I love you more and more with each story of your's i read. :)
You are a great writer. I just hope you write more than just at hpff. You really could write something much bigger you know.
Take care.Author's Response: That means so much to hear, thank you! It's brilliant to hear that these stories, old as they are for me, are being appreciated so much. ^_^
I do write originals and stuff for other fandoms, but rarely, and usually secretly. ;) Those original novels I have ideas for will one day be written. Thank you so much for the compliment! Report Review
Wow, just wow. I saw the banner for this story in your signature on the forums, so I rushed to your Author's Page to try to find it. This story is just amazing. It really sums up James and Lily and exactly why I love the ship so much.
Just a few things to point out, in your title, the I in Fire is capitalized, which I don't think was on purpose. :P
Also, it seemed to me that you used the word "kiss" one too many times during that little scene, so if there's a way to replace one or two of them, I think it would flow a bit better.
I really loved this story. And it looks like you're quite the popular author, so I'll have to check out the rest of your stories as well!
DemAuthor's Response: Really? It wasn't supposed to be the banner for that story initially, but I couldn't think of a better plot to fit the banner. It's a great surprise that you went to find the story that matched the signature! :D
It could be capitalized on purpose... you never know. ;) You're the first person in. five years? to tell me that, so you definitely need an award. Thanks for pointing thta out!
I wasn't looking to edit the story at all - it's in pristine teenaged-me condition. Not that I can, at the moment, think of another way of saying "kiss" without rewriting the whole scene with my current style, and with so many other stories in the works right now, this one is long forgotten. It's a very good point you've made, and something I myself follow these days. :)
Popular in some ways more than others. but thank you for saying that all the same! I do hope that it's true!
Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review this story! I really appreciate hearing from you! :D Report Review
wow. that was amazing, susan. quite short, but i think any longer and it would have spoiled it. it was basiacally perfect. at the beginning i wondered if it would be a cliche, but that sentence where james sees her as human ... wow, i just loved that. and from there til the end, i was sitting here with shivers going down my spine and - don't judge me - tears nearly coming to my eyes. beautifully handled, wonderfully written.Author's Response: Wow, thank you, Em! I think it a cliched little story, but it does have its redeeming moments, showing Lily and James connect on an emotional level, coming to understand one another in a different way because of a tragic situation. I always imagined them coming together because of the war, though perhaps not necessarily over her parents' deaths.
It's wonderful that you enjoyed this. Thank you so much for coming to read and review. ^_^ Report Review
I read some reviews and you thought it was cliche!... no way! It's only a one-shot.. you have to get through things quickly. :)
I really liked this :) I am such a huge James and Lily fan. I love reading scenes where they get together. It makes my heart swell.
I would really like to see the same story from Lily's perspective. That would be so interesting. I really wanted to know what she was thinking throughout the whole thing.
James really is the biggest sweetheart. That line that you used where it tore at his heart... oh lord.. I practically died. It makes me so happy that they were able to get past their differences and live happily ever after [for 3 years. sigh :(]
Oh great.. now I have thought about their deaths. gah!
Anyways, I'm getting off track. I really liked this. I know everyone hates cliche - but I don't really think it's too bad.. plus I'm just a hopeless romantic and will love anything anyone does about how Lily and James get together.
That's why I'm writing one myself.
I loved Sirius and Remus. Loved how he was cat-calling and Remus then pushing him into the bush. Hilarious!
Also, I noticed that you eluded that Sirius didn't know how many girls were after him. That is a very different Sirius than I mostly read! A very nice change! :)
Anywayyy, loved your story. 10/10 for sure.
sorry this review is a bit all over the place.Author's Response: Yes, you are right - it is a one-shot, and an old one at that, initially written to prove that the Lily/James ship was the best ship out there. (but I still think it's a wee bit on the cliched side, sorry :P I'm too much of a lit snob, haha).
But it is wonderful that you enjoyed it, taking the time to both read and review. ^_^ Telling the story from Lily's side would be interesting, and quite a challenge for me to write (I do like challenges). She's one of those characters who I write a lot about, but never from her perspective, I guess because her character is so... vague in canon.
