5 Reviews Found

Review #1, by Teddy1993 

27th September 2014:
Amazing chapter! The detention was very well written. It gave me the chills :)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! :D I'm so excited you liked it!

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Review #2, by nott theodore 

16th August 2014:
Hello lovely!

Oh my goodness, this was such an awful chapter! (Not awful because of the writing but just because the content was quite horrifying, I'd never say that your writing was awful :P).

Okay, so with a chapter entitled 'The Carrows', I knew that it wasn't going to be very happy, and with Demetria being back as well I knew that things would start to get worse for Tor. But things in this chapter seemed to be so truly dreadful for her that I'm kind of so shocked it's hard trying to work out what to say about this. Nevertheless, I love the way that you've written it, because while all of these things are absolutely horrible, they seem so true to character for both of the Carrow siblings and for the sort of regime we know from canon that they established at Hogwarts during this year.

I'm in two minds about Tor deciding to stand up to Alecto Carrow in the Muggle Studies class, to be honest. One part of me is proud of her for making a stand like that and for doing something so brave and different from anything that she'd have done when this novel first started, but then at the same time it makes me worried, because to mark herself out like that in the first week of the year is not a great idea. Her father's protection as a Death Eater can only go so far!

All the same, I thought that the idea of researching their own family trees in the Muggle Studies class fit really well with the sort of order the Carrows wanted to establish in the school, and the way they wanted to promote the pureblood supremacy ideals. It was great to see that Demelza was standing up to her as well, and that there are people prepared to do that sort of thing right from the beginning, although there hasn't been much mention of a real organised resistance yet. Even though the approach that Tor took when she challenged Carrow was quite mean and made it seem like she was asserting the pureblood ideals, it was great to see the character development there. She's grown so much and doesn't care that much what other people think of her now, particularly her housemates, although I think that might not be the wisest decision because they could make her life very difficult in the next year!

Ah, so Draco is back. Even though there's no hint of a romance between them at this point in time, I do really enjoy reading the scenes between Draco and Astoria, seeing that they know each other and knowing that one day they'll end up married.

Sometimes I just remember that Tor is only fifteen (well, sixteen soon, I suppose) and realise just how much she has to deal with. All of the students in this castle at this point are just children, really, and they shouldn't have to face such awful decisions which aren't really a decision at all. I feel so sorry for her!

Oh my goodness, the last scene really shocked me! I know that Carrow's evil but I didn't imagine she'd do something like this to Astoria, especially not in the first week of term! I thought when Michael was joining her for the detention that it wouldn't be so bad, but it was way worse than I could have thought. Ugh, trust Carrow to come up with a way to punish Tor for defying her, even though she knows she's not able to do much because Yaxley's her father. But I just felt so sorry for Tor, because she thinks she's strong but can't resist that sort of curse, which is no wonder, since she's so young and rather naive. But Demetria (or someone) has told Carrow about her relationship with Terry and I'm just so worried for her!

I feel like the next chapter is going to be difficult for Tor, coming to terms with whatever she's been forced to do to Michael but at the same time knowing that her father would probably have been proud of her for doing it. She's stuck in such an awful situation! I get the feeling that an incident like this one might lead to her taking a side more openly, which I'm not sure is going to be any less dangerous for her, but I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next!

Sian :)

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Review #3, by samitaclover 

5th July 2014:
I cannot tell you how long I have been looking for an Astoria fanfiction on this website that dares to explain her Hogwarts life and beyond. You are an absolutely brilliant writer! I'm so glad you are pursuing Astoria's story, and have done such an awesome job so far. Also, I really like the celebrities you picked out to represent the characters. Have you planned out the rest of the series (I assume you are writing two more after you finish this one)? I can't wait to see how you tie Tor in with Draco later, I already like the few interactions they have had. Of course I want her and Terry to end up together, but I know that's not the case.

Patiently waiting for new chapters! :)

Author's Response: Hello!!

