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Review #1, by Carol A flurry of owls

16th February 2006:
lauri, I am a retired English Teacher and as I read this chapter I was aware of many miss uses of several of the words you attempt to use. The most common word that you need to be aware of is THEIR. It is a personal pronoun and used to refer to one or more people In you chapter it should have been used when writing about a third party. Your sentence "I sat under there" should be I sat under THEIR tall figures etc. Notive the difference. THERE is a place as in There is the Book, while THEIR

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Review #2, by midnight fire Diagon Alley~An eventful shop

31st August 2005:
i like kai's personality keep going with the chapters.

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