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Review #1, by Accio_Ron harsh words, hurt feelings and tears

15th June 2005:
I really liked that chapter. Your description on the floo was excellent. To be honest, I wasn't sure if I liked how you used "you" instead of "she" at first, but then I decieded that I do like it (I'm kinda fickle). I think its a great imagery tool for me, it sort of helps me to imagine the setting better. You did do very well on this chapter. I would love to give you any help that you need! What sort of story is this going to be? (Sorry, I don't know what catigory you placed it in. I just cliked on your name in my reviews to get to your stories). Just let me know and I will try my best to give you some ideas! AND, rupertinspires me made my banner and did an amazing job at it. You can go to the dark arts section of this website (go to contact, then to frequently asked questions, then to how do I get a banner?, then go to the Dark Arts link. You'll be able to find the pen name and the navigation of the site isn't complicated and I'm sure that she'll make you one if you request it). Email me at nenya_of_water@hotmail.com with your ideas for this story. I would be more than happy to help out!

Author's Response: Well its good to hear that you liked it!! Well i know how i want things to go but just to get it there, well thats where i need the help. Its kinda a romance story but its more than just romance. Things will happen like relationships will be in ruins, friendships will be in jepordy, friends will become more than friends and i have thousands of things running through my mind and i don't know which ones to use!! Its just i really am having trouble on how i want it to continue at this point! well an advise or ideas are welcome!! Thanks again!!!

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Review #2, by Accio_Ron begining of something new

8th June 2005:
Well, you aked me to read and I did! :D Let me just say first, that I really like the plot of this story and I think that it has really excellent potential. I love that she was warned about the twins. LOL! Here are some criticisms that I have to offer: Make sure that you capitolize the first letter of a sentence, your sentences are a little choppy, so make them longer, adding commas. Also, the story would be eaiser to read, if you had smaller, but more paragraphs. So...I hope I was helpful and I hope that I was nice about it. I don't think anybody has ever asked me to read their stories and offer criticism, so I hope I did okay. Honestly though, this chapter is really unique and I can't wait to see where you go with it! Great Job so far and keep them coming and I'll keep reading them!!!! :) :) :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing!! You were nice about the comments you gave. The points you made were helpful. Thanks again for you help and if you have ideas and want to share them i'd be glad to have tham and i will give you credit for tham in the story! Oh if you know anyone who could make a great banner, please let me know so i can see if i can get one! Thanks again!!!

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