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Review #1, by naflower05 

15th September 2014:
Interesting idea for a story so far. I'd like to see where you take this. You might want to look into getting a beta reader to go over your chapters and edit them before you submit them, because a lot of your writing sounds more conversational then a story. It will make it seem more developed and people will be more likely to continue reading if the writing quality is higher. I look forward to reading the next chapter and seeing what happens when she sees the marauders and Lily for the first time. Keep writing! =] ~

Author's Response: Very happy to hear you like the base concept, that's always the most important part of writing something decent! A beta reader will probably be a good idea a little later, it's like you read my mind! Right now, my goal is to get some stuff up and running before going back to the beginning. After all, how can a beta edit without seeing the bigger picture of the story? It may change how they edit for me! I really, truly appreciate the review and constructive criticism, and the next chapter, already in the queue, isn't in Elizabeth's viewpoint! However, there will be a meeting soon :) Have a lovely day!

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