Hey, have you ever heard the song "Back to December" by Taylor Swift? That's the song I play through my mind when I read this chapter (which is one of my favs in the story) The storyline totally fits, plus her name is December... Anyways, I love this chapter, I love this story, and I love your awesome mind for creating it! Report Review
You do know that 99.99% of teenagers who are ridiculed at school know it will end as they leave, although they know this it does not make it excusable do so they know that it will end, I can assure you that 99.999% of people in England understand this at least because we don't go around shooting all of our class mates because they took the piss as i was one of those who was riduculed you'll find that most of them have hearts of gold because they understand what words can do and.
and the reason why i know your not from England is because time and again you used the word fixing to which is a Texas term if my memory serves me correctly, or at least it comes from that general area.
I know that it may be a jump but just because people had taken the piss out of me and i didn't want to talk to them because of that people assumed that I was anti social and nasty when if they had taken the time to get to know me they would have known that i would be the least likely to be anti social because i had no friends and craved them and one of the nicest people you could meant because I understood what it is like to be mooked constantly.
happy ending though after i left school I was uba popular i mean like 2000 friends popular who i had all spoken to and went around there houses which was more than i could say for the people who had ridiculed me throughout school, like i mean people who would have probably took the mic out of me when i was in school were just thinking who the most popular person was in the gorup and they said it was me densely i though really then realized i was popular which i can tell you was a shock. Report Review
I LOVED this story. One of the best on the site. Please write more on this story and 7th year. A few comments though. This story is in serious need of some editing. Honestly. There were mispelled words everywhere, wrong punctuation, wrong capitalization, and wrong homophones. And its Parvati Patil. Thought it was very creative that Luna turned. Nice work. WRITE MORE PLEASE. Report Review
I dearly love this story. I truly do. But your grammar, I'm sorry to say, is not great. It would be one thing if it only happened once, but there are a few that keep occurring. For one, it is "stunning" and not "stunting." Stunting is a totally different thing. And it is "minutes," unlike "minuets." Again, a different thing. Very good plot line, just please go through and correct a few things. Thanks! Report Review
Good premise for a story, few words spelt incorrectly which is distracting, especially when its characters names (minerva). Report Review
Good story so far! A few accidental spelling mistakes in there but otherwise very good! I loved how dudley found out he should've been at hogwarts! What a great twist.
Only read the 1st so far but I plan on reading this whole story asap! Report Review
Some grammar issues, but overall... okay. No J.K. Rowling, but not even close to the horribleness of Christopher Paolini. Report Review
This whole story is really awesome! I hope you keep on writing this story.Please keep on updating!!! Report Review
Well I just read this entire story in one sitting and I have to say that it is hands down one of the best on thins site. You really seemed to capture the characters and how they would react to certain situations, and I am very happy that I found your stories! Report Review
Stop dragging it out- you're making me lose interest!!! Report Review
That competed with Ronald's Box.
Seriously, it was that good. Report Review
Fantastic. You certainly improve your writing skills near the climax. Report Review
I love it! Thanks for writing. Report Review
Grammar. That is your main fault in writing.
Correct it. Report Review
I love the closing... but what about Occlumency? I need it! Report Review
It's all right. Just... I WANT HAGRID! Report Review
Well, it's OK.
O'Riley sounds like such a Mary Sue. I mean, she's funny, Lily's best friend, and an amazing Occlemenist. You need to learn how to give characters flaws, for every character.
Also, the whole Harry loves Parvati/ Now Harry loves Cho is annoying. Report Review
AAAGGGH! POOR HARRY AND RON!
But seriously. Lupin and Tonks BELONG together. Report Review
It's good. When Snape came and found him I was seriously like, "Oh crap! Run Harry run!" and I was all mad at Snape and stuff.
Good! Report Review
Good. Again with the empathy- you're amazing at that. Report Review
Hermione's annoying, but otherwise acceptable. This story makes me embarrassed for Harry- you're really good at provoking empathy. Report Review
Worst chapter ever. I will read further though. Report Review
HORRIBLE, OVEREMOTIONAL, TACKY, IT'S EVERY BAD THING A STORY COULD BE. Report Review
Short, melodramatic, but altogether okay. Report Review
Good. It was actually satisfactory this time. Report Review
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