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Review #1, by TreacleTart 

16th August 2015:
Hey Pix,

I'm back with another review!

I found Wren's reaction to the news that her grandparents had been allowed to die sort of odd. I understand that she's all about trying to heal things, but I would think that having worked with animals, she would also be able to recognize when it's too late. I really honestly believe that most of her anger is stemming from the fact that she was kept in the dark about the whole thing.

I do think it's a bit unfair that her mom didn't tell her what was going on. Sixteen is young and yes it's natural to want to spare children from the cold realities of life, but it's old enough to comprehend death and related issues.

I wonder if Wren hadn't been dealing with all this weird stuff going on with Bunny if she'd have reacted quite as strongly as she did.v

And the interactions at the end with the bartender were quite ominous. What was this tea he gave her? Is he actually a good guy who recognized how Wren's mind has been taken over by Dillon? What is this herb? Is it for bunny? Does it increase or decrease Dillon's ability to communicate through bunnY?

More solid work!


Author's Response:

I think your insight into Wren's anger is true. We have to let the teens think things through on their own terms. Sometimes emotions run so strong that they don't even make sense to themselves, but they rationalize that if they feel it, then it must be true.

Argh. My next fic is going to be about grumpy old men, I swear.

All the questions!

Let's discuss this over suspicious tea while snuggling bunnies, shall we?

Thanks for another lovely review!


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Review #2, by Roisin 

11th August 2015:

This might be a shorter review because I didn't stop to take notes while I was reading. BUT OH MAN, SMEED! He's so interesting! I can't wait to find out all about him.

The truth about Frank and Alice was definitely really devastating. I think you handled the kind of ambiguousness and ambivalence there really well. Like, yeah, they might have been suffering. Then again, it's really hard to stomach the fact that the family totally refused treatment that might have worked. Ugh. I understand why Wren was upset about it. The line about trying harder when it came to people was especially poignant.

Wonderful chapter, as always :D

Author's Response:

Aww, no notes?? Haha. I didn't know you took notes while reading.
I hadn't meant for such a serious theme when I first had the idea for this story, but then it just came out that way, and it made a lot of sense within the context of the story, so I let it ride. Wren's not the type to be melodramatic about things, but she is quite affected by things, as anyone would be under these circumstances.

Thanks for your words!


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Review #3, by UnluckyStar57 

15th March 2015:
After months and months, I am BACK to review chapter 9, and maybe I won't be so tardy next time. There are so many chapters of this crazy, creepy, brilliant story now! :O

Honestly, I'm sort of the dumb, gullible reader who will believe anything you throw at me, as long as it's mildly plausible. So the hints of zombie-ism, wandless magic (or lack of ability to do magic), and Gran's dark and tragic actions are spinning around in my head and I have no idea what to do with them.

Ugh, but I love it. Wren is dealing with a WHOLE LOT, rabbits aside. Like, she could probably be diagnosed with a Muggle psychological disorder at this point because of how messed up her life (and thereby, her mind) has become. But is she turning into some kind of weird rabbit zombie?! I'm not sure at all...

It's absolutely terrible that she had to find out about Gran's decision from some paperwork at St. Mungo's. That in itself is scarring, coupled with the fact that the person behind the decision is the one who gave her a passion for saving the lives of animals in the first place... All that revelation really makes me think about the perspective we have on Gran, though. Is she having these spells of un-Gran-ness because of repressed guilt over "killing" her son and daughter-in-law? Has she somehow been affected by the creepiness of the rabbits/other creatures she took care of? Is she turning into a zombie?!

Seriously, that stuff with seeing Alice Longbottom's hand twitch and imagining zombies really was very creepy. Thank Merlin for Albus the Nerd, who tells zombie jokes that calm Wren's nerves--as well as my own. Like, if I thought killer rabbits were bad, killer rabbit zombies are even WORSE.

Question: Is any of this inspired by Bunnicula, that children's book about the Dracula-rabbit? It sometimes reminds me of that, except that this is WAY darker and I continue to be baffled by the rabbits (but in a good--albeit creepy--way).

