4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by marauder5 

9th April 2015:
I really loved getting more of an insight to Tor's home life. Obviously it's different now, because of everything going on with Voldemort, but you can really see how that environment has shaped her. I can instantly feel her becoming more like Astoria and less like Tor, if that makes sense.

You really manage to convey a lot of emotions in me as a reader with your writing. I mean, in the HP books, the Death Eaters breaking out of Azkaban seemed like a disaster for me. But with the way you have made me love Pyxis and Theo, I can't help but feel thrilled for them, because they get to have their dad back! It's really quite paradoxical, the way I feel about it... But well done on your part. This whole story really makes the reader think of the other side in a whole different light.

It's also so fascinating to hear these characters paint the Aurors out to be the bad guys. I'm sure Moody would have never intentionally hurt a child, but whether it's true or not that he's the one to blame for their deaths, I'm sure that's how the Death Eaters and people on their side would make it sound.

Things just keep getting worse, aren't they? Now Yaxley has control over Thicknesse and I suppose they'll control the rest of the Ministry too any day now. It's all so perfectly written and built up, and I just fall more and more in love with this story for each chapter. You have such a beautiful talent and I really hope you're as proud of this story as you should be x

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Review #2, by Teddy1993 

23rd September 2014:
Absolutely terrific chapter. Once again you did a great job picturing the other side of the Death Eaters. You show that they really do have a human side, despite everything.

The news of the little Avery girl struck me as odd. However tough and hardened Moody may be, I just don't see him killing children. Hopefully, we'll find out more.

Author's Response: Hey!! :) I'm glad you liked the Death Eaters and their human side. Of course they would have these human moments of love and relief, which further confuses Tor because she is genuinely happy for her friends getting their dad back.

I didn't really imagine Moody killing a child either, so if he was responsible, it would have been an accident. However remember that this news is coming from the Death Eaters who would want to distort and demonize perceptions of the Order and the Aurors. Making the Order members like Moody into evil demons is part of the brainwashing they use to get kids like Tor to support the Death Eaters cause - that's how I imagined it, at least. They definitely want to use every reason possible to make Moody and the others seem like murderous monsters - propaganda and brainwashing is something that even Tor herself isn't aware happens to her.

Thanks so much for the great review!! ♥

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Review #3, by nott theodore 

16th August 2014:
Hello again!

I could tell from the chapter summary that this chapter was going to be an important one as far as canon events are concerned, and this is clearly the real beginning of the Ministry takeover. You wrote everything here so well (not that your writing is ever anything but brilliant) and I loved the way that you mingled all the canon events with the characters that we've grown to know really well.

I'd actually never really thought before about Voldemort and the Death Eaters making use of other houses but the Malfoys', but it makes sense that they would because everything couldn't have been based there. It was quite chilling to know that something was approaching and I really felt sorry for Tor, Daphne, Theo and Pyxis, who really are still children. It's so scary for them to know that something - or someone - is coming to the house that they're in but not be allowed to know who it is or what they're doing. Even with the advantages they feel it gives them, with the protection of their parents, it's difficult for them to face something like that.

It's only tiny, but I liked the way that Astoria's mother could repel her attempts at Leglimency really easily. So much of the concentration in the earlier chapters was on Yaxley, and how powerful Tor's father was, but it's clear that her mother's powerful too.

I really enjoyed reading the scene in the bedroom with the four of them on some sort of sleepover. It was nice to see that they could have moments of happiness and enjoyment for a while, even with everything that's going on around them.

I hadn't expected the house to be used for the freed prisoners, but I thought that was a great way of incorporating the event into the story! I've never really thought about how it must have been done before but someone must have gone to release all of the Death Eaters. Pyxis's reunion with his father was really sweet, though, and I can see how much they love each other. But it's difficult, like Tor now realises, to reconcile the two different people that each of these men seem to be - the loving father and the Death Eater. I wonder, when it comes to it, which they'll choose to be.

