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3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by UnluckyStar57 

24th May 2016:
Hi there! I'm here again for BvB. Go Team Bronze! :D

Okay, so we get to meet your OC, yay! I must admit that I haven't read many Hogwarts era fics, but I like the way you've set this OC up. She's not Harry's long-lost sister or something, but she is friends with him and lives in his neighborhood. I think it's really believable that her parents would be Muggleborns hiding from the Wizarding World in Litte Whinging--too bad for them that the Wizarding World kind of came to them when Harry showed up as a baby, right?

Piper is a year younger than Harry, right? I like that she's not in the same year or House as Harry because it opens up a wider range of possibilities for her to interact with lesser-known canon characters. I'm guessing that "Terry" is Terry Boot? I can't wait to see him in the story!

You did a really wonderful job of showing how paranoid Piper and her mother are about the state of the Wizarding World. Unfortunately, Jake doesn't have the same sense of unease--I hope nothing bad happens to him! D: I do think it's funny that Piper has to ask him his security question, and that it's about math. I'm no math nerd, but I can appreciate a good quadratic equation every now and again. :D

Ahahaha, it's so funny to picture Dudley having a crush on anyone--let alone Piper's twin, who is also a witch! :O I wonder if he'll find out that she's magical, and what he'll think about that? *sudden headcanon for this story that Dudley finds out and doesn't mind, and Morgan also has a crush on him trololol*

Anyway, I think it's interesting that you introduced Piper, her mother, Jake, Dudley, Piers, and Harry in this chapter, and you haven't introduced Morgan yet. From what Piper has told us, the twins seem very different from each other. I wonder if that creates tension between them? Also, I wonder how Morgan handles being in Slytherin as a child of Muggleborn parents? Hopefully, if she experiences any bigotry, Piper sticks with her through thick and thin.

Well, also the twins were in the DA together! (Sorry, kind of writing this review as I go along, that's why it's kinda scattered.) So there's at least one Slytherin in the DA, that's good! Maybe Morgan can be a recruit for the good guys in the middle of the Snake Pit?

This chapter was really interesting and built well on the first chapter. I'm not sure how they connect yet, character-wise, but I'm guessing that Piper will eventually come into contact with Draco at Hogwarts. I'll catch you later!

~Mallory

Author's Response: Yay, Bronze!

And dear LORD, Mallory, between you and Andrew, I feel like the crummiest reviewer in the tower!

I don't want to reply to too much as that would give away a lot of the plot, but YES, Terry as in Boot and Morgan is a bit of an enigma. She's not predominantly evil, she just likes popularity and attention and isn't above being a snake to get it.

Did I say they were both in the DA? Hmm... I didn't mean to, but I think I'll make it work, haha!

I'm very glad that you liked it and thanks for such an awesome review! I'm very nervous about this story as it's my baby and I've been working on it for a very long time.


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Review #2, by Lee Jason 

19th May 2016:
I'm loving the story so far :D Piper is a really interesting character (I love reading about metamorphmagi) and you've done a great job with characterisation.

I'm also happy to know that Harry has a friend of sorts when he has to stay at the Dursley's. That has made me feel a bit better, oddly.

I'm also interested to know what Jacob was doing with the trunk. Poor Jacob, the only squib in the family :( well, it will be interesting to see what happens to him as the story goes on.

I can't wait to "meet" Morgan, and see how similar she is to Piper and Jacob.

All in all, great chapter :D

Author's Response: Aww, you're so! You're just! Awww! *blushes* Such nice things! Piper is very dear to me. This story is a reincarnation of my first ever fic and she has gone through many, many changes and I hope they are all good ones.

Yay, good feelings! Harry should have had more friends. I find it hard to believe that there was not one person in his whole school who didn't want to be friends with the weird kid!

Yes, yes, poor Jacob. I'm quite mean to him in this story. But things will get better for him. Eventually.

Morgan is... Well, you'll see.

Thank you for the lovely review!


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Review #3, by dreamgazer220 

20th September 2015:
Another great chapter! You've improved so much over the last ten years :) And I think this version is much more realistic than the previous flagship. I also like that she's friends with Harry to tie it back to the Hogwarts world. Well done! Can't wait to read more, even though I've already read the next chapter... :-D

Author's Response: Thank you! You are my inspiration lol. I can't wait to get started on CM after I get a few more chapters up.

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