I'm definitely on Team Smeed-Is-Not-A-Bad-Guy, but I could be very wrong. The tea that he gave Wren seemed to help a lot, and I'm hoping that he kind of knows about the rabbit situation and is on a mission to stop it. (Plus, I might remember from a few chapters back--is he a vampire/immortal-esque being of some sort?) I thought the tea might make her forget about that stupid rabbit, but no, she thought of Bunny immediately after drinking the tea...

Aggh! Such a brilliant web you weave! I've really got to start keeping up with this story more, because every time I read it, I get sucked back in...

Again, sorry this review was so late. I apologize for being the human equivalent of a trashcan, but I hope you won't hold it against me. :P


Author's Response: Oh Hey!!!

After many weeks, I am finally giving a response to this awesome review of yours!

You are definitely my kind of reader! Mildly plausible is a specialty of mine, as is zombie-ism, wandless magic (it's canon, sort of :P)and old people with secrets to hide. So glad you're on the same train with me on that. Which is why I'm also so happy you have returned to this story! Woot!

Aww, no. This story is not inspired by Bunnicula, but a friend of mine pointed out that vampire rabbits have been done before. I never read that book, but after someone told me about it, I Googled the plot. Interesting. I might have to read those books, just to say that I have. :)

Team Smeed-Is-Not-A-Bad-Guy is a good team to be on. And yeah, he's a vampire. That might make him sort of bad, but not in a bad way. Wow. That just didn't make any sense at all. Now I'm messing with my own head.

Feel free to get sucked in anytime. You're always welcome! Currently, I'm writing the last five chapters (30 in all), and I won't be posting again until this thing is done. I have this unnerving fear of posting too early, and then discovering that I dropped an essential thread. Eek! The nightmares!

Thanks for the awesome review!


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Review #4, by adluvshp 

21st January 2015:
Hey again!

This was another brilliant chapter. Smeed is definitely interesting - I like his character though - I think he kinda knows about the rabbits and helped Wren clear her head with the tea. I hope she continues taking those in future as well.

Reading about Gran's decision was quite sad and Wren's reaction to it all was of course believable. I liked how you showed the whole situation here. Poor Wren, I really wish she could talk to someone about her fears of being like Gran and losing her magic and stuff, she really needs to be taken seriously on the matter and that bunny needs to be looked into.

I enjoyed the narrative as usual and was pleased to see a good balance here between descriptions and dialogue/thoughts. No CC here. Good job!


Author's Response:

Smeed has been giving me fits. I like his character too, which is probably why I went through the effort of including more of him in the story than I had originally planned. It turned out that he was right to demand it. Crazy subplots!

I wasn't sure about putting so much of Gran in the story, but at the time, it felt right. It gives Wren some heavy background that she has to deal with.

I'm glad you felt the narrative was balanced here. Thanks for the continued comments!

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Review #5, by MargaretLane 

11th April 2014:
YES, Wren, you should DEFINITELY tell someone about your headaches and losing your magic. As it is, I doubt anybody'd have the solution, but for all you know, it could be something quite minor that could be easily fixed. I can understand why she doesn't want to though. She seems really scared that it's something she's inherited from her grandparents, understandably, and it sounds as if she'd rather let it continue than have that confirmed. So I can understand her fear, but I still think she should tell somebody.

Maybe if Augusta begins to recover, it'll give her confidence, because she'll see mental health problems aren't necessarily incurable, so she might start thinking that even if this is something mental, it might well be possible to cure it.

*laughs at the strict policy on housing the undead*

And poor Wren. I'm not surprised the idea of ending up in St. Mungo's haunts her. Poor, poor girl.

Oh, that sentence about Albus visiting her if she loses her mind is so bleak.

And is it my imagination or is she becoming more...awake/aware of things now she's away from that rabbit. She seems to be able to focus on other things and question what is happening to her again, even though she's still getting headaches.

Oh, I didn't think of how the deaths of the Death Eaters could affect their condition. I guess I assumed their condition was a trauma reaction to extreme torture rather than a direct result of the spell, but that's an interesting idea.

