9 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Pheonix Potioneer 

20th May 2016:
Just read the entire thing in one day, and it is brilliant! Keep up the great work!

Selenia's death was devestating! Never expected that.

So... I can't help but think that everyone is missing some big thing as to Stannous's intentions. For example, when he kidnapped Rose, I understand using crucio flagnate on her and releasing her to show that she is the girl in the prophecy. But if he thinks he is the father, why didn't he sexually assault her? Did he honestly care enough about Rose to wait until she was older? I don't understand it at all.

And then, when he came back two years later, he was really stupid. There were two other people there, just sleeping. If he really wanted to kidnap Rose again, he just needed to cast muffilato. He's not stupid- he successfully forged his Hogwarts application without anyone finding out, and he got past the wards to their apartment. So, I'm forced to conclude that the mistakes he made were actually deliberate. For example, when they attacked Rose and Scorpius at the hospital- clearly Stannous was smart enough to figure out that Rose was there, and which room she was in. But instead of going himself, he sent really low-key people. I know they said that Stannous was probably hoping to overwhelm them with numbers, but... come on. He had one shot at this. He shouldn't waste it.

So clearly Stannous is smart- and dumb. OR he is smart and plans these attacks to distract from someone else. Stannous has the best aurors trying to find him, so maybe he is trying to distract them from something else that might be going on. That's the only reason I can think of why he would be so stupid.

Speaking of the hospital, Rose's fall is also interesting. She trips over nothing (probably a trip jinx), falls and sees someone. Probably either Stannous or one of his lackeys. My guess is they hospitalized her in order to make it so she would forget her revelations about the case she was working on. She said she couldn't remember anything, so after Rose was unconscious he probably obliviated her. And then to cover up the noise of Rose falling her probably used muffilato, which is why James and the other people in the house didn't hear Rose fall.

And I don't think Selania died by mistake, with death eaters mistaking her for Rose. They look completely different! I think Selania was killed because she knew about Rose's revelations on the case. I think they killed Selania instead of Rose because it was easier, and it actually would have been harder to obliviate Selania since that would have to be done secretly. They could kill her openly. And of course, they didn't care to keep Selania alive. They need Rose alive because of the child.

And speaking of the case Rose was working on, we saw that the papers ended up back in the drawer- and we know that the papers were strewn all over the place when it fell. So that means that either James or another resident of the house put it away for her OR whoever insinuated Rose's fall, and who was working for Stannous, did it. My guess is the latter. But if they tripped Rose to make sure that she would never solve the case, then why wouldn't they steal the papers? Why would they leave it in the house? Unless they tripped Rose for an entirely different reason. Or that person is a member of a third party- someone else who knows about the prophecy, but isn't working for Stannous and has his own, independent motives.

But if we assume that the person who tripped Rose works for Stannous... then we have a HUGE problem. Actually, we have a huge problem either way. Because that person was standing in Grimmauld Place, and were not detected at all. That is BAD NEWS. That place is protected with a freaking Fidelius Charm! So if Stannous can get in there, then that is very very very bad. Of course, that does raise a bit if a mystery, because then wouldn't he just try to attack Rose there, instead of the hospital? My only explanation is that Stannous does not want to reveal that he can get into Grimmauld Place. I think he's saving that reveal for after Rose's child is born.

I think that part of Stannous's plan, now that Rose is pregnant, is that after the baby is born he will kidnap the child and raise it to be a dark wizard. After all, the prophecy says that the child will be super-powerful, so those with malicious intentions would probably want to use that child. If that is the case, then it's sort of like season 6 of Doctor Who: Amy is going to have a powerful timelord child, so she gets kidnapped by Madam Kovarian, she has the baby, and then the baby is kidnapped. So I feel like this is going to follow a similar plotline. And that makes me very scared for Rose, Scorpius, and their child.

So the events I am eagerly anticipating are:

a) Rose having her child. Hope it will be happy occasion and not riddled with negative situations (but it probably will). I also want to know whether the baby is a boy or girl. And can I just say that the current names they have chosen are terrible? I know, whole star constellation family tradition thing, but come on.

b) Rose possibly solving that case that she was SO close to finishing before she fell and lost her memory. I'm really curious as to why they were murdered, and who their names are.

c) Scorpius and Rose's wedding! I'm hoping, once again, that it will be an extremely happy occasion, and that death eaters don't show up (like they did during Bill and Fleur's wedding). But I doubt my wishes will be granted.

c) Finding out Stannous's endgame, even if it absolutely terrible. I just want to know.

