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7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Shera 

10th September 2017:
Can you just write "I'll" or "I will" instead of just "I"? It's really irritating

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Review #2, by my_voice_rising 

28th March 2017:
Hi there!

I've just binge-read this story today and am so excited that I did. Congratulations on all of your Dobby Awards, by the way--I see that it won Best Post-Hogwarts and that only makes me more interested to see where this goes!

Seth is such a likable character; all of your characters are very rich. Sam and Tarquin are two of my favorites, and I enjoyed reading about the Woodleys' interactions and particularly the grandmother's, as cringe-worthy as they are.

Katie is the erratic, funny best friend but she still has depth and doesn't seem to only be there as a sounding board for Seth to talk about her troubles. I would definitely like to know more about her (particularly her family, since we spend so much time hearing about the Woodleys) so that she becomes a little more three-dimensional. But she has some great one-liners and I like her distaste for Tarquin, who is clearly smitten with her.

Albus's flirtation with Seth is interesting because this story is clearly marked as a James/OC, and the whole mystery of why James is not showing up to tutoring, etc. is great. I feel like he got out of their first detention by using the Invisibility Cloak and bribing/blackmailing the Head Boy, which would be interesting because then it would have been James saying "I'm sorry," which seems unlike him.

In fact, there are so many side-plots to this story and I really appreciate that it's about more than just romance. Sam being to one to steal the pregnancy test potions is another interesting side-plot. I also like how you've added in little changes in Hogwarts with the next generation, like the beginning of term dance and parents coming for Quidditch matches (or maybe I'm totally spacing and that was in the books.)

My only critique would be some editing in terms of sentence structure, and general tidying, but the story and characters are very rich and I can definitely see why this story won so many awards.

I haven't actually read this chapter yet--I wanted to be sure that I took the time to stop and review. So off I go to read! ♥

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this lovely feedback! I'm glad you enjoy the Story line and also the characters... I try to write thme in a way that seems plausible and realistic, both main characters and supporting cast ;). Flat side-kicks only make for flat protagonists :)

I'm really happy you enjoy the side-plots and General twists to the Story... I really wanted to make it as multi-faceted as possible but I also promise that everything is going to tie together nicely in the end :)

I know that especially older chapters need some tidying up but since I struggle to find the time to finish new chapters I might do that when the story is finished, I guess :) But thanks for letting me know!!!

Thank you so so so much again for this amazing review and for reading, I hope you've enjoyed the chapter and that you come back for the next :)

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Review #3, by Sunkistsparkles 

11th January 2015:
NH Stadler
I just wanted to say
I'm begging you

Author's Response: Haha thank you so much! This just made my day! The next chapter is already in the queue and I hope it will be up soon. Thanks for your lovely comment!!!

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Review #4, by Jen565 

11th January 2015:
I just discovered this story and it's really good :) I can't wait to see some more James/Seth action. I can't wait to read the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I really appreciate your kind words! The next chapter is already in the queue and I hope it will be validated soon :).

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Review #5, by TheEighthHorcrux 

2nd January 2015:
I love this story so much! Even though Albus and James are a bit of jerks to Seth I can't help but like them too. I hope you update soon :)

Author's Response: THank you :). Haha, yes they are a little stupid, in different ways but still :). I will update as soon as possible... I kind of procrastinated during the holidays (with this story and uni) but I promise I will do my best to update soon!

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Review #6, by Eunia  

25th December 2014:
Ah i love this fic! it's so difficult to find well written hp fics these days, but this is so well thought out so far! I can't wait to read more :)

Author's Response: Hey Eunia! Thank you so much!!! This comment honestly just made my day! I'm glad you like the story so far and I hope you keep on reading :). I will update as soon as the queue is open again! Have a merry Christmas and happy holidays :)

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Review #7, by Leanna 

23rd December 2014:
Hey, amazing chapter as always and I can't wait for James to pop another visit. Please update as soon as you can.

Author's Response: Hey, thank you so much! I finally reached the point in the story where James will become a major character... I just really needed to have all the other stuff happen first :). Thanks so much for always coming back for the new chapter and for taking the time to review every time! I really appreciate it!

I will update as soon as the queue is open again :) Meanwhile I wish you a Merry Christmas!

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