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Review #1, by oldershouldknowbetter 

23rd January 2015:
Review#16: the review where disappointment reigns and itís not over the Quidditch result.

Did I miss something? What fight? We left the last chapter with all the feels over James and having started it with Michelle being nice to Abigail. This fight has occurred somewhere between the chapters and has fallen through the cracks.
There is a very good reason why she was never made captain Ė you want a good leader in a team captain, not just one who is obsessed about the sport. Can you imagine the horrible sort of captain she would make?

Hunger makes her angry, so does the world.
Rebecca rears her ugly head once again trying to insinuate herself into Jamesí life.

Abigail outlines her reasoning for not telling James about Rebeccaís attack upon her person. It was as I suspected, she made the hard choice for all the right reasons.

Quote: ĎI didnít want to see Rebecca flaunting herself all over himí

This is the wrong use of flaunting, but having said that, it conjures up the most delicious imagery in my mind and makes me wonder if you used the word on purpose for that dramatic effect.

Abigail goes and hides from her disappointment, but it soon seeks her out. Isabella keeps proving her worth as a true friend; first the hand holding at the game and now this.

What an awful happenstance. First James seemingly so chummy with Rebecca and now this reported kissing with her behind the stands. The reader can hope it isnít so, but Abigail cannot afford to. She has to assume the worst because it is the only way she can deal with her dashed hopes and dreams Ė by cutting them off and cauterising the stumps. (What delightful imagery, but apt)

Author's Response: I think I've missed something as well? Haha I need to go back and have a look at what I've written in this chapter.

Oh yes, Michelle would make a terrible captain! an absolutely terrible one!

Haha what doesn't make Michelle angry?

Poor Abigail, she really doesn't want to see Rebecca all over James.

She needs to really start listening to Isabella, she's a much better friend for her over Michelle.

:( Oh James! Are you caught up in a rumour or is it true? Sadly assuming the worse is how Abigail will always think.

Thanks so much for the awesome review!

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Review #2, by icingonmycake 

8th September 2014:
Aaaw. Rebecca is bring rather annoying. :T.

Author's Response: She is, isn't she?

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Review #3, by potterfan310 

14th August 2014:
Yoo hoo,

Now if my calculations are correct I believe this is the 80th review on this!! Congratulations :D

Rebecca is so after James. You can tell. Isabella is such a good friend, bless her. I hope there's more interaction between her and Abigail to come. Urgh James, just why? Unless he's trying to make Abigail jealous, that is my only sane/justified reason for him doing it right now.

Hugs for Abigail, bless her. Bad James!

Literally love this and James and Abigail and you of course ♥♥ *squishes*

Can't wait for the next one!

Sophie :D

Author's Response: YOO HOO! *waves*

You are right! THANK YOU!!!

Oh she so is! I agree entirely! Isabella will stop her, she's a good friend for Abigail and needs to replace Michelle.

*hugs her too*

Awww thank you! I LOVE YOU! SO MUCH!!! :D You're seriously one of my favourite people on this site! and your reviews make me so happy :D

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Review #4, by Sun Lovegood 

13th August 2014:
I absolutly love it. I have now read the story three
times and everytime i wish that there was more
chapters, so please continue. And update as soon as
possible, because waiting is pain.

Author's Response: Have you? Wow! That's amazing! You've really made my day! I'm trying to update as quickly as I can :D

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