Love it! The details were brilliant, and the emotion was so strong and real. You captured Bellatrix's love for Voldemort so perfectly. Definitely going in my favorites. Awesome job! Report Review
Mesmerising and the poem was beautiful :) Report Review
Fantastic! I adored this fic. I was hooked from the first sentence!Author's Response: well thank you Report Review
Wow! I loved it. I expecially liked the line "...but corruption of the soul and mind does not often leave the surface unmarred" it was a really good insight into the mind of a Death Eater who knows she's done awful things but only cares about the one man she loves, and can never have. I liked how you portrayed the differnt emotions Bella has towards Voldemort and how she tries to convince herself she hates him but knows deep down she loves him anyway, despite the pain he has put her though.
I do love Bella/ Voldy!!Author's Response: im truly glad you enjoyed it and got much more out of it than just a crazy heartbreak story :) Report Review
poor bella. he drove her crazy...Author's Response: purdy much, yeah Report Review
Wow. That is probably the most powerful and descriptive one-shot I've ever read. This is the kind of story one-shots should be.
The poem is really well written. I like to write them myself, but they aren't near as good as yours is. The whole story has, of course, descriptions unique to the character, unique to the story. But if you take out the names, it seems almost like it could fit in anywhere, if that makes any sense. It's such a well-written story! I've yet to see a story based entirely on the Mirror of Erised, and I don't think many others can pull off what you did.
Also, side note: I've just noticed this through reading a couple of your stories - you seem well versed in Shakespeare. At least, I've noticed a few allusions. Just a random observation.
I like the whole "different aspects of death" thing, too. Just thought I'd throw that in there.
Amazing story!Author's Response: Thank you very much. I (heart) poetry, if you cannot tell. I thought that keeping it nameless would add a darker aspect to it, as if she has come to a point where names no longer matter... Again, thank you.
Shakespeare, huh? Not particularly, I'm afraid. Report Review
You have a aboustely stunning writing style.
I mean wow.
Your style is so easy to read and I can just invision everything so clearly. This indeed was a great pleasure to read and I'm going to see if you have anything else now.
Just WOW.Author's Response: Oh wow, well thank you very much and I hope you find more stuff you like :) Report Review
I love looking at old fics, and this was no exception.
Its probably pretty accurate of what Bellatrix would see,
10/10Author's Response: well thank you, and yes, i think so as well... Report Review
scary...i like scary...10/10Author's Response: I like scary tooooo!!!! Thankies :D Report Review
good poem i really liked it the story was good toAuthor's Response: Yay! ^.^ Report Review
wow, that was depressing. but on a brighter note, i just ate some chocolate chocolate chip ice cream. yumm!
-peace out my gangsta homiesAuthor's Response: Duuuude!!!! I want chocolate chip icecream!!!! :(
-lookin out got the gs up in b-town fo-shizzle. Report Review
YOU wrote that poem? That's amazing! Great oneshot, btw. Can't forget the actual writng part :PAuthor's Response: Yes I wrote that.... Thank you soooo much, it is one of my alltime favorites of mine.... But thanks, I am glad you enjoyed it. Report Review
OMG how good is this! The poem is so, idk, so empowering and the rest of it is AMAZING!Author's Response: I am squeeing! Awwww, thank you sooo much! I really like this one, too, it takes such a different angle.... I adore different angles... Report Review
That was a really gripping short story and I really loved your poem at the end!Author's Response: Awww, muchos gracias, mi amiga! *hug* I like the poem, too, I wrote it a while before it inspired me to make the story... Report Review
wow! this was really well thought out, and written! I don't exactly understand all of it but I like it all the same. Author's Response: Awwwww, muchos gracias. It means a lot to me. I really liked this one shot, I thought it expressed dying agony very well... Report Review
This has got to be one of the saddest stories I have read... I love it but it's just so depressing, miserable, gloomy... all that jazz... very well writen - I loved it very much!!! Oh and the poem? I Loved that too... :)Author's Response: WAHOOO!!! I'm glad you enjoyed it!!!! Report Review
WOAH FREAKY!!!!!! thats awesome...great poem thingy.Author's Response: .....thingy. ^o) Right anyways thanks though. Lol I've always liked it... Report Review
Wow! You never cease to amaze me!! Your writing and your similies have matured and become so much deeper and more mysterious. You truly are an amazing writer and I look forward to the day I can be as good as you. The only thing I suggest you work on is the flow of your poetry. To a normal person, you sound great. But to a well versed poet it's a bit choppy. I like the repettive "mirror mirror" though, that sounds very good abu some of the stanzas don't fit your syllable patter so well. All in all another beautiful story and I hope you keep getting better!Author's Response: Thank you!! Lol I love being able to post my writing like this because it shows my writing progression since I've started, you know? And to think that all this has only been posted within 8 months!!! Lol... And I happen to think that my writing has deepened, too. Fanfiction is a SUPER way to practice writing. None of the non-fanficcers believe me when I say that, but it's true!! But, omg thank you soooo much!! I feel honored to be looked up to by anyone, let alone the magnitude of people that admire my work.
If there's anything I can't stand about poetry, though, It's the meters and scales. To me, poetry is about expression of what you really feel and having famboyant disregard for rules as you do so. It's about feeling and passion, not meter and balance lol. Although balance in poetry is bloody lovely. I, also, liked the repitition of the poem.... All in all, thanks so much for your review!!! Report Review
"I wanted to consume him, flesh and soul, so that he and I were one and he could never leave me. So that when I died he’d know my misery, too. " <---This line... this line.. is amazing.. this line gave me goosebumps... I can't explain.. but when I read this.. it brought back to me.. the way I have felt. And the endnig is sheer beauty. The whole story is hauntingly descriptive and leaves a feeling of phantasmagoria that I can't shake.Author's Response: ...you think? I sort of thought it was almost poetic, really.... And, no way did it give you goospebumps!!! lol... And, I love that you described the story using "phantasmagoria," it makes it so more.... juicy, dare I say? And, that's also a favorite word of mine lol.... Report Review
Wow...Wow... Wow... That was amazing. Awesome poem. Your writing is wicked!Author's Response: Thank you. And YAY I'm so glad you like my poem.... I wrote that ages ago.... Report Review
Wow.Author's Response: That's a good 'wow' right? Report Review
I like how you wrote an accompaning poem, and I think you wrote this very well. I really like the idea that Bellatrix was in love with Voldemort, in some strange twisted relationship. Slightly disturbing, but extremely good imagery.Author's Response: Actually, I wrote the poem BEFORE I wrote the story. Just so you know. And anyways thanks. I always thought that love would be a good motive for Bellatrix to go evil lol... But yes I wanted it to be disturbing but yet artful at the same time.... Report Review
Whoa...Author's Response: Lol I'm taking it that's good? Report Review
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