good to see myrtle finally storted! however, as you probably now know, there isn't a password for ravenclaw house, it's a quistion. other than that, wonderful chapter! Report Review
cool story. OK, I'm to lazy to review every chapter, so I just want to say, really like this story! Report Review
wow. no wonder she's miserable in death too Report Review
That was so sad! Great detail. I cannot wait for chapter nine! Report Review
OoOOO! GREAT! I love it. I'ts very very original. You characterise the characters will, canon and original. Please write soon though I understand you are busy.Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I haven't had a review on this fic in a very long time, haha... anyway I'm glad you like the characterization and everything. I'll try to get a new chapter up soon. :) Report Review
I'm glad you were able to update this ASAP, don't worry, I didn't mind waiting. (I had taken quite some time to updating my own stories too. Heh.)
I loved this chapter. Poor Myrtle!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! It's nice to know that there's at least one person who remembers this story, and I love your reviews. Glad you liked the chapter. :) Report Review
I do love your stories, you're characterisation is so perfect. I love your Hagrid because he's as gentle and caring (and enthusiasitc about Care of Magical Creatures) as his older self is in the books. It makes sense to me that Hagrid would've been an outcast when he was at Hogwarts because of the way he looked and talked and I think you've done a great job showing this.
I like the compassion you've given to Myrtle. She knows she's not too different to Hagrid, can see the similarities between them. But she's so desperate to have a friend that she goes along with Ria and Olive.
There's a nice conflict here between Myrtle's compassion and Olive's lack of it and this shows signs that they are quite different people which may lead to difficulties in the future.
Very nicely put together. Author's Response: Wow, it's been awhile - so nice to hear from you again! Anyway, I'm glad you liked the chapter and found the story scenario believable. Although I wouldn't say Olive's completely un-compassionate - she's compassionate towards Myrtle and the other Ravenclaw girls, but not someone who's an obvious social misfit and looks out of place, like Hagrid. But in general you're right that she's considerably less compassionate than other characters, and that it will play a big factor later in the story. Thanks again for the great review! Report Review
Very interesting story! I love how well you've developed Myrtle's character. Please update!Author's Response: thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it. =) Report Review
It sO awesome PLEASE continue!Author's Response: thanks, i'll try to update soon. =) Report Review
Oh, wow! I love this story (and Charlie and the Chocolate Factory. Isn't it the greatest? Although I LOVE Harry Potter.) Great story, shows Olive Hornby in a different, friendly light ( I myself thoiught she was a b****.) I liked how you portayed Myrtle and Hagrid. Keep this going; I want to read more...and how dare they insult Hagrid!!!!!Author's Response: thanks for the review, I'm glad you liked it. I'll try to update soon. Report Review
cool story. i read chapter 1 and 7, and its really good because its different, the other storys are the same, like people driving of cliffs because theyre cheating on someone. Author's Response: thanks for reviewing, glad you liked it. =) Report Review
Please update soon! This is a really good story, I've never really been interested in a Myrtle story before this one, and well.. I haven't really seen one either. Keep up the good work!Author's Response: thanks so much for reviewing! I'll try to get another chapter up soon. sorry about the wait. Report Review
she is sooooo mean!
she should ditch those friends and be friends with hagrid poor him!
10/10Author's Response: lol, thanks for the review. =) Report Review
Lovely and very entertaining, but I did noticed something. Aren't you not aloud to take Care of Magical Creatures until your 3rd year? Just wondering...but good job!Author's Response: thanks for the review! It's true that we don't see Harry taking that class until his 3rd year, but remember that this story takes place 50 years earlier. school curriculums change, especially when different headmasters come and go. =) Report Review
Beautiful...the title is my favorite part. I can assure you that I will continue reading.Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
awesome story so far! and hagrid was in hufflepuff =)Author's Response: thanks for the review! the HP lexicon actually says he was in gryffindor... but I guess it's just one of those things that'll never really be proven either way... Report Review
Aw! Poor Hagrid!!!
