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4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by TidalDragon 

7th December 2014:
Howdy! Reviving the review thread was a great idea, so I'm here to pay it forward!

I think it's interesting how Wren's connection to the rabbit is growing more and more invasive despite the tea. I don't know if this has to do with the longevity of the connection between them or if it has to do with their little overlord's increasing proximity to Hogwarts, but it's unfortunate for her. I'm glad she was able to get some good shots though despite the trouble.

I think you're doing a good job with the Albus/Wren dynamic. You definitely leave the reader with that necessary "when will it HAPPEN" feeling, but at the same time you show delightfully how neither of them will get out of their own way so that what they both want can come to fruition. SO true of potential romance between friends.

If I ever get around to clearing out my thread AND the reviews I owe to my challenge participants you can be sure I'll be back to find out how things progress from here!

Author's Response:

Hello again!

It is very unfortunate for Wren that her relationship with Bunny keeps getting stronger. It's probably due to a combination of factors. I do know that I'll be much more careful with story mechanics in my next tale. This bit with the rabbits gave me fits. My muse is so demanding!

SO glad that the Wren/Albus dynamic is coming across clearly. They have some things to work through before they get to where they are going. I just hope it doesn't become too tiresome.

Thanks so much for stopping by and leaving me this lovely review!


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Review #2, by Infinityx 

16th April 2014:
Hi again, Pix!

Hmm, Nate. I don't know what to make of him. He seems like just a normal character, albeit an observant one. But every other character in this story seems to have some kind of ulterior purpose so far, so I'm a little suspicious of this nice guy. Ugh, Pix, you're making me suspicious of everyone!

Albus. Why do boys have to be so dumb when it comes to their feelings? And Scorpius too. They make me feel like shaking them till their teeth rattle, and they get a bit of sense knocked into their head!

When Gran was mentioned again, it reminded me of her wish to move away from the bungalow. Now I'm puzzling over that again. I hope Gran is on the road to recovery now. She did seem like it a few chapters ago. Maybe give the readers a small peek into that side of the story?

What is happening to Wren? She's just accepting all the crazy stuff that's happening like it's nothing! She doesn't react to the bunny teleporting out of its cage and near her feet, she's making plans to lure the big rabbit out keeping its powers in mind...*shudder* I hope she doesn't end up losing her mind. (although that would be a great twist :D)

OH MY GOSH IT'S THE SAME BUNNY. I suspected it, but now it's confirmed! This is one hell of a monstrous plot, Pix.

Did I tell you that I love the words you use? There are so many wonderful adjectives in here, and they all seem deliberately used, but at the same time, they just fit so naturally. Your writing is just lovely.

Update soon, before I go crazy!

~Erin

'Huffleclaw-Ravenpuff Eggstravaganza'

Author's Response:

Hi again, Erin!

Nate's pretty normal, I guess. For now. :P It's okay. You can be suspicious. Wren should be that suspicious too. It might help.

Albus is trying, but Scorpius is just dumb.

Gran's going to come up again later in the story. I couldn't just leave her in the state she was in without some development. But it might be a little while before we get to her. There are all these stupid teens that need dealing with first. And the bunnies.

Yes! You got it! Nate owes you a soda for being on top of things in the story. Go ahead, Nate. Give it to her.

Aww, you love my words! I love your reviews! You are so incredibly sweet!!

I plan to update weekly, unless I get stuck in revision... like chapter 16... which is actually chapter 17 now, since I had to break up one of the earlier chapters... so confusing... but the next chapter (which was 15, but I guess it's now 16) is mostly ready, so you can expect it soon-ish.

Thanks for all the wonderful reviews! And don't let the bunnies near you!


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Review #3, by MargaretLane 

15th April 2014:
Hmm, Mr. Summers still isn't looking well. I wonder what that means.

And Sloan isn't feeling well either. I wonder if that's just an offhand comment or if it's relevant. I'm getting suspicious of everything now, from anybody ill to new students joining the school (even if they did so a year previously). I just can't help feeling pretty much everything you say here could be relevant.

And now I'm wondering what Nate means by "you people." Wren and her friends, Hogwarts students in general, people that aren't him?

