7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by water_lily43175 

9th December 2015:
Eva. PROGRESS. Good girl, saving people is a GOOD THING. Although suicide missions aren't, so. I hope she actually finds an alive Albus BEFORE she gets herself killed or things could end in tears.

ASTORIA wait oh my days what IS this? I thought she might have been suspicious, back in Starfall, but then I figured she wasn't, she was just wronged wife, albeit with some bad neglect-based decisions under her belt, and now I'm questioning life again. WHAT IS GOING ON WHO SOLD THEM OUT ALREADY.

Ugh I'm gonna read on til my head explodes.

The Mattselena adoration continues.

Author's Response: End in tears... end in a lot of blood. Who knows.

I can't comment on any of these secrets because... you know the answer!

Matt and Selena prove themselves way more domestic than everyone else once they're through these teething issues!

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Review #2, by El 

26th August 2015:
I've been a bit of a lurker on this story but feel I need to leave a comment saying just how much I'm enjoying Oblivion!
Also I may be in the minority but I'm really enjoying the Matt and Selena sections. I like the way you've handled their relationship and they both deserve some happiness. Also yay Gabriel and Toby are free!
P.s I refuse to believe Rose can't save Scorpius. Or maybe Scorpius will save himself.

Author's Response: Thank you for commenting! Very glad you felt compelled to, and also rather pleased you're enjoying Matt and Selena; I think they deserve happiness, too. I understand why Matt's not the most popular, but I of course have a soft spot for him. ;)

Rose might not be out for the count yet - or Scorpius might have something up his sleeve. Guess we'll find out!

Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #3, by Manila_traveler 

25th August 2015:
Don't get me wrong, I like the Indiana Jones homage! And you even gave Castagnary a similar death scene, only this time you blasted off his face instead of melting it down. Awesome.

And you've sealed off the Styx right after you brought it up! I love that you bring back Gabe in the same chapter and he can still revert to his smirky self. Because if I were you, I'd be totally amused by readers' reactions after taking away the deus ex machina, and Gabe is like the perfect author avatar for that.

This may surprise you a little bit, but I wasn't actually interested in the hint about Astoria's nefariousness. Which would be a sure sign that the scene is really that compelling.

Just a couple of questions on my end--
Did you destroy the access to Styx for good?
Not sure how much this matters to Cassian's ghost, but did you just bury/scatter/destroy his remains?
Did Rose and Scorpius pick up the pocket watch and wand that Cassian mentioned? The sentimentalist in me is hoping they can touch base with Bachelet eventually, in the epilogue.


Author's Response: Oh, I didn't take the Indiana Jones comments poorly. I know what I'm riffing on. ;) And yes, poor Castagnary, like Belloq, wasn't quite into the Nazis, more into the history, and doomed by his pursuits anyway.

I hadn't thought about using Gabriel as my smug authorial voice, but it's kind of apt. He's like my douchebag spirit character.

tbh, it's okay if the comment about Astoria's not that important! I find Rose's dilemmas in the scene more interesting than Castagnary's revelations (and I admit, I feel a bit sorry for Castagnary).

As for the questions! The state of the Styx will be addressed in the next chapter, and its existence won't be forgotten by the world, but it is ALMOST ENTIRELY done as a plot point in the story. Almost entirely.

Cassian's remains have been kind of blown up. Consequences pending. Rose did retrieve his personal effects: his wand, his pocket watch, some other odds and ends. They may make their way to Bachelet.

Cheers for reviewing!

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Review #4, by Elizabeth 

25th August 2015:
Everyone else always has these really intense, long, involved reviews and I'm just sitting here enjoying the ride.

I have to agree with the other reviewer-- I'm not sure splitting the views into thirds was the best way to go about it, but on the other hand, I think it's the ONLY way you could have gone about it. Splitting the plotlines into separate chapters would make them too clunky, and god knows I don't want to read an entire chapter that contained exclusively Matt, even if Selena is there to redeem him (though I think he makes her worse, to be honest).

I'm just hoping the next chapter comes up soon! Glad to see you said you're writing the grand finale so I know I won't have to wait too long between chapters, as I've been hooked on this series for a week (I discovered it just before I boarded a flight down South to go on holiday, and spent my entire holiday and the two days I've been back reading, reading, READING) so I would hate to have to wait a long time!

As always, a pleasure to read!

Author's Response: Enjoying the ride is super cool! Reviews are nice, whatever length, but not as important.

I think, if I had my time again, I would have condensed more of the plotlines overall. Needing the whole gang together for the reveal of Doomed Scorpius forced me to split the Cassian Malfoy plot in half (trip to Niemandhorn, then home before Baffin Island) and a bit of a delay on Albus and Eva leaving so they were all in Britain at the same time. That would mean the plots would happen at slightly more staggered rates, so it'd be less of cutting between multiple Intense Plots At the Same Time! Ah well. Lessons learnt!

