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Review #1, by sarah 

23rd August 2015:
love the character cross overs :D

Author's Response: Thank you! There's going to be a lot!

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Review #2, by oldershouldknowbetter 

23rd January 2015:
Review #13: the review which observes the observer.

Quidditch – it always rears its ugly head in a school fic sometime. It is usually used, as you do here to elicit responses and generate situations to further usually the characterisation of your protagonists, but sometimes even to further the plot.

Here, because Abigail is not a player nor indeed is she even interested in Quidditch, it is all about what the situation brings to our attention about her character.

The counterpoint between the two friends is emphasised here. When Abigail is talking to Michelle about her crush it’s all supportive, when it’s the other way around Michelle is down on her again. ‘Fancy Man’ she calls James denigratingly. I wonder if it is more than just mere petulance? I wonder if it is verging into spitefulness because Abigail’s crush is actually talking to her whereas Michelle’s probably doesn’t even know she exists? We don’t know this exactly, but there is no evidence within Abigail’s perception boundary to indicate that Michelle and Ethan have ever even talked.

Abigail is a bit of a social chameleon. Becomes excited about Quidditch (and by corollary most other things as well) only once they are right in front of her. It unfortunately speaks to her timidness as well as her desire to blend in; to fit in. The low opinion she has of herself won’t allow her to anticipate good things happening to her so when they come they are enjoyed as they present themselves. Any anticipation she has is usually of a negative kind.

Ha, the mystery of numb bum explained – I’d always wondered too.

I’m very glad you resisted the urge to describe the match. Abigail is not interested and it would have rang false for her (and hence the perspective of the story) to pay too much interest in it. We know that James played – her cheers – we know who won and we know what position James played; that is all that we need.

Now gossip, the grist upon which the mill of teenage fiction feeds.

It is so good that she has found some other friends at last. The friends have almost entered the story by osmosis. So gradually have they snuck in that our narrator has not really truly noticed their addition – they just turn up sometimes. The truth is she won’t allow herself to believe that anyone could actively want to become her friend.

Gossip is such a good friend to the storyteller – you can put down exposition and barefaced facts straight out into the narrative without much preamble at all.

So we learn here about some of the other inhabitants of the castle, specifically some Weasleys.

The two other girls manage to drag some information out of Abigail about her feelings for James. Good she needs to articulate it – the conversations she has with herself in her head are not productive; she is too used to hearing herself say (in her mind) she should be doing something and then ignoring it. They support her and bolster her feelings/hopes that he might like her back, even going so far as to dismiss Rebecca’s supposed hold over his affections.

Author's Response: It usually does, sometimes I dislike writing Quidditch (Which is a problem as I have an entire story that's Quidditch central... whoops!) Abigail is only interested when James plays :P

Michelle just needs to grow up, it needs to always be about her and heaven forbid Abigail needs her to be happy for her or give her nice advice. Poor Abigail, it is getting spiteful and it's definitely because James is talking to her and Ethan wants nothing to do with Michelle.

I always wondered about the numbness as well! :D

I'm glad I did too, I find it very difficult, she really isn't interested in the match at all.

Gossip is what makes a teenage girls world go round... or crumble apart. It can go two ways. :P Yep, Weasleys are mentioned! And they will be mentioned again in the future, or at least a few more of them. :P

She does need to articulate it to someone that cares, which isn't Michelle and you're right it's not productive at all to keep having them in her head. They do support her, they're good friends.

Michelle should take note!

Thanks once again!

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Review #3, by icingonmycake 

8th September 2014:
A cute little chapter, really liked the chat the girls, had and I can't wait to see James next chapter!

Author's Response: Awww thank you!

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Review #4, by newbeatle 

7th August 2014:
I really love the story. As I read every new chapter I'm falling in love with the characters, who are the best version I've read in a while. I wish you luck with the story and hope that there will be some new chapters soon(ish)

Author's Response: Awww that's made me fell so amazing and happy, I'm so glad that you love my story so much. I absolutely love hearing what people think and you've seriously made my day! There is a new chapter up and I've sent the next one to my beta, so it's on its way! :D

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Review #5, by potterfan310 

29th June 2014:
Me again :D

Whoo, Go Gryffindor.

No, Abigail, James is your fancy man.♥

Michelle is behaving, either she's ill or something is definitely up. Maybe she's somehow got Rebecca to go after James, pushing Michelle out of the running? AAhh theories everywhere.

Ahh Louis and Horatio!!! I refuse to mention her name (you know which her :p)

James is good looking, hell yes! So are most of the Weasley/Potter boys (and girls. Haha it's a shame I love Molly and Louis too much, but a teeny part of me wants Horatio to date Isabella.

James likes you Abigail, see what's in front of you woman!! I am so glad the girls are telling her about James and he catching glancing at her. ♥♥

Can't wait for the next one and more James :p


Author's Response: Yay!! How are you?

I agree!

I know! I think the entire world is in shock that she's being nice, she must be up to something. Ahhh, the theories! Maybe it's true? Maybe it's not? We shall see.

I know!!! We don't mention her name, but yes! Loratio!!!

Oh yes he is! Haha, That would be fun, a Horatio/Isabella romance, I wonder how everyone would feel about that?

Open your eyes Abigail!!! Haha, others have caught James when he thinks he's being sneaky.

More is up! :D

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