13 Reviews Found

Review #1, by ilovelucy 

27th June 2015:
Oh, please, PLEASE continue! I love this story so much!

Author's Response: Next chapter's up now! So sorry for the long delay, things have been a bit mad x

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Review #2, by Crescent Moon  

29th May 2015:
I'm loving your story so far!
I'm feeling so sorry for Ollie at the moment, all that she's going through with Scorpius being such a idiot. But I'm loving all the Gryffindors (and Joe and Oz of course) and I'm really liking how Jason's becoming more involved.
I'm really curious with what's happened to Cassie... I've got this crazy theory at the moment that she's her Dad's new mistress... I know, but I just thought I'd say it for the minimal chance I might be right ;) Even though I'm sure Pansy would be a lot more mad if her husband had gone off with her daughter's best friend... I really hope the suspicions falls from Scor soon so he can become less of a ... I'm struggling for a PG way to say this... I'm going to have to go with idiot again. Oh, I know - less of a moron.
Also I was just wondering if you'd ever read 'Since You've Been Gone' by Morgan Matson? I've just finished reading it and it's got a couple of similar themes to this so I thought you might enjoy it. I really did.
Anyway, sorry for this really strange and waffly review. What I was trying to get across is that I love your story, and you're writing is so amazing. The way you're developing your characters is just making me care for them more and more with every chapter. And I can't wait to read what happens next! Amazing!

Author's Response: Thank you for such a kind review! It's not waffly at all, it's lovely :)

I'm glad you feel sorry for Ollie. I think in some ways she's being kind of irritating, but she's actually having a really difficult time and it's good that people can recognise that.

Love hearing people's theories about Cass. We're over halfway through the story now so it'll all be revealed eventually.

I've not read Since You've Been Gone but will try to get hold of a copy to have a look. Thanks for the recommendation.

Honestly, thank you so so much for such a lovely review. Hearing from people who are enjoying reading is such a good motivator and these reviews make me so happy. I really appreciate it.

Next chapter's just gone up if you're still interested :)

Emma xx

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Review #3, by ilovegeorgeweasley101 

29th April 2015:
Hi yes okay your story makes me happy about life in the fan fiction world. It's unique, has wonderful humor and I really like that I have no idea what is going to happen next. Like WHERE THE FREAK IS CASSIE? IS SHE PREGNANT?? I have no idea but I would like to find out so please keep writing you wonderful fresh unique human being.



Author's Response: This review! Thank you so much :)

I've written most of the next chapter but this is the busiest I've been for a long time so I'm struggling to find the time to finish it - should be up within the next week though hopefully!

I'm so glad you're enjoying reading. Thanks for your lovely lovely feedback.

Emma xx

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Review #4, by Chivalrous 

16th April 2015:
"Albus is wonderful.

Jason is wonderful.

Joe is wonderful.

Louis is wonderful.

Rose is wonderful.

Scorpius is wonderful (in a terrible way).

Olivia is wonderful.

Everyone is wonderful.

This story is wonderful.

Posting the next chapter would be wonderful."

A poem by Ireland dedicated to your story. Ha ha!

I loved this chapter!

Post soon!


Author's Response: Hi! Thank you so much for such a kind review - I'm so glad you're still enjoying reading! I've been using camp nano to mainly do some work on my other novel here, Victoire, but am working on the next chapter of Complicated and will try to have it up in the next week. It's a big one with lots of Albus/Olivia and lots and lots of drama :)

Thanks for reviewing! Lots of love, Emma xx

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Review #5, by dracodarlingxx 

7th April 2015:
I feel so bad for Scorpius :'(
I get that Ollie's going through a lot, but Scor honestly has no one, whether that's his own fault or not (not? you said earlier he finds it hard to make friends, and with a last name like his, I'd say he's got a valid reason as to why), and as well as having no support, the love of his life is missing, and he's being blamed for it. Anyone would break in that kind of situation. Sure, he's being a prat, but the end of this chapter kind of hinted that he and Ollie would never be friends again and that makes me really sad because even though he's pushing her away, it seems like he really needs a friend right now.
P.S. The adorableness of Oz and Joe is indescribable :)

Author's Response: Aww I'm always so relieved when people are sympathetic towards Scorpius! He's behaving badly but he's got a good heart and he's really suffering at the moment, so I think you're right to feel bad for him.