The other Marauders make this story worth it (for me). :D They're so silly and ridiculous, pretty normal for teenaged boys, I suppose, haha. For Sirius, I stuck with canon for safety, trying to maintain what JKR had revealed about younger Sirius in the Pensieve. I'm glad you liked that characterization of him. :)
Thank you very much for this review! It's not all over the place for me, just really nice to read. ^_^ Report Review
That was beautiful.
Absolutely beautiful !Author's Response: Thank you! :) Report Review
Trust Sirius to make a joke out of everything. Truly priceless, I say. I like how you have portrayed the marauders.
Cheers.Author's Response: Thanks! Sirius is a laugh to write. ;) Report Review
That was really good!!! Can you do Harry/Ginny storys with a rating of 12+ pleasse cause you would be good at them!Author's Response: If I could actually bother myself to start liking Harry (and write a story that didn't demonize/kill him off in the end), I might be able to do so.
But... Harry is my least favourite character in the series, so I'm very sorry to say that I can't follow your advise, as happy as I am to receive it. :P Report Review
i love it!! fantastic story!Author's Response: Thank you! =D Report Review
I really liked the ending, like the last paragraph. It finished things off nicely. For the second half of this story, I think you could have slowed down a bit. Things happened very fast and it might have been nice to just sit back and take things slow for a moment, take time to get your head around what was happening and where the story was going. Does that make sense? Some just seemed a bit rushed is what I mean.
Hope you get what I'm saying.
NellieAuthor's Response: Oh yes, this story. *grimmaces* It's old and cliched and too fast, just like you said. I totally understand what you're saying because Lily goes from crying to kissing and it's very unrealistic. It's definitely rushed, but like it's still good that you liked the very ending - bit of poeticness coming through there. ;) Thank you very much for taking the time to review. :) Report Review
Wow... This was amazing. Your writing is so beautiful, and I loved: 'Watching Lily Evans cry tore at the muscle in my chest which beat only for her.' That was so... beautiful! I have no better word for it. Perhaps a bit clished, but such a wonderful and brilliant written clishe that it doesn't matter. Plus, I don't think anything you write will ever turn out to be too clished, because you are such an amazing writer. I truly admire you. This made me cry and smile at the same time, because even though Lily lost her parents, muggles are dying and the darkness is nearing, love will always be there, no matter what.Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! ^_^ This is a horribly cliched story, but I guess it is still a bit touching, haha. You're much too sweet, and I don't know what else to say except to thank you again for this review. =D Report Review
ur such a great writerAuthor's Response: Thanks! Report Review
ummm wow violet this was purely magic I loved the description and the ending never change this one bit.Author's Response: Wow, thanks very much. :) I'm glad you liked it. Report Review
I've always wondered why Lily's -- or James', for that matter -- parents were never mentioned in the books. This allows for some imagination, and it really was a simple, and well written, short episode. It wasn't too mushy, nor did Lily and James come out of character. So, brilliant job! I knew your writing had to be as good as your graphics (: Paisley.Author's Response: Thanks very much, Paisley! ^_^ I'm glad to hear that it turned out alright - this is probably one of my most cliched stories, and more fluffy than I prefer, but it's great to know that you enjoyed it. ^_^ Report Review
"Cute" hardly seems to do justice, but it's all I could think as I read this. It was full of sorrow, yet at the end, there's a glimmer of hope.Author's Response: Thanks very much, silver phoenix. I'm glad that you enjoyed the story. =) Report Review
i loved this story!!!
it was so sweet!!
