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Review #1, by firefawn Realizing II - Luna

21st February 2007:
*chuckles* There was a nice symmetry with this chapter, since it went along nicely with the first one. I like the idea of using different viewpoints to show what is going on from each character's point of view, so great work on that note. I also enjoyed the detail at the beginning of the chapter, regarding the birds chirping and everything, very much. Excellent job, and I look forward to the next chapter. The only constructive feedback that I have for this chapter is that the chapter was very good, and I realy want to read more, thus, if possible, having longer chapters (not by a lot, but just a little longer) would be wonderful. :)

Author's Response: Oh thank you!
I'll try and get a new one out soon, and hopefully it can be a bit longer.
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Review #2, by firefawn Realizing - Ron

21st February 2007:
Excellent starting chapter! First you manage to give us all a quick synopsis, in the first person point of view (which one rarely sees done) and having that point of view in this story makes for a refreshing read. :) I also like how you had Ron sort of 'bond' with Luna due to their common mindset regarding how neither would let the bad things ruin the future. I particularly found this line funny:
A small smile played on her very, very kissable- Bloody hell.
This line was good to:
And, she’s a Ravenclaw! Me and smart people don’t go well together.
The only constructive feedback that I can give is that when Hermione comes in, it is not 100% clear about what she is talking about in regards to staining the couch, considering that it is already torn to bits. You may want to go back and add a few more details just to make that point a bit more crystal clear for us sleep-deprived readers (like myself) that are having trouble connecting the dots. Great work on this chapter, and I found Ron's denial of having a crush right up until the ending line to be very humorous.

Author's Response: Oh thank you so much! : )
I'll try and fix it,
Thank you so much for reading!
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Review #3, by Lassy_Luna (Not logged in.) Realizing II - Luna

28th October 2005:
*Is still eagerly waiting for the next chapter.* Luna

Author's Response: Lol. I'll try and update as soon as I can!

♥Katie

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Review #4, by Urvi Realizing II - Luna

20th September 2005:
Aww Loony has a crush! So cute!

Author's Response: Lol. Thanks. I'll try and get the next chapter out as soon as I can!

♥Katie

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Review #5, by Emotionless Realizing - Ron

30th August 2005:
new story!!! YAY!

Author's Response: Thanks!

♥Katie

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Review #6, by Loveless Realizing - Ron

30th August 2005:
this was really good

Author's Response: Thanks!

♥Katie

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Review #7, by Loveless Realizing - Ron

30th August 2005:
this was really good.

Author's Response: Thanks!

♥Katie

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Review #8, by Charity Realizing - Ron

30th August 2005:
this was really good! I loved it

Author's Response: Thanks!

♥Katie

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Review #9, by Lassy_Luna Realizing - Ron

19th August 2005:
Oh, I absolutly love it! I was smiling all the way through-- it's just like an exciting commentry into Ron's thoughts. And the closing line was just soooo cute. I loved this little section; "I have to stop thinking about her this way! It’s not healthy! She’s strange, and she’s Ginny’s friend." I can just see Ron saying something like that! So pleased that you decided to do this challenge! Luna

Author's Response: :D, thatnks so much! I'll get the next chapter out as soon as I can, but this time it'll be in Luna's POV.

♥Katie

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Review #10, by mizzlovegood Realizing - Ron

18th August 2005:
Ron and Luna rock!

Author's Response: Thanks.

♥Katie

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Review #11, by Urvi Realizing - Ron

18th August 2005:
Aww...Ron and Luna always seem adorable to me. I like how you had Ron in first person because I don't get to read those often. I'm looking forward to reading more. Please update!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Next chapter'll be in Luna's POV.

♥Katie

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