Anyway, great story so far, and keep it up!

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Review #2, by MrsJaydeMalfoy 

20th April 2016:
WELL IT IS ABOUT TIME I GOT HERE TO READ AND REVIEW THIS!!! I'm sorry it has taken me SO long, but I haven't forgotten! As soon as I saw that you'd updated I was SO excited, I wrote 'review ASLTW' on a notepad on my desktop, and it's been sitting there ever since! I hope my review can make up for the crazy amount of time it's taken me to get to it!!

First off, in a way I'm kind of relieved that it's been 3 months since the attack, because that means that Stannous hasn't been able to get to them for 3 months. But, at the same time, knowing how desperate he is, that's also 3 months for him to plan something completely horrid.. so it really makes me nervous. And then also, knowing that it's been 3 months means that Rose is getting REALLY far along now, so, if Stannous is going to try something else, he's probably going to do it soon... *looks from side to side with paranoia*

The replay of the events was just AMAZING and it really helped me to feel like a part of the investigation - I LOVE that! I feel like I'm caught up to speed with the characters as far as intel goes! But, being able to see in on that meeting has just given me SO MANY QUESTIONS, like if the death eaters realized that they'd got the wrong person... and HOW did they know Sels was in Diagon Alley? I mean COME ON! The fact that they immediately went after everyone else in the vicinity makes me think they DO realize they got the wrong target, and were hoping Rose was somewhere nearby hiding.. but still. I'm just so curious about what their goal was.. did they want to hurt the baby, kidnap Rose? Both? UGH so many questions! But I'm honestly kind of scared to know the answers!! :P

And then of course, poor Scorpius!! It broke my heart to see him so conflicted, fighting so hard to stay strong and focused, but he just can't keep it together. I can't blame him, and I know he's got to be really conflicted about all the emotions going through his head. Obviously he's very sad for losing Sels, but in a way I'm sure he's relieved that it wasn't Rose and the baby... but at the same time I'm pretty sure he feels guilty for thinking that way, as Sels was his friend... the poor guy! I'm so happy that Harry realized WHY he needed a break, and that he convinced him to go talk to Rose. I can't wait to see their conversation, because I'm sure that they can both make each other feel better, or at least I hope so.

Anyway, this was another really intriguing and also slightly nerve-wracking chapter, and I can't wait to see what happens next. Update soon please!! *Squish* ♥

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Review #3, by kayleefrank 

6th April 2016:
I just want to tell you I love this story! I usually don't read stories until they are finished because it gets really frustrating when they either abandon them or don't update them for 5 years, but I'm so glad I took a chance on this story. Keep up the great work! Can't wait for what you have next!

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Review #4, by Tonks1247 

29th March 2016:
Beth! Iím sorry Iím such a slacker! I read this a day or two after you posted and have been busy/tired/lazy and havenít reviewed it yet! OH THE HORROR! HOW DARE I?!


Sorry. Ignore that. Iíve been working nights and playing Quidditch all week and am over tired and weird. More so than normal.


I really wanna cuddle Scorpius. Like, he sounds like heís having such a hard time with everything thatís been going on and like heís taking on everything and putting this expectation on himself that he canít be sad or talk about how heís feeling because heís gotta be strong. And like, I can respect that, but the poor guyÖ.heís a walking disaster from the sounds of it. Heís living in his own head and thatís never a good thing. Because then heís spiralling into the Ďbut what if it was Roseí and thatís dangerous. Which is why itís probably really good that Harry said something. Because someone needs to shake him a bit and get him to speak and honestly Rose is more than capable of managing his stress and her own.

I do find the different perspectives Scorpius notices on the case interesting. The head healer, Aphis Lawrence is sort of obnoxious. Heís so rash about everything and even if the case wasnít so close to so many on the team, he could be a little moreÖdelicate about it? Then again, when youíre distanced from an event itís super easy to talk like thatÖ.And I also love how Dom is so easily focused on the case. Seems like sheís got that ability to compartmentalize, which is like, the greatest things ever. Helps her to focus. I think some of the others have that as well, although it seems like tensions are running so high because they canít figure anything out. Which adds to Scorpiusí anxiety and panic and itís actually a good description to show the break down heís facing if he doesnít let off some steam.

