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5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Neville Longbottom 

22nd August 2016:
Renee!

After the cuteness of the last chapter, this one was like a punch in the gut with sad feels. Well, more like bittersweet feels.

Sweet, because Lily showed her first signs of magic! And I actually really liked the way you wrote it - children usually first show signs of magic when emotions are running high (as Iím sure you know), so it isnít a surprise that Petuniaís behavior towards Lily is what triggered it in the first place.

It was also sweet that Petunia covered for Lily - she didnít tattle like I thought she would, and I wondered why that is until I realized that she was scared, so it would make sense that she wouldnít want to advertise what had just happened. Especially because she was sure the adults wouldnít believe her. Which is less sweet. :(

Lily being left out of the party because Petunia was worried about what the other girls thought of her was also really sad. Poor LilyÖ being the younger sister really sucks sometimes.

Clearly, this is the point where their relationship will start to change. Everything that happened put a strain between them that was never there before, and as Lilyís magic inevitably becomes more prominent, it will only get worse.

Sorry, Iím making a lot of ďitís sad because we know itíll end badlyĒ commentsÖ Itís mostly because youíve done a really, REALLY good job sticking to the characterization weíve seen of Petunia and Lily thus far, and now Iíve sort of adopted this whole story as a head canon at this pointÖ

Merlin, youíre really good. This story is amazing!

But alas, this will have to be the last review for the time beingÖ Iíll have to come back and read the rest of the chapters and review again soon!

Donít worry though, Iíll be sending along some other gifts for you before this challenge ends. Plus an extra special something if I can swing itÖ :D
(Oh, and you should totally make an AQ&A page. Iíd love to leave a few questions for you at some point. ;) )

Renee, you are a wonderful storyteller, and you should know that this story is SO amazing. Itís well written, itís creative, and itís unique and Iím so glad that I got to read it!

Neville Longbottom

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Review #2, by Felpata Lupin 

2nd July 2016:
Hey, Renee!
I've decided to leave a few reviews around today, so I could not stop here! :D

Wow! This was an intense chapter!

Poor Lily, I felt so bad for her... But that's how it works with siblings, isn't it? When the older one is with his/her friends, the younger becomes a burden. Also, those twins were really horrible!

I so loved the parallel you created with the Mudblood incident. Petunia being bullied, Lily trying to take her defences, Petunia refusing her help and insulting her. So sad, but so perfect.

And then Lily lost control, and gave Petunia and her friends a good scare. I'm glad Petunia covered up for her in the end. She still wants to protect her sister (at least for now...), and that's so sweet! Their relationship is so authentic! I so love the way you write the both of them!

This was a brilliant chapter, dear! I love this story so much!
Lots of love,
Chiara

Author's Response: Hello lovely!!!

It was so nice of you to stop by here. :D
I'm really happy you liked this chapter. I think "their relationship is so authentic" is one of the best things anyone can say about this story. Thank you so much!

"She still wants to protect her sister (at least for now...)"
-->heh, yeah. I'll have more up soon.

lots of love to you sweetheart!
xoxo Renee


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Review #3, by MrsJaydeMalfoy 

15th October 2015:
:O !!

There it is! The rift is already starting. :(

It makes total sense that Lily's magic would have manifested itself in some way before her 11th birthday, and I find it really interesting that Petunia KNEW it was her. That indicates that other things have been happening, and I'm really curious as to the things that have happened before this incident.

Speaking of this incident, having Lily's magic show up while the girls were playing 'Light as a feather, stiff as a board" was a stroke of pure GENIUS. It's the perfect cover! It's easily explained away to the other girl because of the perfect timing, but it's still creepy and strange enough for Petunia and Lily to know that something's off.

It really makes me upset that Petunia's already calling Lily a 'freak', so I'm interested to see how that plays out once they find out Lily's a witch.

Anyway, another amazing chapter, dear, I'm off to the next!

Author's Response: Hi dear!

Would you believe me if I told you that I have already replied to this review TWICE, and both times it somehow didn't go through? Well, that's the truth!

Anyway, third time's the charm, right?

Thank you so much for this review, along with all of your amazing reviews on this story! I think little things had happened with Lily's magic before this incident, things the adults just explained away, but Petunia is still suspicious.

I asked my mom what girls might have done at a slumber party back in the 60s, and she suggested a seance, so I have to give her credit for that idea. I'm so glad you liked it!

Before NaNo, I was working on the chapter where Lily gets her Hogwarts letter, so hopefully before the end of 2015 you will get to see how that plays out.

Thanks again for the lovely review! xoxo Renee


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Review #4, by Jayna 

4th October 2015:
Ooh. And the plot thickens! I was actually very surprised when Lily started levitating Tuney. Anyway, in this chapter you did a great job of making the reader feel Lily's frustration and confusion. I could really feel how she didn't understand why Petunia didn't want her or why Petunia was acting the way she was. I also really liked the way you built up the tension at the scene when Petunia was in the middle of the circle. I was literally holding my breath because you did such a great job of building the tension. Great job!

-Jayna

Author's Response: "I also really liked the way you built up the tension"

^^This was my biggest concern about this chapter. I wanted it to really feel like a build up to that moment. Your review put the biggest grin on my face!

I felt sorry for both girls when I wrote this, because they're both dealing with this unexplainable, scary thing. i think this is the moment that causes Petunia to fear magic (initially), but also the moment that causes her to crave it.

Thanks for the sweet review!!


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Review #5, by May 

14th September 2015:
This story get more exiting each chapter I read

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much sweetie! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story and thrilled to see your name pop up in each chapter :)

The next chapter should be up fairly soon.


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