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10/10Author's Response: Thank you. =) Report Review
that story was so good
i loved it.Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. ^_^ Report Review
That was really good! Shame it was a one-shot. I wanted it to go on. lol But anyway, good job!Author's Response: Thanks very much! =) Report Review
You made me cry... you made me cry! Ugh, that was so good. I love your writing style, it is just perfect. Please write more Lily and James' fics becase this was just amazing. I am going to look for more.Author's Response: Thank you very much. Sorry for making you cry, but that was rather the point of this story. =P Perhaps I'll write more J/L stories when the inspiration hits me. ;-) Report Review
That was possibly the best one-shot I've ever read. -tosses over virtual trophey- Great job. Author's Response: Aww, thanks so much! I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed it. =) Report Review
It's very sweet and well written, but I found it a little strange that a young girl who has just been informed her parents have just both been murdered would be in any state to be kissing someone or starting up a relationship. I understand the idea of James comforting her and that leading to a kiss, etc, but it seemed slightly flippant. Author's Response: It's just supposed to be a cute story highlightling the ship - I probably wasn't thinking much about the psychological side of things. =P Thanks for your feedback. Report Review
Awww! So Sweet!Author's Response: Thanks very much! ^_^ Report Review
I’ll gladly leave a review to this! Oh, it’s so romantic. *Warning! Fluffy material, huge amounts of gushing and girlie giggle, mingled with some muffled sobs ahead! * Omg, that was fantastic! Oh, James is so nice, and Sirius so funny :P and Remus so sensible, I can just suffocate them in a group hug! Sorry, maybe it’s time to skip to the serious part now. No pun intended, of course. (Do you think the pun or the ‘no pun intended’ part is more cliched?!)
Now, if my memory serves, this was a challenge, right? Right, you did it great! Everybody was in canon. The ending line is brilliant (I say that all the time about your fics, must be a pattern, GASP, this must be your signature, am I right?). Oh, just a question. Why do you stick to one statement in all of your fics? In Following the Footsteps and here you say that Remus likes Lily. This is great, but do you do it on purpose? Because I, for example, experiment and change stuff in every fic I write. Yeah, that’s intriguing… Certainly it is, Watson!
So, here’s MY ending line! Let your heart write on your behalf! (Eek, that turned out great!)Author's Response: Yes, this was for a challenge, and in the final voting (because that's the sort of challenge it was), somehow it got an honourable mention. With all it's cute fluffiness (which is not at all like me), I honestly wonder how it did. It's definitely WAFF material, though I did try to add some humour, particularily with Sirius, who is a downright goof, but a cute one. ^_^One-line endings are, I suppose, another signature of mine. They often seem to appear in my writing - sometimes for impact and for humour at others. And yes, I am a bit of a Remus/Lily shipper and I do rather see it as a canon ship (timeturner strikes me down at saying that, but it's true) or at least a sort of unrequitted love thing. =P It's not really on purpose, it just comes out because it's in my head. Does that make any sense? Most of the patterns in my stories would be better studied by a psychologist - the patterns just appear. I'm glad the characters were canon, though. With the majority of my stories, I try to stick to canon as much as possible, even though sometimes it's hard to keep up to date with any changes. =)Thanks very very much for the great review, Lyn. I really appreciate all the reviews you've given to me and it's great that you've enjoyed the stories as well. =) Report Review
Wow, that was SO beautifully written. A lot of people would write a fic about Lily and James and it would usually have some usual, everyday scene, but this - you chose the correct setting, the right mood - and it made it perfect. You captured the emotions of the characters and transferred them to paper - well, to a computer screen, actually - and I applaud you. On a lighter note, this story was flipping awesome, to put it bluntly. Author's Response: *blush* Thanks very much for your very kind words. I really don't know what to say, your review has left me quite speechless. It's wonderful that you liked the story so much. =) Report Review
Beautiful..... I usually dont read LE/JP stories but i read this fic coz you wrote it *blushes* Great, Great GREAT story. By the way, Thank you for making me that wonderful banner, i'm totally grateful for it. Also, I wondered if you could make me a chapter banner if it isnt too much trouble. The details are in the Dark Arts Forum, under 'Something Random'. I hope you can do it!Author's Response: Awww, thanks so much, Misty. I'm glad you liked the story. =) Report Review
That is a really warm tell. Like hot coco on a winter's day. You know? Brilliant. Well Done! Bravo... i could go on all day here... excellent...Author's Response: Thank you very much. ^_^ Report Review
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