IíM ALSO SUPER BOTHERED BETH BECAUSE SCORPIUSí PARENTSí KITCHEN ACCIDENT IS PRESENT AND I WANT TO KNOW HOW THATíS RELATED TO EVERYTHING AND I STILL KNOW NOTHING. Or maybe Iím just being paranoid and it really is nothing just something that keeps sticking out to me. Or maybe itís not. :P

Overall, this was a lovely chapter. I was quite excited to see another one come out and I cannot wait for the next! Love seeing what happens and can only anxiously anticipate the things to comeÖ


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Review #5, by TheEmotionalTeaspoon 

28th March 2016:
Okay so first off, *eeep*, this ending was so sweet, I can't wait for Scorpius to go and have some well deserved cuddles with Rose.

Secondly, this review is long overdue, so it's probably going to be a bit lengthy, oops! I found this story a while ago and started flying through the chapters, every time I pressed next I thought to myself that I should stop to review and share the love but I was too selfish and just kept reading haha.

Now that I've had a bit of time to recover from the awesomeness... one of the biggest things that stands out to me about this story is the little hints you've been placing in previous chapters. There were a few I picked up early on and secretly felt really proud of myself for guessing, and a few I really didn't expect; like the prophecy! It's really inspiring how addictive you've made this story, especially through keeping everyone guessing and weaving different plotlines together. It must be hard to think it all out and make sure you drop the right details into the right chapters. I've been trying to plan out something like that and it's made me realize how much thought needs to go into it!

Another great thing that stands out is the way you write the whole Weasley/Potter clan. I'm always impressed at how a really good next-gen writer is able to keep track of all the different family members, and give them all such dynamic personalities. I think you do that really well. I also love how you've written Scorpius, especially when you touched on his past and the way Draco dealt with everything, post war. (Also, oh gosh his parents deaths, eek when will Rose pick that file back up?)

Something else I think you do really well is the hurt and comfort aspect of the story. It's so nerve wracking to watch everybody deal with their emotions in the face of everything that happens, and each person responds in such a different way. I think that's sign of really good, three dimensional character writing. The way that Rose and Scorpius also drift apart and back together again when tackling their issues is also really great; sometimes I think it's easy to fall into the trap of concluding a story with a couple finally 'getting together', but you show that relationships are an ongoing lovestory :)

Anyway, thanks so much for writing this, it's been so much fun to read so far! I'll be looking out for updates.


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Review #6, by Cheeky Monkey 

27th March 2016:
Enjoying your story :) looking forward to the next update!

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Review #7, by CambAngst 

25th March 2016:
Hi, Beth!

I have a new prime suspect. Healer Lawrence sure knows a lot about dark curses. He speaks lovingly about them, kind of like Barty, Jr. impersonating Mad-Eye Moody in Goblet of Fire. Or maybe that's what you want me to think. You're very sneaky!

Keeping the team small had its pros and cons. -- Not to nit-pick overly, but Scorpius doesn't seem to see any cons here, only pros.

Harry is a dab hand with those crime scene diagram charms. Seems like a guy who's had to do this far too often. :(

Nearly three months had passed and I still didnít know how exactly to feel about that. - Poor guy. I doubt he'll ever know. There's no right way to feel about something like that.

For someone who's just there to lend expertise on the dark curses, Healer Lawrence took a lot of interest in Ron's assessment of the Death Eaters' tactics. Again, suspicious...

From the glint in his eye, it almost seemed like he got a sick sense of pleasure from simply talking about these horrible magical creations. -- Yep, very suspicious.

Somewhere in the back of my mind, it registered that Iíd taken a direct hit to the heart with violenti totalis and survived, but another, much, much more pressing question rose in my throat. -- There's that prophecy-based resistance to curses rearing its head again. Seems that there's something special about both Rose and Scorpius.

Harry really comes through for Scorpius in the end. I like the way you balance Harry in this chapter. He's serious about his responsibilities, but also human.

Cool chapter! I'm looking forward to the chapter where Stannous kills Healer Lawrence so I can be wrong about him, too. :p


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Review #8, by Keira7794 

21st March 2016:
I've been away from HPFF for about four years now as I completed my university degree, and your story has brought me straight back into the heart of it!
You write in an incredible manner and your characters are truly engaging, realistic and relatable, and I eagerly await your next chapter.
You've inspired me to continue my old story too - so much gratitude for that. Keep writing!
Keira x

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Review #9, by Emma 

21st March 2016:
Thank you so much for updating love your story!!!

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