You might want to use some more capitalization in the summary and chapter titles.

Author's Response: thanks, i'll have to fix that

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sad. That kinda reminds me about me attempting to get this guy. but I haven't actually talked to him about what I want. But my eyes do... Ok I'm a total sap...

Author's Response: heehee aren'y we all? anway, thanks for the review!

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That's sad. I wonder what he had to tell her? Is it different from confessing that he has her diary?

Author's Response: oh he'll tell her that, and that he loves her... it's just a question of how she will react...

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Oh dear. I hope she doesn't freak out too much! You've made James out to be such a sweetie pie. I don't want him to be hurt!

Author's Response: don't worry, she will come around eventually

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awe, cute dialog. Lily's finally seeing that James doesn't have everything perfect, and he isn't so arrogant. I'm pretty impatient for him to crack open that diary!

Author's Response: eventually, eventually... maybe... or he could just do the smart thing and giv it back to her... although when has james ever been smart?

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Lily's right, James is pretty dumb. But it was funny, so that makes it okay. :-)

Author's Response: yes, he is... but we all still love him anyway

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I can definitely see James and Sirius lighting a bed on fire!

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I'm feeling some heavy foreshadowing as to a relationship between Riley and Sirius. I love the name Riley, by the way. Great chapter!

Author's Response: thank you! i'm gldd you liked it! riley is named after one of my best friends... she's a litle crazy too

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I love Lily and James stories! This one seems like a good one so far. On to the next chapter!

Author's Response: aww.. thank you! and thank you for all your reviews! you don't know how happy it made me to open my e mail and see all those new review messages!

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absolutely wondeful! it was a lovely story, wondefuly briliant absolutely spiffing i loved it!

Author's Response: thanks, im glad you liked it!!

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haha...really liked their prank...very marauder-style, actually! i love this story, update soon!

Author's Response: i hope to be updating soon, i have been working on my other story which just got rejected for being to short, even though i said it was only a prologue... anyways, glad youy like what i have here so far, i might just go write the next chapter now...

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dun dun dun! revenge! i would leave a longer reveiw but i'm off to read the next!

Author's Response: revenge is sweet isn't it? glad you are still reading my story!

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wow, intense chapter! i really liked how you ended it. beautifully blunt.---“Hey Lily?” he said, turning around. “What?” “Thanks.” ----great job.

Author's Response: thank you, i really appreciate reviews.

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this one made me laugh out loud....people in my house were looking at me strangely, seriously! i loved the broom incident, here was my favorite line---“That,” Lily laughed, “was probably one of the stupidest things you’ve ever done.”---great chapter!

Author's Response: i do that all the time too, but my family doesn't even bother to look anymore, they know i am strange

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oh, a cliffie! can't wait to read the next!

Author's Response: glad you like it!

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great job! i picked a favorite line from this one, too.--- "Oh it’s you” Riley said distastefully, “Never mind then.” ---that cracked me up...i like this riley girl!

Author's Response: she is one of my fav.s too... and she is fun to write about. she kinda reminds me of amy in your story, which i have just finished reading.

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good start! i will keep reading.

Author's Response: thanks :D

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E comes next, not A.

Author's Response: thanks, i have been wondering, i shall have to go back and fix it some time...

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wow....i really like your writing....please keep at!

Author's Response: i'm glad you like it!!!

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Um, I don't know it I have reviewed this or not, but you need to update your story!!! Oh, an I posted chapter 6 on the Chronicles of Betrayal. Please read it.. Anyway, update!!!

Author's Response: I'll update, sometime. lately government essays have been stealing all my writing time.

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lol its funny

Author's Response: thanks!

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Awe, how sweet! I love this story. Sorry that I haven't reviewed in a while. I am posting chapter 6 on the Chronicles of Betrayal. Please review it... ~Token

Author's Response: thank you! im glad you like it! i shall go read and review this new chapter :D

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wow. that was really good. when you reviewed my story i thought i'd check you out, see if you had written any, and i'm glad i did, coz THIS STORY ROCKS!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: thank you! your story was good too!

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good job!!!

Author's Response: thank you thank you!

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i'm taking a liking to this story :D keep it up ^__^ oh and get a poster!!

Author's Response: thanks, i hope to be updating soon! i was thinking about getting one soon actually... hmm...

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