Update with the next chapter ASAP. I love this story, its so original! Great job.
-LiraelleAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'll try to get chap. 8 up soon. =) Report Review
Great story! Update soon!!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Report Review
No spelling or grammar problems to comment on this chapter. Hagrid hasn’t changed much has he? I could almost hear him speaking in my mind while reading your dialogue; it was great! Myrtle is very cautious with her friends, trying to never say the wrong thing. I’m thinking that could have something to do with how she loses them somehow. Your plot is developing slowly but consistently, which is a good thing. It is better in my books, than rushing through it; as that is something I know I need to work on more. I love the way you write, it always flows so well, the characters are recognisable and the tone and mood is appropriate. Now I need to know how this ends, so don’t take too long to update!Author's Response: Thanks so much for all the wonderful reviews! Hagrid's speech was incredibly hard to get right; I'm glad you liked it! You're right, Myrtle's very very insecure... and unfortunately, she will keep losing friends. =( Thanks again for reviewing! Report Review
“… many different braches of magic” “branches”
“I got the distinct impression that the degree of frendliness varied” “friendliness”
Another great chapter. You wrote Slughorn well and how I’m sure he was described in the book. It is good to see an author who researches the characters to keep it as close to canon as possible. I like how Myrtle was so interested in History of Magic, and her opinions of the behaviour of the rest of the class. The next chapter will have my “overall” thoughts…
Author's Response: Ack! I really need to spell-check better! Thanks for pointing those out. I'm glad you like my characterization. =) Report Review
As you know, I point out little mistakes I notice 'cause I love you so much! So here's some more...
“Settling myself under the heap of new blankets which…” “… blankets that…”
“She had never mentioned animals who looked like lettuces though.” “… that looked like lettuces...”
Not much else to comment on this chapter. Other than I still love your writing. ;-)
Author's Response: Thanks for pointing those things out. I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
Love the song. :-D
Just two typos this time.
“… unable to take it any longer, mad a mad dash” “… made a mad dash…”
“… rommates” “roommates’”
Can't wait to see what happens next. Something occured to me, wasn't Hagrid in his third year when he was expelled? That would mean your story will be spanning three years...
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Lol, I'm glad you liked the song. I was a bit nervous about posting that. And yes, the story will cover all three years. Which means it'll take me a very long time to write... Thanks for the review! Report Review
I found quite a few, mostly grammar mistakes.
“A relatively new transportational device” I think… you just made up a word. “A… transportation device”
“… it seemed risky and unnatural compared two my own two feet.” “… it seemed risky and unnatural compared to my own two feet.”
I came across a couple of instances where you use the word “which”. There should always be a comma somewhere before this word unless you change it to “that”. Like here, “I knotted the cord which had held my packages…” “I knotted the cord that had held my packages…”
I’m still loving your writing. I have to say, when I was reading your other stories I hadn’t planned on looking at this but I’m glad you asked me to; it is so original and well-written as I should have expected, having read a few of your other “works”. ;-P
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the wonderful review, and all your helpful suggestions! I'm glad you like this story. =) Report Review
Myrtle is so negative; sure that no one could possibly like her though she hopes that maybe they will. I love how you write her as I think I have said. Eleanor seems to be genuinely friendly despite Myrtle’s reluctance to believe it.Author's Response: You know, you're the first person who's said that about Eleanor - everyone else seems to hate her. I suppose it's because Myrtle's the main character, so people have an inclination to only look at her side of things. But you're absolutely right - Myrtle's so pessimistic, and sees everything as a personal insult, that she often tends to distance herself from people who actually do want the best for her. I'm so glad you've spotted that! Thanks for the review! =) Report Review
You were certainly good at writing Hagrid's voice. Boy, that's hard. I can totally understand the thing about being laughed at because you're friends with outcasts, thing. Update soon!Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm glad you liked my portrayal of Hagrid. =) Report Review
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