Ugh, Fenrir Greyback is so creepy and horrible and you wrote him really well! Even though I don't like what Yaxley is doing, at least he's got the power to protect his daughter from someone like Greyback at the moment.

With the Death Eaters having escaped from Azkaban, I could tell that things were going to move a lot more quickly now towards the takeover of the Ministry. But the raid on Avery's home is horrible, particularly as poor little Alexandrina Avery was killed! Events like that can help to explain some of the attitude towards the Order too, because the Death Eaters consider their cause to be right and their friends are being killed for it. It just shows that there are never truly winners in a war like this.

I loved seeing Yaxley go and take matters into his own hands, so to speak. I can imagine that all the events leading up to this point have made him more determined than ever to act and you wrote the scene with Thicknesse really well! It's all going to get much darker from here, though...

Sian :)

Author's Response: Hola! :)

I'm glad you liked this chapter and how important it was! The fall of the Ministry is really the beginning of the end (well until Harry gets his Horcrux hunt on) and I really enjoyed writing it from Tor's POV.

Ah yes, I thought it made sense that they would have some things going on at other houses as well, even if Malfoy Manor becomes the main headquarters. It would definitely be scary, and even though they're on the same side of the Death Eaters, a lot of them are unfamiliar and quite formidable especially after Azkaban.

Tor's mother is definitely powerful in her own right and really stands on her own from Yaxley, even if Tor doesn't always acknowledge it because she's more afraid of her father.

Aw, I'm glad you liked the sleepover! I love writing the Nott-Greengrass dynamics since they're all so comfortable with one another and really are a little family unit in their own way, even if not all of them get along.

I'm glad you thought the house being a temporary residence made sense with canon! It fit and also was an easy way to put Tor at the centre of the action and make this section of the story more exciting. :P It is really hard to reconcile those identities, and it's that contrast which has really fuelled the whole story, so it's interesting too when we see Pyxis facing those contrasts.

He is the creepiest! I think that Greyback really made a big impact on me in the books with his cannibal-ish tendencies and so he's always the worst in these scenes. :P

Aw, I know. :( I felt bad for killing her off, but it needed to happen. And yes exactly, like the Death Eaters legitimately do think that they're in the right and that the other side are corrupt and evil - or at least they try to spread that narrative to make sure people are on their side. I like your comment about there being no winners - so true.

Ah yes, got to love those dark chapters (they're my favourites, anyway :P). Yaxley has transformed a lot too, he's used to lurking on the sidelines but has true power now and is getting a bit stressed out with all that pressure.

Thanks so much for another wonderful review, Sian! ♥

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Review #4, by marauderfan 

12th February 2014:
Another awesome chapter! Aw, I really loved the scene when the Nott brothers were able to see their father again. I know I shouldn't love it, because that comes along with the mass breakout from Azkaban, and Death Eaters escaping... but it was a touching scene.I think it was even more poignant because its something so terrible like these people escaping prison, who as Tor mentions, have killed people's daughters and sons... but they are here with their families. There is so much grey area here in terms of morality and good and evil and honestly I love that kind of thing. Same goes for that bit about the Aurors killing Alexandrina Avery... the Aurors who are always the 'good guys', but they're killing inocent kids. Death Eaters kids, but innocent ones. Gah. I'm so conflicted. But honestly thats the mark of really good writing.

i wish I could comment on more but I don't have time and I want to leave this review, so I'll just say - amazing job!

Author's Response: Hi Kristin! :D

Ah, yay I'm so glad you like it! :D I was so excited about this chapter so it's wonderful to get this feedback.

I'm so happy you like the grey areas and being conflicted about whether the characters are good or evil. Honestly I'm conflicted about it right along with Tor. I'm pleased you liked the reunion between the father and his sons, and I thought it was a little sad for me to write as well.

Poor families, I know. :( I guess Tor is realizing that in some ways there are no winners or losers or heroes. I'm really pleased to hear you're conflicted, it really means a lot to hear.

Thank you for the wonderful review, I really appreciate you taking the time out of your busy traveller's life to leave it. :) Thanks for being so lovely! ♥

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