Oz and Joe are my favourites :)

Thanks for the lovely review!

Lots of love,

Emma xx

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Review #6, by ASDFGHJKL1234 

3rd April 2015:

Author's Response: haha give it all time :)

(although i'll be honest and say that Scorpius/Rose is one of the aspects of this story I'm not entirely sure about. It may have to wait for a sequel but I'm not completely sure yet)

Thanks for reviewing!

Emma xx

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Review #7, by Unicorn_Charm 

26th March 2015:
Hey Emma!! ♥

Yay new chapter!

I wonder if any of the other Gryffies or Slytherins find it strange that she's basically become an honorary Gryffindor as of late. Hanging out in the common room, eating with them and then eating alone at the Gryffindor table. I really was happy to see "The Moron," Jason come over to check on her. Even though they don't always get along, they are family. He's right there.

“Last year when Dad had that Quidditch accident you flew up to Gryffindor tower and burst in on James in the shower to ask him if I was okay.”

“You have no proof of that.”

“James told me,” Jason grinned.

“He’s an unreliable source. I don’t know what you’re talking about.”
:D :D

That is my favorite little exchange with them get haha! Just the thought of her bursting in on James like that had me laughing so hard.

Oh Joe really was way too sweet. I love how he's totally alright with her hanging out with Al and the rest of the Wotters and even thinks that they're good for her. It totally makes sense that Slytherin was not the Hat's first choice for him. He's a good friend to her, too.

Yeah, Scorpius is getting worse and worse. He was totally out of line at practice. At this rate he's going to end up pushing everyone away. It was great of Oz and Joe to stand up for Olivia like that. I almost feel like Scorpius is going to blow at some point, and it's not going to be pretty. Even though he is being kind of horrible, I just want to hug him. He seems like he could really use it. :(

Another great chapter!! Hope to see another update soon!! ♥

xoxo Meg

Author's Response: Meg!

Gahh, your reviews are always so perfect and then I just never know how to reply!

"Honorary Gryffindor" is a good way of putting it. I hadn't really thought about how it would look to the other Slytherins but you're right that it would be strange. I think Joe and Oz are so caught up in each other and in being cheerful that they're probably not too bothered, and Esther and Clara have always been their own pair, but it's definitely an interesting thing to consider.

Yayy thank you for liking Jason! Nobody else has mentioned the exchange about the Quidditch accident - it made me smile writing it . Jason's a bit of a sweetie really and him and Olivia have some more bonding to do.

The hat wanting to put Joe in Hufflepuff is something I've known about his character from the beginning. I'm glad you find it convincing. He's not really got any Slytherin traits at all so I think the hat was just being generous and choosing not to separate him from his sister.

Scorpius is definitely near breaking point, and his behaviour's getting increasingly unacceptable. There'll be more on him in the next few chapters :)

Thanks for such a kind review! I'll try to get the next chapter up soon.

Emma xx

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Review #8, by merlins beard 

26th March 2015:
This is a really depressing chapter. I like the part where ollie and jason talk to each other. He cares about her and knowing that makes her life better. Ollie is handling herself well, despite of all shr's been through. I really like joe and oz. They are great guys... definitely hufflepuff qualities there. They are so loyal to ollie that they even want to quit the team if she's off it.
I feel like ollie has yet to realize how many great people really care about her. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Okay, last one. First off, I just wanted to properly thank you for taking the time to review all these chapters! It means a lot that you even wanted to keep reading, and then you could easily have read on without stopping to review once we were done with the swap. It's really so kind of you to take the time to leave a review on every chapter, and I appreciate it so much.

Jason and Olivia need to figure out their relationship properly but they're family and I felt like it was about time they started acting like it. I'm glad you liked him here.

And Joe and Oz are my absolute favourites to write :)

I'll try to make sure there isn't too long a gap before the next chapter. Thanks again for all the lovely reviews!

