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1 Reviews Found

Review #1, by FriendofMolly 

1st September 2017:
DonT,
I've always wanted to go to Hawaii. Magical Hawaii is even better. This was a wonderful chapter but it did have some grammatical errors. Also the female aviator's name was Amelia, not Emelia. The reality Harry was trying to elude was the Dursleys not the Dudley's. You might want to find a Beta reader.
Keep going,
FoM

Author's Response: That was what i thought, but some reason when i was looking it up i think i might of made an error. And OMG, can't believe i mess the Dursleys up. No need for beta reader, I think your helping out more. :) As always thank you for your comments.

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