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Review #1, by NicerDraco2025 Chapter One: The Secret Orders

1st June 2007:
Hey this looks good.
Man kevlar just keeps getting more and more useful. Thank you dupont! jk
So what exactly is the relation between the Elysian and English? I haven't quite got that.
There's a lot of opprotunity in this idea. Go for it.


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Review #2, by harrys_brother Chapter One: The Secret Orders

21st July 2006:
If only this were real...great story. However, I must say one thing: though this is fictional, the manner in which the soldier is addressing his superiors is not accurate. Superior officers are addressed by rank, not "sir". I'll give an example: “Don’t worry, sir, I’ll protect them.” It should be "“Don’t worry, General, I’ll protect them.” I'm in the Army, just so you know. Other than that, great story and originality. I want to read more-post ASAP.

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