Emma xx

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Review #9, by CambAngst 

24th March 2015:
Hi, Emma! To my horror, I discovered that gmail had been putting my HPFF updates in the junk folder for the past few days, so I only just learned that you'd updated. Bad gmail! Bad!

Anyway, this chapter was a marvelous mixed bag of Olivia's "new" life and "old" life pulling her emotions in opposite directions. Actually, I guess you could count Joe and Oz as positive elements of her "old" life, but even with them there's the tension revolving around Scorpius.

I sat at the Gryffindor table during mealtimes, clutching Al’s hand under the table when Scor walked past -- So these two haven't admitted that something's going on between them yet, right? Because something is definitely going on between them. Silly teenagers in confusion/denial about their relationships. Gotta love them.

Speculation Time! I still think that you're setting us up for some major drama if Cassie makes her grand return to the story. I foresee Scorpius and Ollie reconciling to some extent and Al and Ollie getting right to the brink of a relationship and then Cassie reappears and demands that things go back to the way they were between her, Ollie and Scorpius. Oh, the tension! Am I right? Am I wrong? I guess we'll find out...

The scene with her cousin Jason was that brilliant mix of endearing and awkward that I've come to relish in this story. Nothing is ever simple with Ollie's relationships because she's not a simple person with a simple life. Did I ever tell you what a great job you did with your story title?

The Quidditch practice was sort of painful. It's always bad when characters you like are in a spat. And the longer it drags on, the harder it becomes to stay sympathetic to Scorpius. Is he going through a tough time, yes. But Joe's absolutely right, he's being a total jerk about it.

I really liked seeing the rest of the team stand up for Ollie. Especially when she wouldn't stand up for herself. The way Scorpius was behaving was ridiculous. I feel terrible for Ollie because she's caught in the middle of something she never asked for and she's trying to deal with her own problems and he's making it even worse. It was sad that she didn't even feel like trying to defend herself, but great to see her friends step up around her.

I really enjoyed this chapter! It had been a while and I missed the story. Great job!

Author's Response: Hi Dan! Haha I think you only missed it by like a day or two so you very much don't need to apologise. Your reviews are always so thoughtful and kind - thank you so much.

The new/old life distinction is a very good description of what's going on at the moment. Olivia's really moved on into something new and I suppose now the question is whether aspects of her old life can be reconciled with her new one (and that's what Scorpius is struggling with).

Yayy thank you for describing Jason's scene as endearing and awkward, that's exactly what I was going for. Jason confuses her because he IS her family and she DOES care, but then they've always had all this conflict - it's definitely a complicated relationship.

And Joe and Oz standing up for Ollie felt natural. I couldn't really imagine them doing anything else. Scorpius's behaviour is getting out of hand at this point and it'll all blow up soon.

Thanks for such a lovely review!

Emma x

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Review #10, by Lobelia Sackville-Baggins 

22nd March 2015:
My goodness.
Well first of all, I am SO glad that Jason and Ollie are starting to get closer -- I see so much potential for a brotherly-sisterly relationship between them, and I'm glad that Katie and Oliver are worried about Ollie as well. I can't believe her rotten luck to be landed with parents that don't seem to give a shit, and have Cassie gone (I have my suspicions about that, but I'm not completely sure -- when we find out, if I'm right, I will be insufferable, don't worry XD) and Scorpius is behaving like a little brat (and I feel so sorry for him at the same time, but SCORPIUS, YOU IDIOT), but I'm glad that she has a good support group, at least.
I can't wait until the next chapter! Good luck with your busy life (I know how that feels).
Happy writing!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a lovely review :)

I've been looking forward to starting to write Jason and Ollie in a closer relationship, and there'll be more of it over the next few chapters. Ollie's parents are pretty terrible but she's still got family who care about her.

I want to know your suspicions! I love hearing people's theories.

Scorpius is being awful. Little brat is pretty accurate. But he's also suffering so I hope people don't judge him too harshly.

I'll try to get the next chapter up soon. Thanks again for reviewing!

