This is one of the sweetest short stories I have read.
It's really beautiful, and you write veeery well ^^
100/10Author's Response: Thank you :) I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
WHy have you suddenly changed from 95 to 96?
It's confusing... :/Author's Response: Sorry, that was a mistake on my part. 96 is supposed to be 95. Report Review
Okay, this story was AWESOME! I've been glued to the computer reading it for... oh man... I have no idea how long! lol Keep writing, make a book!!! Author's Response: Wow, thanks a lot :) I'm glad you liked it. I'm half thinking of doing another FA last year story, so keep your eyes peeled ;) Report Review
So good! You have a real writing talent! Author's Response: Thank you. Report Review
Haha. Fleur... Report Review
' He turned around, and when he spotted her running towards him, he opened his arms. “Hi dad!” she said as brightly as she could possibly muster as he wrapped his arms around her. “Where’s mum?” she asked.' You need to capitalize 'Mum' and 'Dad'. But other than that, your self-betaing was well done. The ending was so sweet and cute that I think I'm simply covered in the sugary sweetness of it. I like this so much!Author's Response: Aw, thank you! *cookies and hugs* The names of relatives always screws me up ... I know the rules, but I never pick them up =P And yay for fluff! Report Review
' January 21, 1997
Girl’s Dormitories ' You didn't bold that part. 'ANY sort of useful information the teacher’s could’ve passed us is now forbidden by the old bint, a rule I consider most unhelpful and stupid!' Also, in there you do not need the apostrophe. I liked how emotional that leaving bit was.Author's Response: More bolded things missed. Not surprising. And I see where the un-needed apostrophe is now, too. Thanks! Report Review
Aww. Mam and Pap sound so cute! I like how Angelina is happy she's leaving school. If I could have the change to be a witch and go to Hogwarts, I'd do so anyday, but your wiritng of Angelina's thoughts towards school sound so ordinary but fitting. Good chatper!Author's Response: Thanks. =) I'd so go to Hogwarts in a heartbeat as well. It'd be awesome, eh? Report Review
What did Angelina try? I'm interested to know. . . And McGonagall catch them?? Good chapter, even though I'm left slightly confused. Author's Response: It was one of their inventions ... I probably should've made that and the rumour thing (which wasn't true, by the way) clearer, eh? I'll do that. Report Review
Ooh! I like how Fred encourages Elisha to 'read on and find out', as he says. That's nice and supportive of him, even though his thoughts of Angelina sadden him. Good chapter!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
That. Was. So. Cute. But in between here '
Bloody.Freaking.Hell.' You forgot to bold it.Author's Response: Thanks! I forgot to bold lots of things, though, didn't I? I'll need to go back sometime and bold them all. Thanks for the heads up! Report Review
You try to stick to canon so it works for me. I like it. This chapter is amusing.Author's Response: The cannon was the worst part of the story for me. The Lexicon was constantly open. Report Review
I like how Fred is so affecionate towards Elisha. That's such a adorable father/daughter relationship. Good chapter.Author's Response: I've always liked cute father/daughter relationships, they make me smile. Report Review
Poor guy. Good first chapter. I would usually write more, but this chapter seems fine.Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it and took the time to review =D Report Review
Oh my great Thanksgiving Gravy!!! This is wow! I nearly cried with Fred's depatrture... Gosh, he's my favorite twin!!! Can't wait for the next chappie!~Kait Hobbit Author's Response: I'm pretty sure I was near tears writing it, although I did enjoy doing so. Drama is so much fun. Thanks for taking the time to review, though! Report Review
AWWWWW!so sweet and it is just so sweet!Author's Response: Aw, thank you! Report Review
Yay! He showed up! Is this the last chapter?Author's Response: =D I despise sad endings, of course he showed up! And yes, it is the last chapter. Maybe I'll add an epilogue when I re-write it, though. Oh, and thanks for the review! Report Review
I love this story, it's such a good idea. Update soon!Author's Response: Aw, thanks! The final chapter is in limbo right now, so it'll be out soon! Report Review
I love these entries and you have to upate soon, this story is just so fantastic and unique... I mean there's thousands of Harrry/Ginny stories, and Ron/Hermione but this is one of the only Fred stories and it's just fantastic!!! Update soon!!!~Kait Hobbit Author's Response: I <3 F/A stories, but there never seems to be enough of them! Thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
lol, another fantastic chappter!!! Author's Response: Thankies. :-) Report Review
You know I'm pretty sure all of her diary entires about Quidditch would be somewhere about those lines!!! Fantastic Story!Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I like sports, and it makes them easy to write about!
=D Report Review
Aw, I love Fred!!!! Author's Response: Isn't he cute? Report Review
He looked at me. “So you’re saying that you don’t fancy Fred, but Alicia thinks that he fancies you, and you are revolted about this, yet you think he is good looking.” don't ask me why, but I think that line is so funny!!!! This is such a great story, and i love Angelina's entries!~Kait Hobbit
Author's Response: =) Thank you! I was particularly proud of that secret. Report Review
Aw, Fred is such a good dad! It's hard to imagine him though with out that little impish grin in his eyes with out Angelina,... you're doing an exellent job on this story!!Author's Response: Aw, thank you! It is though isn't it? It seems like he's a whole 'nother character.
Technically, though, he kinda is. Report Review
Okay, I've read this story already, but I was to lazy to review so better late the never right? I really liked this story!!! You feel so Sorry for Fred and Elisha, *sigh* Best go on to review the next chappie eh? Bravo!!~Kait Hobbit Author's Response: Always better late than never =) I'm glad you liked it -- I actually had fun writing this chapter, dispite how depressing it is, because, well action-y chapters filled with emotion are always fun to write =D Report Review
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