Nice beginning, I especially like the last line, very J.K. I'm also very glad you like my story, and am honored that I inspired you to write your story. My only suggestion to you would be to maybe include a little more description to help enhance the dialogue. Good work!Author's Response: thxs alot ur right it did need some more description. I was just so eager for people to read it that i didnt take my time next chapter will be better also when will chapter 16 be here? hehe Report Review
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