Wow, thank you so much! Your kind words mean so much and I'm so glad you like Tor and all her struggles. This story will always be so close to my heart since it was my first fanfic.

Haha, I'm pleased you like the celebrities - it's funny to watch movies and shows with the face claims because I just associate them with the GfS characters now. :P

I have planned out the two sequels and even started writing bits and pieces of the second one since this is nearly finished. Tor's future with Draco is a long road, and there might be some twists and surprises along the way. I'm glad you like their interactions so far, the long term relationship is so fun to develop, but her and Terry's future is very interesting as well.

Haha, I sound so cryptic, even to myself.

Thanks so much for the wonderful review, Samita!! It really made my day, and the next chapter is in the queue and the one after that nearly fiinished!! :D You are awesome!! ♥

(Also, in case you haven't discovered it already, the story Traitorous Hearts by Penelope Inkwell is an amazing story about Astoria!).

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Review #4, by marauderfan 

1st June 2014:

This chapter was so intense! I loved it, but also hated it so much because of what the Carrows made Tor do, that's just horrible! I feel so bad for her, and for Michael. But based on the beginning of this chapter, I think this is going to make Tor so firmly on the side of the resistance. She has been leaning that way, but now I think it'll be even harder for her to pretend she's anything else. Which means many of her fellow Slytherins may not be too happy with her, but I think after this, Tor knows what side she's on and maybe Amaris' friendship won't matter to her anymore in that light.

The beginning part of the chapter was really good too (yes I realise I'm doing this review backwards, sorry) and it really highlighted how much Tor has changed, and even how she was still a bit influenced by all the mentors of her childhood. When she was standing up to Alecto Carrow in class though, despite that it was a little foolish, I was totally cheering for her because someone needed to make the professor not be completely in charge. Good for her for questioning authority, and it was an interesting way of doing it too that didn't expose her loyalties yet. But I suppose that may change... if Tor speaks up again, which now that I think about it is unlikely after what happened to Michael. Gah I dont know what I would do in her situation, that's so much for a fifteen year old to handle. This story is so gripping and you are doing such an AMAZING job with it, I'm on the edge of my seat waiting for more!

Author's Response: Hi Kristin! :)

Ah I was so excited to hear what people thought of this chapter! It was really hard to write, especially the end because :( but thanks so much for leaving all these thoughts on it - I really don't know what Tor and I would do without you! ♥

Yes, you're right: these sorts of events which she can't hide from are very important for Tor's development and could lead to her firmly asserting a side. She's floating by right now with the other Slytherins but since she's been on their radar before she should be more careful - or not be careful, depending on what she wants. I think you're right, though - she's changed a lot from that girl who cared about what people thought of her.

Challenging the power! :P Yeah, I was proud of her too, the old Tor wouldn't have been brave enough even if she did take a bit of a snobby approach towards Carrow. The whole experience is so awful, and I've been toying around with how to begin the next chapter and the impact of the incident in Tor's head, since she of course will be feeling terrible.

It really is a lot for a fifteen year old! :( Well, she's almost sixteen, not that it makes it much better.

Thank you so much, Kristin! Your reviews really keep me going and inspired for this story, and I hope to have the next chapter up soon! ♥

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Review #5, by mrsdeanthomas421 

1st June 2014:
It feels almost horrible to write great job on such a gruesome chapter, but honestly this chapter and the story as a whole are so well written. The internal struggle of Tor has been developed so nicely and I cannot wait to see what comes next. I miss Terry and am praying that he makes an appearance (even just in a letter!) sometime soon. Please update soon and keep up the good work! I get so excited when I see a new chapter.

Author's Response: Hello! :)

Ah, thank you so much! :) It means so much to me that you're enjoying the story, and Tor's struggles and how she's changed throughout the story. I really love writing it and it's very lovely to hear when people are enjoying it.

Terry won't stay gone forever, I promise! :) I'm working on the next chapter now and hope to have it up in a week or so, fingers crossed.

Thank you so much for the wonderful review! ♥

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