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Review #1, by Teddy1993 

28th September 2014:
Another fantastic chapter. Well, as if I didn't hate the Carrows enough already... You just don't touch McGonagall.

It's good to see Astoria helping Ginny, Neville and Luna. I wonder if she might join the D.A. at some point. Although that should be pretty weird as a Slytherin.

Author's Response: Hello!! :) Yeah, that was pretty awful - I really wanted the real, everyday horror of the Carrows to come through, so I'm glad it was effective. It would be really awkward as a Slytherin but Tor is breaking the moulds so you never know!! :D Thanks so much!!

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Review #2, by nott theodore 

16th August 2014:
Hi again!

Oh no, that last line of this chapter has me apprehensive about pressing the 'next chapter' button, even while I'm writing this review. I don't want to see things get even worse!

Ugh, I hate the way that Carrow is now deliberately but slyly persecuting Astoria as well as the other students just because she stood up to her and dared to challenge her authority. It definitely wasn't a great idea to make an enemy of her in the very first week of term, although the progression of the lessons seems very believable and realistic and it just makes me even angrier that someone like that could have been allowed to teach in a school and have authority over students! She's so terrible and sadistic, and seems to take so much pleasure from hurting the students and making their life hell. At the beginning of this story I'd have thought that Tor would have some measure of protection because she's in Slytherin, but after defying the Carrows there's not much chance of that.

I really liked the way that you included what's happening in the Defence Against the Dark Arts lessons, as well. It's really terrible and I can imagine the rumours racing around the school so quickly, and I think that Theo's attitude is understandable, and one that a lot of people would share. It's all about surviving for them now, and while they should be concentrating on their exams they've got to face a regime like this one.

I felt so sorry for Tor, having to deal with the aftermath of what Carrow made her do to Michael and worrying that Michael would think she didn't care about it. I'm really glad that Anthony came and reassured her about it, because I didn't think Michael was the sort of person to hold a grudge when she obviously didn't want to hurt him. At least he's keeping under the radar now but I really like the way that all the little acts of defiance and resistance are growing and mounting up to the extent that the Carrows are having to intensify their already dreadful punishments. It just shows that there's a spirit there which they're not able to break.

The scene with Anthony and Tor was great, too, and I like the fact that their friendship with Terry is enough to make them trust Tor as well. It's great that he's decided to become more open about who he is and his decisions, but I get the feeling there are certain people who might make use of that if they get the chance. But from that scene I'm even more worried than I was before about Terry, because if nobody's heard of him then I have no idea what could have happened to him before he gets to the scene in the prologue...

It was kind of uncomfortable to read about the way all the other students in Slytherin are turning on Draco now that he's back at school, as well as pupils from other houses. I felt sorry for Draco there, actually, but I can understand it. All of them are suffering so much, even if they're the sorts of people enjoying it, there's a lot of tension and pressure, and the easiest way to release that is to take it out on a target like Draco.

It was really sweet of Tor to go after Draco, though, and I can see little moments like that possibly helping to found their later relationship. Even if he did turn round and attack Peakes with as much gusto as Peakes attacked him, which wasn't great, and the ominous warning about what he's doing when he goes home for the weekends. I'm wondering about what that is and how it could affect Tor...

It's quite worrying for Tor, especially, who's always believed in how powerful her parents are, that they're not able to do anything to stop the Carrows carrying out their torture in the school. I feel like that might prompt her even more to turn towards the students who are resisting and take matters into her own hands, trying to protect herself and others if her parents aren't able to.

Ooh, I didn't realise that Tor would be so involved in canon events like this one! I really enjoyed reading about Ginny again in this chapter and the way that she trusts Tor, making it enough for the others to trust her as well, even though Neville's still suspicious of her being a Slytherin. It was brave of Tor to make the decision to lead Carrow and Demetria away from the office though, especially as it put her so much at risk! But I'm just grateful she did because if she hadn't then Ginny and the others would probably have been found by Carrow rather than Snape and I suspect the punishment wouldn't be anywhere near as mild as the one they received from Snape.

