Reading Reviews for Helpless
3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Caranaraf Diagon Alley

16th October 2006:
so far I really like your story and I'm very curious where everything is leading to... but one thing: calling ellie "teenage beauty" all the time seems very odd to me.Doing it once or twice is ok but it's just too much. Try to find other names you could call her or just stick with ellie/elizabeth/other nicknames, she, the girl... if you want "the young girl", "the whatever girl" but telling the reader again and again about her beauty is just extremly mary-sue-ish and is definitely not adding to a good style. beside this your doing just fine so keep on writing...and update soon... PLEASE!!! :o)

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Review #2, by Echo Damsel in distress

5th May 2005:
Good story, i really liked it! But i want to kneo whay she was mad!!!!

Author's Response: hey thx I know i know you will find out in chapter 2!!

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Review #3, by flipsides Damsel in distress

5th May 2005:
hi, i like the chapter. can't wait to read the next one. keep up the great work. ^_^

Author's Response: thanks for the review you rock!

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