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Review #1, by marauder5 

12th February 2015:
I loved Andromeda's letter. I REALLY hope Tor gets the chance to come in for that cup of tea, no matter what might happen in her future.

I had to laugh at the image of Tor trying so hard to convince Pyxis of her Transfiguration story that she hits him in the chest. Haven't we all gone a little over-excited and done stuff like that?

Pyxis obviously isn't stupid and I think it was about time she told him. Maybe sharing her secret with someone will make it easier for her. I knew Pyxis wouldn't be happy, but I guess his prejudices have deeper roots than Tor's did, because I would have expected him to be a little more supportive. He clearly doesn't think he has a choice, even though I'm not sure if he wants to be a death eater either. At least he won't tell anyone. I really hope he'll keep that promise.

Once again, I must say that I love how you tie in the canon events. Her being one of the people delivering letters to Harry was brilliant, and then the two girls whose little brother got bitten by a werewolf. You have such a clever way of tying canon events with this story too - they don't seem like they're there just for the sake of it, but they seem meaningful and fitting and I absolutely love it.

Did I mention how much I love Terry's friends, by the way? I probably did. Anyway, I'll say it again. I kind of wish I was friends with them too.

I swear, sometimes I think Dumbledore has an almost godlike way of knowing everything. Maybe he is, as he so often claims himself, just good at guessing. I love that Tor went to him, but I'm worried that he won't be able to help much. After all, I really don't think Yaxley will be convinced to give up his way. Also, we know, even though Tor doesn't, that Dumbledore hasn't got long left.

This was another great chapter! At the moment, I feel like Tor's whole life is a ticking bomb and I'm just waiting for it to explode. It's bound to happen sooner or later - I just don't know HOW it will happen, exactly. Maybe she'll have to cut ties completely with her family. I can sense that she does love them, but part of me thinks that she loves them because she always has, and because they're her flesh and blood. She doesn't really like them anymore, does she?

Anyways, great job on this chapter too! You are still one of my favourite authors on this site, and this story remains my number one favourite story! Congratulations on the Dobby Award, by the way - you definitely deserved that one x

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Review #2, by Teddy1993 

21st September 2014:
Another fantastic chapter! Your writing jst gets better and better :)

Not only Gryffindors are brave. It must have taken a lot of courage for Tor to go to Dumbledore. I really hope she's genuine, but at this point I'm fairly certain she is...

Author's Response: Yes, very true! It took a lot of bravery and overcoming of fear for her to do that, especially since it involves choosing her new morals over her family and past. She is genuine, but I think at this point she isn't quite ready to confront her family and come out in the open about who she is. That takes a whole new level of courage.

Thank you for another great review!! :)

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Review #3, by nott theodore 

15th August 2014:
Hi Jenna!

Ah, so now I know where I'd heard the name Margaret Macauley before, and I'm kind of glad that I have seen it in this story because I was starting to worry that I'd been imagining things. So now this has given me a better idea of what Penelope might have been involved with, but that's a different story so I'm going to focus on this chapter instead :P

It was really nice to see that Tor had been writing to Andromeda again, now that she and Terry are back together. It's going to make things a little bit easier to have someone like that for her to talk to, and I like the idea that Andromeda and Ted had their own difficulties too, because that makes them seem more realistic and then it will be reassuring for Tor because those sorts of relationships can continue and survive (except I feel like Tor and Terry's won't last forever because she's going to marry Draco at some point...)