Emma xx

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Review #11, by TumTum 

22nd March 2015:
I'm super, super happy to see another chapter from you :) I actually let out a little squeak when I saw it. It might just be all the cuddling that goes on which is /delightful/, or all the joking around that comes with Joe, Oz, Al and Jason, especially related to quidditch, or all of these people being loyal and supportive to Ollie but I really enjoyed this chapter and can't really find a fault with it? It was funny and flowed naturally - it went by really quickly to me. Everyone seemed in character..

I guess I don't have the bigger picture like you do... are you worried about fitting everything in together? What did you feel this chapter wasn't doing?

There were so many lovely little moments in this - like Scorpius suggesting that Oz and Joe would just cuddle in the sky if he didn't discipline them (they're so adorable even if I have more faith in them than that). Or Rose being passive-aggressively friendly to Scorpius regardless of how discouraging he attempts to be (I love her determination and boldness). Or Oz nuzzling Joe's forehead. Or all the casual touches between Al and Liv (>_

Author's Response: Hi Margie! So happy to hear you enjoyed the chapter. I think my problems with it are mainly just to do with how long it took to write - everything starts looking problematic when I've been staring at it for a long time. I'll try not to leave it so long before an update again and then it'll probably feel better.

I saw the rest of your review in our message on the forums - thank you so much for all your kind and thoughtful comments, your reviews are realy really appreciated.

Emma xx

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Review #12, by Roisin 

21st March 2015:
Man, when Scorpius said Olivia lacks commitment there was TOTALLY A DOUBLE MEANING THERE. She so should have run after him, but I suppose it might be too soon.

I loved that Oz and Joe stood in solidarity with Olivia. At the same time, I was kind of CRUSHED by Scorpius' reaction. You did a really good job keeping it all from Olivia's POV, but kept enough in there for us to be able to feel how hurt/abandoned he felt.

And I KNEW her and Jason would start being mates by the end of the story! Called it!


Author's Response: Roisin! Thank you so much for such a lovely review, you always have such thoughtful comments :)

Scorpius might not have responded well to Olivia running after him at this point, but that's not to say it wouldn't have been the right thing to do. He's struggling a lot still and his acting out is understandable if not defensible.

More of Jason and Olivia to come :)

Emma xx

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Review #13, by jessicalorewrites 

21st March 2015:
hey! I'm super excited you've updated again because I love this fic aw but yeah I'm here for the swap although I'd still probably be here irrespective of that.. :p

mostly I'm just going to gush/live-write my responses to everything. I'm sorry, I can never think coherently enough to write an eloquent review when I read this story.. I love it that much.

I'm not sure why but I find rose treating scorpius with "a kind of passive aggressive friendliness that made him clench his jaw" the funniest thing ever. can you just imAGINE. ily rose.

are you kidding me?! auntie katie would totally use the f-bomb. in my head katie bell is like a sailor with that mouth of hers. HONESTLY. but still. my image is of teen katie, not AUNTIE katie and I'm sure the younger ones in her family have a very different (and less biased) view of her than I do. what can I say, I'm a visionist.

that conversation with jason was honestly so sweet though ♥ I'm glad he's actually come forward and let her know that he's there for her if she ever needs him. I feel like she really needs that at a time like this, with first no cassie and now no scor.

OH MY GOSH I CAN'T BELIEVE SCORPIUS KICKED HER OFF THE TEAM FOR A MINUTE! AFTER EVERYTHING. OH MY GOSH. but damnnn that chaser community vibe liv oz and joe have going on is enviable ♥

thanks for the swap! as always, I enjoyed this chapter immensely.

one quick question: will we ever find out more about where cassie is?!

- jess, xo

Author's Response: Hi Jess,

Thank you so much for such a lovely review - I'm so glad you're enjoying reading.

Totally agree with you about Katie, she's almost certainly been using some pretty strong words to describe her brother, but I think she probably wouldn't swear in front of her kid (at least not intentionally and by post...).

Jason and Olivia have some things to figure out but I wanted to show that their relationship has a bit more depth to it than Olivia likes to think.

We'll find out about Cassie but not for a while yet :)

Thanks for the review!

Emma x

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