I'm glad this made for fun holiday reading! Yeah, the story's coming along super well, I think I might finish the first draft this week (I'm on what's probably the last chapter before the epilogue), but there'll be a long editing road anyway. Updates will come regularly.

Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #5, by Whimsical Diva 

25th August 2015:
To be honest, I'm not sure breaking up the three narratives is helping much here. As a reader I find myself being gripped by one section (Eva or Rose/Scorpius) and finding hard to care about the other (Matt/Selena). It's not that I don't care about the characters - it's just that the momentum of one section doesn't segue well into the next. It's like cruising at 100mph only to slow down to about 40. Might be just me though.

Dear me, I think I mentioned sometime previously that Albus is too good for Eva. Now I'm starting to feel the other way round - she is too good for him. I hope he does something instead of being the dude in distress who needs saving. That, and I hope they get together after she finds him.

Obviously it wasn't Astoria the Thornweaver was talking about but Nat. I'm also suspicious that Nat stopped to tell Eva to finish ten of - what are the odds Nat will hang around and make things worse?

Anyhoo, update soon?

Author's Response: Yeah, the idea was for three different stories which hit their crescendos at different points - first Scorose, then Al/Eva, then Matt/Selena, instead of all plots hitting payoff at the same time. Which was a nice theory, but I get how it's slowing everything down. Maybe I should have just split it, at least on the finales, of each plot getting its own chapter? Alas, by now, it's just lessons for the future. It must be said that I'm not totally satisfied with how Oblivion's coming out, though hopefully overall it'll work out and the cons are things I can scratch up as learning experiences.

Al has a little more to do, though it's more thematic than outright action-y. He'll - well, we'll see!

I love how some people think I'm being all sneaksy about Nat, and others think Astoria's been evil all along. Obviously I can't say a word, I guess that either way I've succeeded because I've fooled SOME of you (unless both are right, somehow! Nat is secretly Astoria!).

Update is in the queue, my schedule and queue have been kicking my posterior on updates. Good news is that I'm currently in the midst of writing the Grand Finale and so far Oblivion is at 53 chapters. And definitely counting. It'll be less than 60 is all I'm prepared to predict.


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Review #6, by e.mo 

24th August 2015:
I literally start to hyperventilate every time I see that a new chapter has been added.

Oooh and professor lockett mysterious involvement with bringing Scorpius back is hopefully about to be explained! yay!

Author's Response: Try to not hyperventilate! But I'm glad you're excited.

Lockett's involvement will surely be resolved by the time it's all over. Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #7, by whykay 

24th August 2015:
At last. Astoria is involved. Ha!

Though why did he say 'or whoever she was'?? It's a pretty darned implication, isn't it? He couldn't have mistaken anyone else for Scorpius' mom - like Nathalie Lockett.

Now to the deductions - :D
Thane definitely lied under Veritaserum. Lockett deliberately did not brew the potion properly. But it was Thane's choice to lie and how to lie.

So, it is safe to assume that Draco did not commission Scorpius' return - Astoria did. I don't think her involvement is that limited though - to be able to penetrate through the Council and get the loyalties of Thane - she ought to have been more involved and she simply let the world draw conclusions about her husband. She is the voice. She fits in well. Perhaps she took a different route once Scorpius was endangered in Hogwarts and may have instigated the little rebellion then. But what beats me is that she let them know where Scorpius was, when they got caught at the end of last book.

Astoria is also a consummate actress - she really did bawl her eyes out when Scorpius returned, when she knew it all along. Same with Lockett, though I suspect her involvement to be partial, especially with the Castanagary character claiming to have found the ritual site.

So what then or who from is Draco hiding? Is he conducting his own investigations? Does Gregory Goyle know much?

Eva's got to figure it out and take her to Britain for questioning. Or perhaps, she may entrust Goyle and Co. to Astoria and Lockett, who may not turn up in Britain at all. I am glad Eva made that choice - all in all, it's made her a better person.

Great chapter in all.

Gabe is released and I am so glad - I am getting tired of Matt and Selena's dilly dallying - hopefully he will speak sense into her. I am right to think 'Bermuda Triangle'? It's near the Caribbean too! Astoria is deeply implicated.

Rose, rose, don't despair - I am sure they will get what they will at the end of their fall. Scorpius will be fine - I am confident. OMG - a though just occurred to me - what if Rose hitches Scorpius' life onto hers? - Neither will die as long as the other one is alive.

Author's Response: Castagnary just says 'whoever she was' because he honestly might be one of the few people in the world who doesn't know or care a great deal about Scorpius Malfoy.

The Veritaserum theory's a good 'un. As is Astoria being the face in the fire. But yes, why would Draco be on the run from her? Guess there's still more to find out.

Bermuda Triangle would be amazing but it's somewhere a little closer to home as I play with some ancient British myths. Honestly, I swear that'll stop soonish. ;)

Rose and Scorpius being tied to each other would be almost too easy for me, wouldn't it? :D Then again that might make them immortal. Or he only dies when she dies. I'm sure I could find a way to make it heartbreaking and not that simple.

Thanks for reviewing!

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