I'm really not sure about Pyxis and his knowledge of Tor's secret now. I didn't think that she'd be able to lie her way out of it when he confronted her directly because he does know her really well. But at the same time I'm kind of worried about whether or not he might spill her secret at some point, even if he doesn't intend to. It's really quite scary to think that he knows that he'll be recruited into the Death Eaters in the future, and that both Tor and Daphne will be asked to join as well. I can understand the anger that they feel towards their parents for putting them in that situation, particularly now that Tor has started to realise that she doesn't want to be a part of the mentality of pureblood supremacy. Pyxis hasn't reached that, because he hasn't had the chance to become more open-minded, I think, but he might have the potential too - he also (hopefully) won't be recruited because the war's going to be over in a little more than a year and I'm hoping he'll still be considered too young then. I just hope that he will be able to protect Tor's secret and that he won't put her friends and family at risk, as well as Terry. The fact that Tor says he's become more distant since he found out makes me worry, though.

I love the details from canon that you manage to incorporate in this and all your stories! It was great to see Tor as the girl who had to give Harry a note and the way that she used Leglimency to find out what was wrong with those girls. I'm assuming that they're the ones whose brother was attacked by Greyback which we hear about in the book? It's so sad but I love the way that we're getting to see lots of glimpses of different aspects of the war.

Aw, I liked the way that you introduced Cadmus Scamander with the other Ravenclaw boys, just because it was cute to see someone who might be related to Rolf! And I really liked seeing Michael and Anthony with Terry too, they're fun to read!

The conversation with Dumbledore was brilliantly written! Dumbledore's such a difficult character to write and you did such a good job of him, especially with his speech because he seemed really in character. The only minor detail there is that I think Tor would be more likely to call him 'Professor' or 'Sir' than Dumbledore, to his face at least. You really captured how desperate she was about her situation and I think it's actually really brave of her to volunteer to spy on the Death Eaters and work for Dumbledore as long as she can make sure her family are protected as well. For someone who's just fifteen it's amazing to do something so selfless and I can only hope that it does actually help in the future - although as Dumbledore's going to die in a few months, and he won't be able to protect them for that long. I'm just getting so nervous now that it's getting closer to the end of the novel, especially since we're approaching the scene from the prologue!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Hey Sian! :)

Haha, yes!! I'm glad you saw the connection between the two stories, when I first started I decided they would be happening in the same universe so there are some characters in common. Macauley is more central to Magpie but it was fun writing her cameo here.

Andromeda is a great confidant for Tor and one of the few people who really understands her situation, though because of Tor's father's position she is in a more dangerous predicament than Andromeda was (in my head canon, at least).

Pyxis is a bit of a wild card. He loves Tor and wants to protect her, but at the same time his knowing her secret is dangerous for both of them. Especially if he becomes a Death Eater and it's discovered that he knew Tor was with an enemy and was considering rebelling as she has been lately. Pyxis does have potential to be good, but he's also very Slytherin in that he wants to protect himself. For the time being I see him as being more benign than according with the pureblood ideology, but it's convenient for him to go along with what his family and friends believe.

I'm so glad you liked those details! You're right, they were supposed to be the sisters whose brother was attacked. It's really helpful for me to tie in events of this novel to canon because it helps situate Tor in that canonical world and hopefully make the story more believable for readers.

I'm happy you liked the Ravenclaw boys! They're so much fun to write! :P

Ah, I'm so glad you liked Dumbledore, and good point about what she would call him! It is incredibly brave of her - or insane - and in a way she is doing it for her own sake as well because it would protect her family and loved ones. Dumbledore would try to protect her even if she wasn't a spy, but she thinks that she has to trade something in order to get his help. That scene was really pivotal and interesting to write as it really shows how Tor has developed and how frightened she is.

Thanks so much for a really lovely review, Sian! :D

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Review #4, by Brightpaw 

17th January 2014:
Yay! Another update! Keep them coming pretty please. :D

I was a little unsure about Tor's conversation with Dumbledore... what did she think he could do? I guess she's pretty desperate. I really hope she doesn't try to convince her father to abandon the dark lord... I feel like she should know there's no chance, right? If he tries to leave they'd kill him, I would think.