And now I'm really nervous about what's going to happen next...

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Review #3, by Ziska 

19th July 2014:
I've just spent the past few days reading this story. I love how you have woven the events of DH with what is happening in your story. I'm sad that it seems like we are getting to the end. I have loved reading about Tor and her friends and Terry. I really want there to be a happy ending for her and Terry. Thanks so much for a really enjoyable story. I look forward to reading the rest.

Author's Response: Hello! :)

Wow, thank you so much! This review is so lovely and really means the world to me. I'm so pleased you're enjoying the story and Tor and Terry.

This novel is nearly complete, but there is also going to be two sequels which I've been working on planning!

Thanks so much for all your kind words! ♥

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Review #4, by marauderfan 

15th July 2014:

I love how you've woven bits of DH in here even though Harry wasn't at school knowing what was going on during this time, there's clear indications, like Yaxley's office raining. And Anthony checking on his DA coin.

No time like the present right? It's nice to see that the war is initiating some people to live their life all they can, so it's nice to see Anthony becoming more comfortable with who he is. But omg that letter. So sad :( I really liked that scene though with Anthony and Tor, it was really nice to see them become closer friends.

One of the strongest parts of this chapter is how you focus so much on the rumours of what's happening outside Hogwarts. Since there's not much news that gets through which hasn't been screened by sensationalising from the Daily Prophet, or altered by the Carrows/Ministry, all they have to go on is things that may not be true, and you really captured that mood here.

I like what you've done with Draco too, how you're pointing out his real fall from grace in the eyes of the other slytherins - he used to be a ringleader of sorts and even though the other Slytherins claimed they didn't like Dumbledore, now that he's gone they are holding it against Draco - probably not helped by the negative publicity that his family has now, they don't want to be associated with him anymore. Its something that never showed during DH (because Harry wasn't there to witness it) but it completely makes sense, I hadn't thought about it that way before I read this fic.

I loved the scene with Ginny, Neville, Luna, and Tor! In particular your characterization of Neville - I can see him being quite distrustful of Tor until he has a reason not to be. And as always, your Ginny is fab. Luna too. I found it quite funny that Snape isn't able to set his own passwords and still has Dumbledore's silly sweets passwords, but oooh they were trying to steal the sword! I love how you've worked that in. And I'm so proud of Tor - she did get them caught, but it's easier to be caught by Snape than by the Carrows, that's for sure. Good thinking on her part.

Askdfjs what is happening to Terry though!? I have a feeling we're almost back to the scene in the prologue. So.. he's at least alive now, although I can't imagine he's doing too well. omg. update soon!

Author's Response: Hey hey!! :D

Gah, I'm sorry for responding so late to this!! I'm so excited that you liked this chapter, and you know that your support on this story means the world!! ♥

I love tying in the canon bits and I've been looking forward to Yaxley's office woes since choosing him as Tor's father. Hehe.

I'm not sure why Anthony picked that moment to come out to Tor, but perhaps because I always knew he was gay and just hadn't really told the readers yet? I really adore him as a character and he's so nice to Tor, so it was fun adding him in though.

I'm glad you liked the mood of the chapter and how the gossip and fear was leaking through. Writing Hogwarts during the Carrows is so tricky because it would have been such a tough time for the students before all hell breaks loose, so I'm excited you thought it was done well.

Yes! Draco has sort of fallen from favour even though he's part of the Death Eaters. He has no power anymore and he's really changed a lot because of it. It sort of makes Tor bond with Draco more while at the same time fearing him and knowing he's dangerous because he's desperate.

I'm so pleased you liked Neville! Writing new, DH, tough Neville was hard for me so I'm glad you thought I pulled him off okay as well as the other two. One of Tor's strengths is thinking on her feet and being impulsive: when she has a long time to fret about something it often goes wrong but she is good at those instant decisions to save the day.

Hehe, well you know this by now but we are definitely almost there! Writing these last few chapters were so exciting because I just couldn't wait to bring the readers to the final scene. :D

Thanks so much, my dear!!! ♥

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