The creation of the Chamber of Secrets! I've never read a story like this and I did like it, especially when you showed how he was the creator of the word Mudblood.

Author's Response: I think I wrote this in response to a challenge about how a part of Hogwarts was created or something. Glad you liked it.

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Ooh, I like the way you go through how he managed to create and secure the Chamber of Secrets, so many writers do not go into how he managed to get the basilisk and create the Chamber.
Well done.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I wrote this in response to a challange to explain how any one part of Hogwarts was created. This seemed the most interesting.

Glad you enjoyed it.

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story as such is excellent but deviod of actual mystery. it leads to a logical cunclusion but not why the snake lasted for centuries.


Author's Response: Thanks for the review.

I see what you mean about being devoid of mystery, particularly as we already knew the ending. The challenge was to write about how a particular part of Hogwarts was created, if I remember correctly. Not sure how I could improve that, but thanks for the suggestion. I'll think about it.

Glad you liked it otherwise. Thanks again.

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It makes me lose all hope seeing that even the founders fell apart so easily - how can Hogwarts find unity nowadays? Ah well, the story was good anyway! You could have easily made it a bit longer, though, and told us more about Salazar's feelings and more of the background. But that's just my opinion. I think you showed the way the characters think and act really well, especially Helga. She's precisely what I always imagined. Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for the very thoughtful review. You have a good point about the background. I did sort of start in the middle of things. Perhaps I will add some more if I can think of it. At the moment, I don't have any ideas though. Thanks for the suggestion.

I am glad that you like the way I portray the Founders. There isn't really that much to go on in canon, so I just had to go with my instincts really.

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I think you got to the heart of the problem with Slytherin here, but the language sounds a little modern to be used by the Founders. And I doubt that Slytherin is the type to chose a bathroom at "random." There is an advantage with the bathroom, because that has easy and automatic access to pipes, which is the basiliks's main form of transportation. And also if you are searching for the entrance to a fabled hidden chamber, wouldn't you look for the more conventional and romantic spots to hide an entrance, such as behind a bookcase? I myself certainly wouldn't think to examine the bathroom sink one the fourth floor (or whatever floor it is) that has never worked. I think there was a bit more calculation to Slytherin's choice.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review. Glad you think I got to the heart of the problem with Slytherin. Totally agree with you about the language. It is quite difficult to maintain a balance, as I didn't think I could maintain a story in real medieval language-and I also think it would put people off reading it. But yeah, translating it makes it seem inautentic. I'll go through it again sometime and see if I can do anything about that. As regards the random bit, I meant he choose WHICH bathroom to use at random. I'll rewrite that part and make it a little clearer. Thanks for pointing it out.

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*giggles* Nice story Margaret! ;)

Author's Response: Lol. Glad you liked it. Thanks for the review, PCG.

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