Hi. Um, not to be rude here, or anything, but your spelling and grammar kinda sucks!! Maybe you should get a beta, or read through your stuff? That way you can focus on the story. In the first chapter you used "u" and "Y" as words...This isn't an email, or chat or whatever, it's a fic...it can get kinda annoying if you're reading that all the time. It sort of gives the impression dat you don't reli care about your writing, and dat you are rushing it. Put a little more effort in! Otherwise, some of the lines were very cute.

Author's Response: sorry about that i'll try to better

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so i am the author sorry for not writing for so long trying to avoid it lol well if any one reads this know i am starting the 3rd chapter and it should be up soon hang in there please if any one is still reading my story

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so i am the author sorry for not writing for so long trying to avoid it lol well if any one reads this know i am starting the 3rd chapter and it should be up soon hang in there please if any one is still reading my story

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so i am the author sorry for not writing for so long trying to avoid it lol well if any one reads this know i am starting the 3rd chapter and it should be up soon hang in there please if any one is still reading my story

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i like this!!!

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ooohh this is gonna be gd

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This is the cooliest! ~Drunkies

Author's Response: y thank you

Author's Response: y thank you

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RAWR.

Author's Response: u annoy me some times

Author's Response: u annoy me some times

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me thinks you need to sort our the spelling of some of your words...*cough* abudected? is that meant to be abducted? other then that this is excellent, i like the idea of harry and co. becoming marauders!

Author's Response: sry i suck at spelling i'll try to work at it

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This has a pretty good plot line, I like it! Please continue!

Author's Response: i will thank you

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Quittage? you have errors, but don't we all. Its an OK chp. Not to be mean, but it needs exitment. The next chp will probably be some cause they are going to change into mauraders so that should be interesting. Wait, but y do they have to change? lol. nvm that. Just keep writing and this story should mold into what u want it to be Ok? Its pretty good you just need something. I dunno. WEll Update soon!

Author's Response: leave me alone i can't spell and u know that it's gonna get interesting hopefully and they have to change b/c i said so and i am the author arn't i lol ttyl

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Hurry and Update SOON!!!! Ur doing an awesome job! Oh and ur welcome for reviewing! :D

Author's Response: thank u again and i'll try to update soon

Author's Response: thank u again and i'll try to update soon

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You know u love me. lol Heres your sign!

Author's Response: yeah right here's your sign lol

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u complain my chp is short, when urs is even shorter. hmmm something aint right there. jk. Keep writing. It will get better. It will! REmeber the Ducks! They will help. Oh and sry 4 this long review ur other reader must be thinking? man does this person know hogwartsgirlhg? the answer is YES. lol

Author's Response: blah blah u suck may the ducks be with you and write more to your stories too i have a thing telling people to read yours in my next chapter so don't make me regret telling them to read it lol see ya later

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Looks interesting. waiting for more since this is at least the one u wanted.

Author's Response: i'll be up dating soon sry for the wait

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please write more

Author's Response: will do

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put some punctuation in and capitalize your letters and maybe it won't give me a headache just to read it.

Author's Response: I'll try sorry if I gave you a headache

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hey, this is great. if I could just make one suggestion: please spell out 'know' 'you' and 'your'. it gets kind of confusing sometimes. Also, just to let you know the conversation between Harry and Sirius seemed a bit hurried. there's no need to rush the fic. Other than that I really liked it. I liked the idea the Harry could at least talk to Sirius one more time. It's a good concept, I hope you keep it going. Update soon! :) p.s if my comments offended you in any way... my bad I was just trying to be helpful.

Author's Response: thank u i'll try to write out my words and sorry if it seemed a bit rushed i'll try going slower in my next chapter keep reading

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HI!

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Great

Author's Response: thanks so much i really apriciate it

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Hi Hg! It was pretty good. Needs more, like whats the word....Chapters! lol. I'll be waiting. oh and it was a good first chapter. I'll tell u more what it needs and stuff this weekend in preson. So much better that way. lol. and YAY u wrote one Yay. lol Love yeah, LL

Author's Response: thanks for the advice see ya later

Author's Response: thanks for the advice see ya later

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