I was sort of wondering how come they both died together. I guess this explains it. And I reckon it was the right choice, but gosh, what a decision to have to make. Poor Augusta.

I really like the way this story sort of explores the ethics of choosing to end another person's life, or just not prolong it. You never know when a cure might be found but then what if they were in pain all this time and had no chance of recovery? The latter seems likely if a cure wasn't found in 40 years. There are no easy answers and the story shows that. I'm just so sorry for everybody involved.

What does this guy know about her "new friend"? And if he knows something, why doesn't he warn her more directly?

No, I don't think Smeed poisoned Wren, but I do think he knows something. I'm beginning to think he might be "on the side of the angels" so to speak though. It seems like he's trying to help her. But if so, why doesn't he tell what he knows? If he knows anything, but that comment about her new friend indicates he does. I'm confused.

And gosh, that idea about Wren turning into a rabbit is interesting. I'd never have thought of that.

It does remind me of something that occurred to me a chapter or two back though and that I forgot to comment on and that's that maybe her panic attacks are caused by the rabbit being startled. Dillon said something about feeling the rabbit's panic when it's startled and when the rabbit seemed scared of the crowds at Hogwarts, Wren started shaking.

As regards not telling Wren, I think they made a mistake, but I can understand why they did it. After all, she may be sixteen now, but only a few short years ago, she was ten or twelve and it's hard to suddenly feel comfortable burdening somebody you've been in the position of protecting for so long. Must be even harder when it's your child and not a cousin or sibling or something. And while I'm sure she doesn't see it that way, sixteen IS still very young. I think it is old enough to be told, but whether I'd feel that if she were my child or grandchild is another matter.

Author's Response:
I had to make it believable that Wren would be reluctant to talk to someone about her problems/issues. I know it's something she SHOULD do, and under normal circumstances, she most likely would, but that would mess up my PLANS... so I have to continue torturing her and making her second guess things until those other things roll out.

I'm so mean.

At the same time, she is becoming more aware of what's happening to her.

For that issue, there really are no easy answers. It can be right and wrong all at the same time. I'm glad you appreciate the struggle that these characters have to deal with.

Yeah, why doesn't he just tell her what's going on? What's wrong with you, Smeed??

Okay, I can definitely confirm that Wren feels what her rabbit feels, to a certain extent. So you're reading into that correctly.

It IS difficult to judge whether a child is ready, or capable of dealing with such a hard hitting issue as that. It was Augusta who had the final say in it, and she's several generations removed from Wren. Tough things to discuss at any age.

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Review #6, by TidalDragon 

30th March 2014:
Well, well! As your A/N indicated, this chapter was pretty heavy. I think honestly it was a bit unfortunate for us that Wren was suffering from her rabbit withdrawal during some of it because we didn't get as much clarity and lucidity from her as we got regarding her grief about Augusta early on in the story. I felt that you were able to do some very strong things with those descriptions and emotions to develop Wren, but I didn't get the same sense here. It seemed somehow more straightforward and matter-of-fact, particularly when the symptoms ended the confrontation between Wren and Hannah. I was expecting some tears and shouting and more intensity I suppose.

Maybe this is a mistake, but I'm actually feeling better about Smeed after the tea incident. For me it actually seemed like he was trying to look after Wren, as if he somehow knew what was going on with her and was trying to stop it with an herbal concoction, but I was going to wait until she tried to next do magic to see if that's indeed the case.

As for Dillon, I dislike him even more than the rabbits. So unless there's a plot twist coming where he becomes this good person, I wouldn't mind if he meets as grisly an end as a 15+ rating will allow. So in sum, your story is inspiring some strong reactions in me, which I think is always a good thing for a writer, so good on you!

See you in the next chapter!

Author's Response:
Here, I argued with myself over just that thing. I could have allowed Wren to just let it all out when she was confronting her mother, but you are right. It was masked by the Bunny's connection to her. So yeah, the intensity was limited. It might have been a poor choice, but at this point, I just went with it.

