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5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Dirigible_Plums 

5th March 2016:
Hey,

This was an interesting one shot. I particularly liked the semantic field of a performance in the second paragraph, one that managed to change something as banal as his greasy hair into a wonderful sentence. It was an inspired metaphor and one of my favourite lines actually.

This one shot gives food for thought. Once upon a time, I despised Snape and then I liked him and then I reverted to disapproval again. What he did to Harry and the others wasn't fair. But the way you write about his innocence in childhood and his love for Lily awakes some compassion in me. You did well to have him remember their pre-Hogwarts days, a time when there was nothing other than hope for them.

Of course, he's not completely faultless, no matter how much he blames it on external circumstances. This line in particular - 'Anger flared in him at the injustice that life had rent upon him' - showcases this well. Snape has a tendency to state that life isn't fair, but also fails to understand his actions had a hand in what happened. So he tries his best to deal with his guilt and honour Lily somehow.

Plums xo

(For the HPFF Review-a-thon)

Author's Response: Thanks Plums for stopping by and for leaving such a lovely review. Snape is such a challenging character to write. He does blame everyone else in a way, but ultimately, it was his actions that led them down this road in the first place. I don't think he's necessarily bad, he just made stupid choices to try and fit in and this just started the great unraveling of all his dreams.

I quite like that line too. It seemed fitting really, adding a metaphor about being on stage in a challenge story for musicals :P

Thank you for the review.

Jacqui


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Review #2, by merlins beard 

25th February 2016:
Hey, I'm here for the BvB.

I feel like I was reading only the song. Everything fit in so well, you used lots of lyrics in between and it all tied together perfectly. I love the description and the way you managed to make me almost pity Snape. I usually don't read Snape stories because in my opinion it's really, really hard to do him justice, to capture all the emotional struggle along with the unpleasantness and plain hatred for pretty much everything fun or beautiful. That man is so destroyed, he's pretty much unpredictable. I think you managed to capture the anguish, the pain, the way severus detests what he had become very well, but I was missing his unpleasant attitude a bit. I know it probably wouldn't fit the song, but Snape needs a snide comment here and there to feel like the guy we know and love/hate (never really sure which one). That being said, congrats to coming third in the challenge, it's totally deserved! I really enjoyed reading this.

♥ Anja

Author's Response: I Anja. Thanks for your review. Writing Snape was really hard. He's such a complex character and I didn't know if I could pull it off and keep him in canon. The song just seemed to fit him so well though that I took on the challenge. I'm really glad that you think I captured all those emotions in him. You're right that their isn't any of his charactersitic snide comments in this story. I guess his mind in this moment is filled with the deed he knows he has to do but really doesn't want to do. Thanks for stopping by.

Jacqui


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Review #3, by Pookha 

9th February 2016:
A BvB review. You definitely did the song justice. And Les Mis is a terrific framework for this. In a lot of ways, Snape is like Javert (but so unlike in others).

I think you do a good job putting us into Snape's angsty bewailings. And I mean that in the best way. Snape has had his dream destroyed, first by himself in how he treated Lily, and then all hope of redemption with her destroyed by Voldemort.

You do a great job showing his pain here and letting us explore his more human side that isn't shown in the books much until the very end.

His choices trapped him at an early age and he's paying the price for it now.

A really good job of characterizations particularly, and a good re-telling canon scenes from his perspective.

Author's Response: Aww...thank you. I've never done a canon scene before as I'm nervous about getting all the characterisations and things right, so I'm really happy that you liked it. Especially with Snape who is one of my favourite characters. He has so many layers to him and so many experiences have shaped him into who he became. I found this piece hard to write, but maybe it's because it looked so grand in my head and then didn;t seem quite so grand on paper. But reading back on it now, it is better than I first thought. Thanks for your review

Jacqui


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Review #4, by carry on with your knitting 

21st January 2016:
Hello!

It's Katie from the forums, reviewing the challenge entries! :D
Sorry it's so late!

So Les Mis is definitely in my top 3 musicals and i cry every time I watch it, I adore it, and this song in particular, which I think you definitely did justice too!
I LOVED the way that you referred to the lyrics throughout the piece and I thought it was clever that you made the link between this song and Snapes life. You made me think about Snape in a different way and the thoughts that would have been going through his mind at this point which was very clever!

A great read that i thoroughly enjoyed!

Katie :)

Author's Response: Hi Katie

Thanks for your review. Les Mis is one of my favourite musicals as well. I'm happy to hear that you thought I did the song justice. I could see everything in my head, but when it came to actually writing the story, I struggled a little bit. It came out ok in the end, but I still think it sounded better in my head. But that's the way of things I suppose.

I thought for a while about who I was going to write about and what song to use for the challenge, and then I just knew it had to be I dreamed a Dream with Snape. It just seems to fit him perfectly. The dreams of his childhood would be nothing like what his life became. There is just so much going on in the background of this scene that we only found out later. Snape's character is also so complex and driven so much by his love for Lily.

When I write song fics, I like to incorporate the song lyrics into the text as it links it in with the song, but I prefer not to include the lyrics as this to me breaks the flow. The lyrics of this song are just so powerful that I couldn't resist including them and taking the reader of the same journey as the song.

I'm really glad you enjoyed my story and thanks for hosting such a great challenge.

Jacqui


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Review #5, by Ignis the Imp 

9th January 2016:
Hehe this is Ignis the Imp.

I've been hopping across the site looking for stories to leave my impish footprints on when yours caught my eye. It was interesting to see you write the events of HBP through Snape's eyes.

I felt so sad thinking how misunderstood Snape was throughout the series. I remember playing tricks on him with the marauders, and I never thought there was so much more to him. I liked how you described Snape's emotions before he killed Dumbledore. It was so sad, and poetic, how Lily was the one person in his mind even after that.

My favorite line in this story is - He'd used and wasted his dreams of yesterday. It conveyed the essence of Snape's bitterness and pain.

In all, a wonderfully written one-shot, and wish you all the best for the challenge!

Ignis the Imp

Author's Response: Hey. Thanks for reviewing my story. I feel so honoured. Snapes one of my favourite characters and I found this a little hard to write as I wanted to get him perfect. He is such a deep character and so little is known of him until the last book. He had to do so many things in secret knowing that it would make the world hate him. Thanks for stopping by and leaving your impish footprints behind.

Jacqui


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