You need to have seperate paragraphs, not just one big one, but it's a pretty good idea.

Author's Response: thanks for the review, i've actually just enlisted a beta so i will sort my stories out shortly

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I sincerely esteem your endeavour of solving such a difficult problem - to explore something WISE from Sirius. Have you ever met something quick minded - sentence or note - from Sirius in any of JKR books? Though Sirius isone of my beloved characters, I must say I haven´t. So your story has a very strange influence on me... I think, writing about his "wisdom" needs something absolutely different - something crazy, twisted, ... anything but serious. Sorry. p.s. I have no doubt that you are able to be a great writer !

Author's Response: I do apreciate you feed back, but i also beleive that sirius does have a siius side, it is just not overly apparent. Ther are moments written by JKR herself that show that. Besides the point of the story was actually meant to get away from the overly repeated type of fun hearted things Sirius does in most fan fic's thanks

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Hey! I really like this story! Its quite good, actually. No one else reviewed yet? well, too bad for them then. Cotinue! :)

Author's Response: thanks for the great review, actually i'm in the process of writting 3rd chapter. ideas are a little tough to come by with out repeating my self, if you have any ideas feel free to review again and let me know night_watcher

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