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Review #1, by oldershouldknowbetter 

23rd January 2015:
Review#15: the review which discusses the cheese driven, Inferi Apocalypse to be eventually defeated by James Bond.

On again, off again- once more the friendship is on again with Michelle and how happy is Abigail? All it takes is for her friend not to be nasty and she is over the moon.

They both want to eat cheese!

I said before I like how you have made James have his inner core of childishness still alive. It informs his whole character, or at least it does when he’s around Abigail. She allows him to let his guard down and be what he likes around her. He probably has to be ‘On’ when he’s around some of his other ‘normal’ friends.

Cheese led dreams ...

… Of Inferi and survival. The Inferi apocalypse as an excuse to get together, how teenage boy of him. Only the end of the world could drag out the admission of admiration? Desire? Love?

Ah the feels. I like how you have maintained the habit that I have seen before of James running his hand through his messy hair when he is embarrassed when he wants to hold her or hug her or whatever.

In a moment of distractedness she hugs him; just something she does/did with her brother. In this one little thing it is such an illumination of the relationship between the siblings – a subtle but effective piece of characterisation. I have such a clear mental image of the hug: his back to her; she instinctively hugs him to ward off his ire (even though it’s pretend); then her realising what she’s done and who she’s done it to; her eyes going wide as she soaks in the enormity of what she’s done.

James reciprocates with a rib-crushing hug of his own – that lifts her off her feet!

Then all the play fighting – such children – but it soon turns a bit too intense and James is about to say …

Arrgh! The untimely interruption – yet another staple of the thwarted romance to add to the list.

*sighs* oh well, that is it for this encounter/chapter there is no way that level of spontaneous intensity will be generated any time soon. What is this chapter fifteen? It will probably be chapter eighteen before anything this natural brings them together again. *sighs*

Let’s go back to a bit of the plot then with a bit more about the life of muggles and the introduction of James Bond. Of course James knows about Bond – the same name is an instant attraction of any young boy to a hero.

It leads in to the revelation of what both of them want to do once they leave the school. James’ choice is far more mature than we (and Abigail) would give him credit for. Yes it is couched in a young kids idolisation of superheroes (and probably some idolization of his father as well), but it isn’t just bumming around playing sports like a lot of other James’s in other stories seem to want to do.

And Abigail, she wants to get into comics; great something that James can understand and like, but it is in America and hence away from him.

He gets sad; she sees him getting sad; she gets sad herself realising that would separate them both probably forever. Yes, it is in the future. Yes, they are not together, but Abigail sums it up perfectly:

Quote: ‘I just couldn’t help but want nothing more than him to ask me to stay with him.’

Author's Response: I can't wait for the day that Abigail gets more confidence to tell Michelle where to go, it'll be so much easier for her. Poor dear.

James lets his inner child show a lot, especially around Abigail, he can't help but be himself around her. She does allow him to let his guard down. He doesn't have to pretend to be someone he's not around her.

Oh the cheese led dreams! Haha, this mainly came about because I couldn't stop dreaming of zombies for an entire week. An inferi apocalyse is definitely an excuse to get together, he's such a teenage boy!

Bless him being all cute with his hand running through his hair! :D He just wants to hug her all the time and it makes him embarassed.

I love that moment, that was my favourite to write between them, just Abigail' realistaion of what she's done and then James turning around to hug her ever so tightly.

He's the best at hugs and I really want one!

The James Bond reference is going to be a big part of the future of this story and the sequel called 'The Unspeakable'. Of course James wants to be a superhero :P

Thank you once again for being so awesome!! :D

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Review #2, by icingonmycake 

8th September 2014:
Nice little chapter, loved the James Bond part obviously, and CHEESE. And I liked the guess about Unspeakable too, even I've always thought they were something like special agents. On to the next!

Author's Response: Thank you! Ahhh yes, James loves James Bond and cheese. :P He's a very strange guy.
Yay! I'm so glad that someone else thinks that about them! :D

Thanks hun!

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Review #3, by potterfan310 

14th August 2014:

Michelle is still being nice? Someone must have slipped that a girl a potion or put a charm on her something :p

James is adorable, bless him. I LOVE him and his characterisation especially as he's got the geeky side to him to.


Definitely a different side of Hugo I've heard about now.

AHH SHE PRACTICALLY CUDDLED HIM! WhAt!? They are so perfect for one another, why cannot they admit it to one another, and maybe their self (I'm looking at Abigail, still being in denial about her feelings for him).

James would probably fall head over heels if and when he finds out who Abigail's dad is. Hopefully the day James gets to meet him he'll turn into a starstruck, gawky, bumbly mess of a boy who is so adorable.

Off to the next one!


Author's Response: Hey!!

I know!! It's crazy! Something is definitely up with her, someone must have slipped her a potion or a charm.

Yay! I love him too! He is such a geek, he keeps it hidden from others though and Abigail helps to bring it out.

She did! They are so perfect for each other! They need to be together all the time and admit to their feelings!!

Haha he really will, it will come out soon and I can't wait for you to read that chapter! I'm so excited for it :D

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Review #4, by JKsarmy 

12th August 2014:
Love this chapter! These two are a match made in heaven! It frustrates me how Abigail is friends with Michelle still after everything,although I understand why she is. I can't wait until James finds out who her dad is!:) fantastic writing as usual. Xx

Author's Response: Haha Michelle is not a nice person, Abigail really needs better friends. James will find out soon enough, don't you worry! Thank you so much for being so awesome! xx

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