Oh, oh, it looks like the tea isn't working so well anymore. I wonder why that is.

I wonder does her glance at the lake behind her old home mean Dillon is there.

Author's Response:

Yes. Be suspicious of everything. If Wren was like that, she'd be better off. Maybe not everything is relevant, but I don't like throwing around little details "just because". Though I will admit that some of it is for "flavor", rather than "necessity".

I still can't believe you've made it this far! This is amazing! I try to post weekly, so if I've gotten you curious enough, I hope you'll keep reading.

Thanks so much for all the reviews and sharing your thoughts with me!


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Review #4, by CambAngst 

12th April 2014:
Hi, pix! It's my catching up day!

Grrr... teenagers and the silly games they play. I get that there's an element of emotional hedging going on with Wren. She doesn't want to allow herself to believe there's potential between herself and Albus, only to have it yanked away if Albus capitulates to one of the gaggle of desperate girls who seem to follow him around. But that said, she's being kind of ridiculous. Great Merlin himself could tell her that Albus had a crush on her and she'd find some way to dismiss him.

needs to eat more fiber. -- Eww. Seriously, pix, that's gross. Just, eww...

Well, so much for Wren's schoolwork not slipping. Maybe it's just this one chapter, but at the moment it feels like Smeed's tea is starting to lose the battle with Bunny. I hope that's not the case.

Yep, definitely losing the battle. The rabbit just teleported across her room and all she thinks is, "Sure, you can tag along." Sigh.

I guess being a Vampire Rabbit Thrall is doing good things for Wren's self confidence, even if the price is rather high. Wow, I could instantly relate to Wren and Albus trying to sync up their schedules to lure his rabbit out of hiding. All that scene was missing was smart phones.

Ooh! So who is actually at Wren's Gram's old house? Dillon, perhaps? One of his thralls? All of these telepathic episodes are starting to get really concerning.

Seems like Albus isn't the only one who's kind of hopeless where members of the opposite sex are concerned. Scorpius's plan was awfully dumb. Almost Ron-worthy, from Ron's younger school years.

Just when I was starting to think that maybe James was getting over himself. Well, I guess Albus and Scorpius did provoke him by taking the map. And now he's taken it back. jinxing the soap was a clever ploy. Albus did not see that one coming.

Yay, I'm all caught up! When is Dillon coming to town? He has to be well on his way by this point. I want to see a showdown! Great chapter!

Author's Response:

You've pegged it right with Wren. She's not giving up her emotional security that easily. She just can't right now. It's doubtful that she's believe anyone except Albus, and he'd have to march right up to her and tell her in no uncertain terms himself... which right now doesn't seem all that likely. We'll see...

Hey, fiber is essential. Nate knows this firsthand. At least I skipped over the other essential bits of reality, like brushing teeth and showering... *reads on* Oh dear. Hmm.

See? See? Character growth through mind-numbing rabbit connections... Go Wren! And no smart phones in a Next Gen HP fic!!! Except if you're talking about Burns. LOL! Wow, I really messed this story up, didn't I?

Okay, so don't get too excited about that vision.. it was sort of a memory, but not Wren's. You should still be concerned.

Scorpius had a great plan, I don't know what you're talking about. Oh, I guess you wanted to see a plan that actually worked... well, don't rely on Scorpius for something like that. He's got *ideas*, see. And according to him, they're all brilliant. This is why Albus doesn't take his advice. But isn't this how people this age learn things? By watching everyone else do it the wrong way? I bet one of these characters is going to write a book, titled "How Not to Ask Someone Out". 1. Don't ask them out directly. 2. Ask someone ELSE out first. Just to see if you can get a date and practice all your stupid moves. 3. Talk to the person you're interested in, but don't say anything really relevant, because if they think you're interested, they might actually be interested back, and then you'll have to be honest with them, and where has that gotten anyone in this world?

It'll be a bestseller.

Dillon is coming, I promise! There will be a showdown. But, ermm... there's a bunch of chapters to this fic, so hopefully I can keep you entertained in the meantime.

Thank you so much for another lovely review!

And remember your daily fiber. :P


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