Such a stupid story! What was the point of keeping her in the manor for so many days when you wanted DRACO to kill her and not 'VOLDIE'! Lame! Horrible. And the story name? Bad company? Where is the connection?? Report Review
i'm an author from Hungary, and i really enjoyed your story. i would like to translate and publish it on our fanfic site, would you mind it?
thanks: mb Report Review
Awesome ending it came out of nowhere 10/10 :)Author's Response: Yay! You liked the ending!!! :D Report Review
I give you credit for writing this story. But i have to say it was very confusing for me to read. Through out the chapters i got lost since you bounced from one thing to another thing so quick. Next time slow down and make slow transactions. Also try to describe things better. The ending was very blunt in my opion and could have been a lot longer. Keep trying thought.Author's Response: OK, thanks for your critique! I am trying to rewrite the story, so thanks! Report Review
Props for writing these, i never could...but i think this is one of the worst i have read. Things did not flow properly, and I was often confused as to what was going on, and you moved a little too quickly, perhaps slow down and describe things a little bit more intensly, and the ending...well, if you planned on killing Hermione in the end, you should have made this last chapter a bigger deal, perhaps drag out the killing of her (as terrible as that sounds). But once again, props for writing, and keep on with these, you have talent!!Author's Response: OK, thanks! I'm rewriting this, so I'll keep that in mind. Report Review
EEEK. My brain is still...reeling from the ending.
I don't know if I liked it or not, but..it was very well written!Author's Response: Wow, you liked the writing? People have been telling me it's badly-written. XD Report Review
wat? . ummm okay wat the hell?Author's Response: ? Report Review
I CAN NOT BELIVE YOU KILLED HERMOINE! I really like this story but i thought the ending ruined it and draco and hermoine had sex but he was really with MZ!!! OMG!! I am sorry but i did not like that ending at all!Author's Response: aww, I loved that ending . . . Report Review
Good Job I really like this story i will defintily recomend it to my friends!Author's Response: alright! Report Review
Hey i liked this chapter alot but can i ask a question, Why do you call a chapter a chappy? That is what you are refering to when you say chappy right? idk well great story so farAuthor's Response: I don't know. I just like the word chappy I guess. Report Review
I really don't want to dissapoint you,but i don't really like this story...it just doesn't make any sense to me at all...and to many of the other readers as well.I think you should seriously consider thinking more about what you write,because it seems like you don't really care about what you're writing.You shouldn't rush things,it's not like it's the end of the world or something.No offense..Author's Response: it's ok. Thanks for taking the time to review! I'll work on improving it. Report Review
I liked the bases of the story and the story line its self was good but I think that maybe you went a little too fast. quite often I felt as if I was missing something and also sometimes I got the impression that you were more describing something that had happened to a friend rather than being the charactors. I thought Hermmione wasn't quite herself but that may have been because of the speed the story progressed. Please don't hate me I'm truely trying to help but I think if you maybe slowed it down and made it more detailed you'd be on to a winner. I enjoyed reading it.Author's Response: alright! Thanks for your critique! I'm work on improving it! Report Review
I thought this was a romance? It sure doesn't seem like a romance. I think maybe you should change what type of genre this is.Author's Response: I don't know . . . it's sorta-not-really a romance. Report Review
Unlike, it seems, most of your other reviewers, i think the story was inspiring. Very well written with a evil, but totally right, twist at the end. I object strenously to this apparant dislike at the ending, it is your story, and you wrote it very well. Well done- 10/10, as far as im concerned.
Good for you, im reading your other stories!
SkyeAuthor's Response: wow, thanks alot! Report Review
I still love it! :) I think that it should have been more drawn out but otherwise it was really good. :)
PS 10/10Author's Response: thanks! though I don't think I'll be drawing it out more! I running out of creative juices :) Report Review
im sorry i didnt like itAuthor's Response: aww, that's ok! Maybe you'll like my other stories? Report Review
Well ,when I read this story first I thought this one was boring .But now I think this is golly good!Author's Response: Well, that itself is golly good! Report Review
This chappy's a good one:):):)Author's Response: Thanks! Report Review
Well, it really is hard to understand things somwhere in the middle.Author's Response: I'll look at that chapter and try to "untangle" it, then! Report Review
Okay.I liked the evil MZ but killing Hermione off sucked! The story was well written and good but I didn't like the ending. Oh well...still good like I said.Author's Response: Drat! No one seems to like Hermione's death! Oh well . . . I liked it and that counts, right? Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
wow. at first, when i started reading this, i was like, okay. this is going a little fast, but thats okay. and then i read this last chapter and its like BAM. i;m sorry, but i kinda hated it. mz has no reason to become a death eater, and draco, didn't everyone think he was dead? espically voldemort? so why did he kill hermione? he had absoultly no reason to. and please tell me he didn't feel anything when he kissed hermione, and slept with her. he had to. i mean, he kisses her, and then kils her. how does that work?
and yes, it was a twist. but it was a horrible one. i didn't like it all. and hermione should of been more torn up that ron had died.i mean , he had just propsed to her. she was going to spend the rest of her life with him.
i'm sorry. i dont like this story/chapter at all.Author's Response: thank you for taking all this time to read and critique! I'll try to improve! Report Review
wtf? this whole story is so random.Author's Response: Is it really? Report Review
Not to be rude or anythinq, but this story was NOT qood at all.Author's Response: Why didn't you like it? Report Review
yoo got sum PURE slytherin in yoo :D
an dats wat i like ;)
coz um a PURE slytherin as wwell i got myself sorted at sum website lol
eniway tha story is so effective yet simple :D:P:D
xx PureSlytherinSpite xxAuthor's Response: Thanks! I'm so glad you like it! I'm actually a Ravenclaw, though! ;) Report Review
I'm really sorry to say, but I think that you're story actually wasted like 20 mins of my life. Next time, make it more interesting- at least funny in some parts so that it would actually make it a sad ending + it was VERY confusing- you said Hermione likes Ron and Draco?
Yea, I didn't understand and I didn't enjoy it, sorry! Better luck next time.Author's Response: alright! I'll work on improving! Thank you for your critique! Report Review
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