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Review #1, by Ninja in Training 

3rd January 2016:
He isn't allowed to be angry.

Author's Response: Nope, definitely not allowed.

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Review #2, by oldershouldknowbetter 

28th June 2015:
Hi there back again for more reviewing.

I am doing so for the house cup and of course for Ravenclaw.

I was a bit confused at the beginning - what happened to the comic and James' reaction?

It starts off with a bit of plot housekeeping, but then Rebecca rears her ugly(?) head once more. In some ways that girl is more dangerous than Michelle - at least Michelle is largely friendless.

“Pathetic,” Rebecca hissed as I left, clutching the book to my chest and cursing myself for being so damn sensitive about it all. Maybe I was being pathetic.

You are not being sensitive - that was physical abuse, bullying of the first calibre.

... and goes running for help every moment someone said something mean.

No, she didn't just say something mean, even though she did that as well, she deliberately hurt you. This is what boyfriends are for - to go to when someone does something like that to you and to get sympathy from him at least. But she gets more because James is a real man.

Rebecca is really in self denial (it is a common theme with your villains), James tries to get Rebecca to see some sense, but she almost physically cannot - she just turns around and Abigail knows that Rebecca blames her and will take it out on her at some latter date.

Isabella turns up and there is the eponymous slap - the slap hear round the library.

I like the relationship you are building between Abigail and William - it is going to be a strong one and one that Abigail has not learnt how to make until now. It is almost an adult type of friendship.

The family dynamic of Williams is good, and again you are making him one hell of an interesting character.

Ah-ha, the comic is mentioned and James obviously liked it - but there is a bit of miscommunication surrounding it as they are both too embarrassed to openly talk about it too each other; ah, true love never ran smooth.

I've always thought that the longer she leaves not telling James just who her dad is, the worse he might take it, but then she says - I couldn’t wait to tell him who my father was, and I had a great idea on how I was going to do it.

That's good. I was wondering what you were going to do with the plot now that the main thrust of the first half of this work is over - she has James and James has her, what more is left? Well here we have something - home for the holidays, introduction to William's and James' family, and now this; some sort of actual plan to tell James her one big secret, the one she's been hiding from him. good there is still a fair amount that you can tell us and that we want to know.

Author's Response: YAY YOU'RE BACK!

Ah, whoops, I should add more of his reaction in.

Oh Rebecca, she needs to go away and leave them alone.

She's not, you're right, but she still feels like she is :(

I agree, James is there to help her feel better.


Thank you, William is going to be there for Abigail as much as James is. He really likes her.

Oh William's family *hugs him* That kid has been through some tough times.

Yep it is! Phew, I didn't forget it :P Haha nope, it never did run smooth. :D

I was worried when I was writing this that he would react badly, but I'm excited for you to read when he does find out :P

Thank you so much! More is coming!

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Review #3, by Ayame 

23rd March 2015:
Just wanted to start off by saying this I absolutely love this story!

Abigail loving comics made me read it from the very first chapter because it's such a great theme. It's something really new, to me, in the HP fandom because I'm not sure I've ever seen comics really addressed much if at all. I love that James and Abigail are comic geeks/"fangirls" together. I've also always had a love of comics, like Abigail, but didn't particularly want people knowing because of how they'd take it. So I can absolutely relate to her from the comics' side.

Isabella slapping Rebecca was great, both because Rebecca deserved it and how Isabella was so prepared for the consequences. Though I'd love to see Abigail stand up to Rebecca at some point because we've seen that she's capable of standing up for herself. Even to Michelle in the past, which even surprised Abigail herself.

William is so fun too and I'm excited that we may get to see some more of him in the coming chapters. As well as him flirting with Isabella, who is just so fierce it's fantastic.

I'm so excited that Abigail is making plans to tell James about who her dad is. I won't lie, I'm a bit worried that Michelle might tell him before Abigail gets the chance for some revenge. Especially because she's been acting so petty and childish despite acknowledging that what she did was wrong.

But I hope James finds out soon! I can't wait to see how he reacts and I really, really hope that it isn't badly due to her keeping it a secret for quite a while. But to be fair and logical, they haven't been together long and James obviously understands wanting to keep some things private (as he said about her dad using a pen-name ages ago.)

Finally, I know that at the beginning of the last chapter you asked for opinions on whether the continuation into seventh year etc. should continue under this title or under a new one. I think, especially as you're planning to do POVs other than Abigail's, that it would be best to do a new story for it. For the sake of continuity because The Adventures of Abigail Higgs and Potter Boy has been solely from Abigail's point of view. It's even in the name, she's the headliner (of course) so it makes sense that it's all from her side and focused primarily n her.

So I think, depending on where you're planning to go with it as well, the different POVs and seventh year maybe deserve to be their own story with a new title to reflect the changes from this one. I meant to comment on the last chapter to tell you what I thought but things were so hectic and stressful for a while that I completely forgot, sorry!

Hopefully that all made sense to you ^^; thank you so much for writing this and I hope you update it soon! It's definitely one of my favorite stories on the site and I give a little flail whenever it shows up as updated in my RSS reader.

Author's Response: Awww thank you so so much!

I haven't ever seen comic books in a story before, so that's another reason why I wanted to have a story with it in. Oh Abigail and James are the BIGGEST fan girls, they love them so much haha, if anyone knew just how much they would think that they were weird :P

I know! I am so glad that she did get to do it. Brought me joy :D Rebecca so needed that slap, and as for Abigail standing up for herself? It's coming :P

Oh William! I have so much love for him! There is going to be more of him, and his flirting with Isabella :P

I have to say that James finding out about her dad is my favourite thing that I've written in this story, so I hope that you like it :D

Thank you for saying that, I am definitely going to go with the sequel plan, for the other PoVs

Haha thank you so so much! and wow, I'm so happy that seeing this being updated makes you flail! :D Thank you thank you thank you!

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Review #4, by purwa 

22nd March 2015:
hey you always say my beta you know in our language beta means son what do you mean by beta? don't mind.By the way update soon i really want to read more i can't wait to read this :)

Author's Response: Hey! Does it? By beta I mean someone who looks over my story and edits it so that it flows better and checks for mistakes. I shall update as soon as I can, I'm so glad that you're enjoying my story and I can't wait to see what you think of the other chapters. :D

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Review #5, by purwa 

14th March 2015:
that's amazing fanfic i ever read

Author's Response: Thank you! I hope that you continue reading :D More is coming soon!

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Review #6, by James101 

10th March 2015:
This chapter was so good!

It was hilarious when Isabella slapped Rebecca...mostly because Rebecca deserved it.

William and Isabella would be so cute together-like a secoundary pairing or sonething.

IS James going to meet Abigail's dad in a few chapters or alot of chapters?

Overall this chapter was adorable and funny ;as usual.Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Yay! Thank you!

Oh yes! Rebecca so deserved it! She's a meanie!

I have so many plans for William and Isabella, I love them so much!

Yes! He is going to meet him, don't you worry :D

Thank you so much! I love reading your reviews so much! :D

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