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3 Reviews Found

Review #1, by CambAngst 

25th August 2015:
Hi, Pix! Poor Wren! Every time she turns around, something in this story is leaving her head spinning. Although I suppose the vampire rabbit apocalypse is worthy of a little head-spinning.

GryCReMo (Review #31)

Hannah hadn’t batted an eye when she replied, “I trust Gran, and so does your father. Do as the man says.” -- This line instantly made me think of Harry explaining himself to Aberforth just before the Battle of Hogwarts.

”I’m hunting a rabbit,” he said with a completely straight face. “I swear on my grandfather’s balding hairline, Wren. You better get that blinkin’ thing locked up in the Gryffindor Tower. Because if I find it first, it’s dead.” -- Love this! It’s a little bit Elmer Fudd and a little bit Vito Corleone and a lot of Pix. Try to find that in any other novel on the site!

I’m sort of hoping that Wren’s mindset was coloring her perception of McGonagall’s reaction. Otherwise, Minnie is displaying a Dumbledore-esqe level of, “Eh. I’m things will work out alright.”

OK, I realize there are Very Important Plot Reasons why you needed Wren to go to Hogsmeade, but honestly Scorpius and Callie’s reasoning makes a lot of sense. It’s not like Wren can sneak up on Bunny. Granted, it probably isn’t possible for anyone to sneak up on any of the vampire rabbits. I mean, no matter what else they are, they’re rabbits. Small, herbivorous prey animals whose only chance for survival is to never be caught unaware. But Scorpius and Callie obviously aren’t thinking so clearly.

“second-degree thralls” I love Scorpius in this story.

God, James is such a jerk. Remember how his namesake was a total jerk for five years and then changed? James Sirius is like a mirror image.

“If he’s such a good friend, then treat him like one. He deserves your honesty, right?” -- Nate, the Voice of Reason.

Ooh! So there are other vampires around. And Nate is related to one. No wonder he had such well-formed opinions for their history essays.

I’m gonna get there. Probably not tonight, but soon! I saw your status about the penultimate chapter and I was very excited. Til next review!

Author's Response:

Okay, so I tried really hard to let the adults in this story actually act responsible and not look like idiots, but here's the thing. If the adults fix all the problems in the story, then what exactly am I writing about??? Big quandry. I tried. I really really didn't want to have Neville look like a buffoon. I respect him too much.

I just HAD to put the "hunting rabbits" line in this story somewhere. It was on my mental list (didn't make the written list because it was just so off the wall) and I'm so pleased that Scorpius was the one to pull it off. I mean, come on, when ever do we get the chance to say something like that in context and have it mean exactly what we're saying? Unless we're writing actual hunting stories or something, which I'm not. That reminds me. What exactly was Seamus hunting in that lost draft of ours?

Again with the not-trying-to-make-adults-look-like-idiots, and flailing. This is hard.

I am so relieved to hear you say that you thought there were reasonable reasons for Wren to go to Hogsmeade. Yes, plot. But it can't be "because the author says so". Good point about the rabbits. Also good thing that Callie and Scorpius don't realize that.

I love Scorpius too, but only behind his back. I don't want his ego to get any bigger. I love Nate and his 'well-formed opinions' as well. I am so glad he worked out in this story. I had high hopes for him.

Oh, look at the chapter numbers. Where has the time gone?


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Review #2, by BellatrixLover3 

14th December 2014:
I love it! I was staring Tomorrow is my birthday! think you abandoned this story! Thank you for keeping it! *cheers* I didn't give up on mine, but I've been waiting two weeks to get my chapter validated. Love it!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

It was my birthday yesterday, so thanks for the present! I haven't abandoned this story. Some chapters take longer to get right than others, and I'm patient enough to work things through before I post.

Good luck with your future chapters!

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Review #3, by MargaretLane 

6th December 2014:
Poor, poor Wren. She's now feeling guilty for what the rabbit's done. As if she hadn't enough to deal with. Poor girl.

Yikes, things are serious if McGonagall is showing concern. She'd not the type to do so under normal circumstances. This is beginning to look even scarier than I'd though.

I've a feeling there's something extra-mysterious about Dillon too. Everybody seems to think a little boy couldn't possibly be a vampire, which indicates there's something unusual about his being one. I did feel some sympathy for him when we saw him. He seem lonely more than anything else.

And now she's feeling guilty about hiding it. I think it'd be hard for people to figure it out anyway, because the situation is so odd - her being a thrall of a thrall, rather than the direct thrall of a vampire. And the fact that it's a bunny that's been biting her rather than an actual vampire. Now, admittedly if she hadn't been so out of it, it might have been figured out sooner, but then that was all part of what had happened to her. DEFINITELY not her fault.

*laughs at Trudy hating rabbits* I'm not a big fan of them myself. I think they are ugly little creatures.

*laughs at James telling the younger students off for bringing in illegal items and then taking them himself* It's a bit like Ron and is completely the sort of thing I'd imagine him doing.

LOVE the description of Hogsmeade as "the quaint village of crooked chimneys." It sounds sort of nursery rhyme or something.

Hmm, I wonder what the relevance of this guy being a vampire is and whether he is on Smeed's side or Dillon's. He could be the other guy Smeed was talking to, I guess.

I don't have a problem with the formatting here. I'd prefer your usual, but this is fine too.

Author's Response:

Things ARE rather serious now. And Dillon IS very lonely. Poor, lonely little boy.

Wren can't help but feel some guilt for what's going on. She's indirectly responsible for what's happening, whether it's her fault or not.

Aww, I'm glad you appreciated my description. I would love to stay in Hogsmeade and just soak up the ambiance.

Yep, another vampire. They should have a vampire party, with lots of juicy rabbits and very rare steak... and there goes my muse again. Stop that!

I think I'll be going back to the other formatting. I prefer it as well.

Thanks again. Until next time!

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