Strong reactions are fantastic! *is plotting fate for Dillon*

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Review #7, by CambAngst 

28th February 2014:
Hi, pix! I am all over this!

"Mum? I'm... here."

She couldn't bring herself to call this place home.
-- Well there's a distinctly melancholy note to start the chapter off with. I get where Wren's coming from, though. After having a chance to be back at Hogwarts for a while, it can't be pleasant to be pulled back to the place that she's probably come to associate with any number of bad things -- leaving the bungalow, her great-grandmother's failing health and maybe the deaths of her grandparents.

There goes one of those awful, rabbit-induced headaches again!

Hmmnnn... It seems almost like Augusta is getting a little better. After her brief moment of clarity with Wren, now she's trying to help around the house a bit. Not really succeeding, but trying. Unfortunately, it seemed to ruin a conversation that Wren and her mother really need to have.

The whole zombie line of thought that Wren goes off on while she's waiting at St. Mungo's... yeah, that was a little odd. At the same time, however, I have a suspicion that it relates to your central plot somehow. I'm thinking more of the original voodoo concept of a zombie as a sort of automaton controlled by a dark sorcerer, not this idea of the brain-hungry undead that's all the rage with kids nowadays. Anyway, I'm glad that Albus was mostly able to talk her down from it.

Reading Frank and Alice's medical records made me sad, even given the different context. If there was any realistic expectation that the deaths of their torturers would somehow "lift" the curse damage, it must have been so incredibly difficult for the family when Rabastan and Rodolphus finally bought the farm. It would be like a moment of closure, but accompanied by horrible disappointment.

Oh, no! I feel so bad for Wren right now. I'm sure that Augusta had all of the good reasons in the world for signing the DNR's (I'll use the muggle term) for Frank and Alice. I think it goes without saying that the two of them wouldn't have wanted to have their lives prolonged artificially under the circumstances. But someone Wren's age wouldn't really understand that. I think it says a lot that she doesn't even think that it would have been her great-grandmother -- the rock of her world -- who signed the orders. All she can see is her mother "giving up" on her grandparents. Combine that with the residual anger Wren feels about having to leave the bungalow and this must have been a hard shot to take.

Aww, and then she accuses her mother of just that. My heart is seriously breaking for both of them. The things she says to Augusta were tough to read, but I know it's pretty much how I would have felt if I'd found out something like this after my great-grandmother or grandparents died. It's hard to be a teenager.

Hmmnn... so the man Hannah hired to work the bar gets more and more mysterious! "Be careful around your new friend." He slid a packet of dried herbs across the bar and it bumped her tea mug. "If you need more, I'll be here." -- I'm pretty sure I know what he means, even if Wren doesn't seem to. So where on earth does he fit into all of this? Is he some sort of wizarding equivalent of Van Helsing? I am dying to find out! Oh, wait, I can go beta read that new chapter and probably find out quite a bit...

Whatever it was, and whatever was going to happen to her, she would handle it on her own. -- Oh, no. I hope she doesn't take this too far.

Brilliant chapter! Looking forward already to the next!

Author's Response: Hi there! Can you believe it's another chapter already??

I know, the headaches. They just keep coming. And yes, Augusta seems to be making some sort of progress, because I couldn't just leave her like that. It wouldn't be fair, and I'm just not that mean.

Odd zombie thoughts... Wren has those. It happens now and again. And you're right, I definitely didn't have the brain-hungry undead in mind, and neither does Wren. They're just the mindless, automatron-type things that she's afraid of encountering. She's been staring at her grandparents like that all her life, so it's gotta have made some kind of impact.

I bet if Wren's family sat down with her and explained things to her, she probably would have come to terms with it eventually, but to find out this way, it was certainly a shock. But you know how decisions can come up hard and fast. Anyway, she takes it hard, and she has to get some of that frustration out at some point, right?

Haha, sorry to disappoint you with that next bit. We'll see more of the barman soon, I promise. (working on it right now, actually :P) It's coming. Slow. I'm slow. Sorry.

Thanks so much for the awesome review! You are awesome!!

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