you ever do re-work these chapters.. (until this chapter i noticed that the past plural is "was" for you, but the correct one is "Were" (We were together not We was together)

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Great Story brief in some parts but really good.
9/10

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Absolute classic:
“Mr Weasley, you have as much chance of beating Harry, as a Flobberworm.” haha loved it.
On the down side some constructive criticism.
The spells well are used to in JK's books are mostly latin to have spells that are just english with "ius" on the end is a little disappointing.
Like a killing curse isn't "Killius Himius" if you understand where im coming from.
Great otherwise

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I think you done a great job in most parts.
One part that lacked in detail was Ron confrontation of Harry about Hermione it severely lacked there otherwise its been very good

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Im really enjoying this alternative to HBP and am going to continue reading your work hopefully its all up to this quality.
9/10

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This is the most perfect story of Harry Potter on this website :D!
My new number one favorite!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoy it so far (I noticed your other reviews). Hopefully, with some patience, you can continue to monitor my account and check for the next update to my stories to continue the reading.

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Seems a little ironic that the trio just -happened- to be part of the heirs... but hey whatever works
+5 for me for commenting on this well after it was released

Author's Response: It's not ironic at all, or coincidence. Those people are the heirs and it's for good reason that they are the heirs. There are many powers at play in their life and so their involvement with each other was predesigned before they were born.

Thanks for reading thus far.

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read this story like 5 times now, never seem to continue the series. i will this time though, this is my favorite story on this site, thanks for posting

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and I hope you finish the lot!

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I think you should encourage readers yo do this story before the one of harry after his 17th birthday. So far it is answering several quesions like how H/H AND R/L happened.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading. I do add a disclaimer in the story's description, I might add a note and link at the start of the first chapter to encourage it more though, thanks for the suggestion.

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I think you should encourage readers yo do this story before the one of harry after his 17th birthday. So far it is answering several quesions like how H/H AND R/L happened.

Author's Response: I believe this was a double post, so I'm ignoring it! Please see my previous response :p

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i think this is one of the best stories i've ever read. i'm a huge harry/hermione fan. the only criticism is that you use adjectives very often, most of the dialouge ends with calmly, importantly, etc. i just think you may want to use mor synonyms, but that's just my two cents.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading. This was an issue with my writing I began to learn and since I use fanfiction to tune my writing skills I have adapted this. As you progress you will see that there are significant changes with the adjectives used and also not using them at all.

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in the begining of the story dumbledore told harry he was allowed to use underage magic. so why is he threatening dursley with it at the end?

Author's Response: Threatening is the crucial aspect of that statement, plus Harry is constantly secretive regarding his abilities and most definitely doesn't want Vernon overreacting.

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it said in an earlier chapter that harry mastered apparition. but here he was still trying. and losing fingers. whats up with that?

Author's Response: I'm not sure if the story does do that, I cannot recall due to the age of the plot. If you let me know what chapter this is in, it might be worded incorrectly.

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so howd mrs weasley yell up that tea was ready when they put a silencio charm on??

Author's Response: The charm stops them from being heard, but not from them hearing things outside.

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ey.i reallylike your ideas.they're the same ideas that have been running through my thoughts ever since i started to read Harry Potter.I always hoped that Harry potter and Hermoine got together.Please tell me you'll always write and never stop... I look forward to finishing this book and then reading the sequals. Is there anyway in which we could come into contact

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and I'm glad you like my stories.

I will always be writing but unfortunately the time I can dedicate to it has reduced dramatically. However I chip away here and there and sometimes just thrash out an entire chapter and get it up.

Unfortunately there is no way for us to come into contact.

Thanks

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Wo that is all. 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks! Hope you continue to read the stories following.

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Hey if you have noticed my other reviews I'm posting this to say that I won't post another untill the last chapter. However I Loveee your story and still think it's awesome i will leave a review if you need any improvement somewere. ( I doubt it )

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and please continue to enjoy!

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Seriously is your head the size of a football field to house such a large brain! 10/10

Author's Response: I'm not sure how big it is but it does come out with ideas all over! My imagination is my strength, my writing not so, but it's improving greatly.

Thanks for reading.

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Seriously I've read a good 50 fanfiction authors work and your so far is the best. (by alot!)

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and I am glad you like them so much!

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Hey SOS I haven't posted on the last few chapters here's a word to sum them up. Supermothafuckingsoawesomeitmakesnazizombiesdiecool so there you go 10/10

Author's Response: Oh wow ... you're really enjoying the story!

Thanks for reading.

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Seriously your asking us how you could improve? Well how about PUBLISHING the damn thing you'd probably sell more copies than J.K anyhow!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Maybe I should publish if I'm going to sell that many, come on billions! Although I think JKRowling would have a little something to say about it.

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Wo brava velameticia! Well done you should consider writing real books if you haven't allready!!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and I do dabble in personal writing but I hit a very nasty wall called writer's block!

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Aaw pooor harry! Still though 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and I am glad you still like it!

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Great story love the plot and Everythings perfect... Except for harry isn't if age and can't cast spells yet so how did he cast silencio? anyway 10/10

Author's Response: Thanks for reading. The location of the person casting magic is the critical part of it. If you were at the Burrow, a wizarding home entirely, you could do all the magic you like as the Ministry cannot detect if it is done by someone underage. However if you are at Privet Drive, an utterly Muggle area, they know immediately.

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