I do think she's right to believe Pyxis. What does he gain by telling on her? I'm not sure he won't, but what can she do but trust him?
I think it makes sense that he figured it out. She's stopped being very careful... someone had to notice. She seems like she's decided they're going to find out eventually and is trying to minimize the damage, you know? Ok maybe not that extreme, but I would tell her to chill and do some duels or something. :D

Thanks for the great chapter... more Draco soon?

Author's Response: Hello! :)

Tor is getting very desperate! She's not thinking clearly, necessarily, but her heart is in the right place and she does want what's best for her family and herself. She trusts Dumbledore and thinks he could protect her family in the same way he later tells Draco that he could protect his family if he joins the right side, only Tor is the one who seeks out the protection. :) I agree, Yaxley would definitely not go quietly.

Yes, exactly- Pyxis means well, and he's a good friend despite having those Slytherin self-preservation instincts. She doesn't really have a choice here.

She was being very careless! Tor... doesn't always make the best decisions every single time. :P Pyxis was bound to find out, especially since he got a good look at that Boggart on New Years. She's quite lucky he took it this well.

Thank you for the wonderful review! :D I actually just put the next chapter in the queue, and there is a fair amount of Draco in fact! I hope you like it. :)

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Review #5, by marauderfan 

14th January 2014:
Another wonderful chapter!

I really, really hope Tor gets to meet with Andromeda, Ted, and Tonks! Hm, something tells me that this isn't going to happen. I just get a bad feeling that something will happen before the summer. Eep!

“Well, I wouldn’t call him blond exactly, more sandy -- haha! I loved this, her timing for her humour when she's trying to not have her world crash down around her because she's been found out by one of her best friends. I don't really trust Pyxis, but I don't think he'll tell on her. I think he's too scared, though obviously he'd never say that.

Ok so I know it was at a serious point in the story when the Association of Slytherin Students was mentioned again but I laughed out loud at the acronym (like I do every time - I think I have a low maturity level :P ) I just picture all these solemn, intense Slytherins in an organisation with those initials and hahaha it's just too great :D

Liked the little cameo appearance of Harry and co. and cleverly sneaking Tor into canon! Ooh, and Cadmus Scamander - Rolf Scamander's brother, perhaps? ;)

I really liked Tor's talk with Dumbledore. I think even though she's obviously desperate at this point, it shows a new maturity to her character in that she is really starting to understand everything that's going on and how it affects herself and her friends/family/acquaintances. That was very noble of her, and though I think she'll never manage to convince her father, she might possibly be able to with some of her friends, and possibly Daphne, if she's lucky. It's hard to tell with Daphne :p I liked the last line of the chapter too - Dumbledore going on about love again :) A very Dumbledoreish thing to say at that point, and it's quite obvious that's what is going on, sometimes you'll do desperate things for love.

I didn't think this chapter was rambly at all! Or if it was, I like rambly chapters so it's all good :P Great job, once again!

Author's Response: Hello! :)

Yay, I'm glad you liked it! :D It's so great to be updating this story more consistently again.

I hope so too! I love Andromeda, and she would be a really great influence for Tor. Hmm, something bad, whyever would you think that?? :P

Haha, typical Tor diverting the tough questioning. Interesting thoughts about Pyxis- he is a good friend, but he's not as strong and brave as Tor can be.

Haha don't worry, I laughed too! I almost wished I could have kept the Association around for a little longer but the plot sort of outgrew it. It is funny to think of how seriously they take themselves and then... yeah.

Yes! I'm super sneaky. :P When I was reviewing HBP I just thought that it was only right to have Tor be the girl. I wish I had more time in the story to devote to Cadmus- he's quite funny, and quite probably related to Rolf.

I'm glad you liked the conversation! She is becoming more mature, and starting to see the bigger picture and that things are changing both internally and externally. It is tricky with Daphne, she's a little unpredictable and quite self-centered. Haha Dumbledore does love to talk about love. Tor is doing something desperate for love, but also for larger reasons than that. For love of humanity, of her own beliefs as well.

Thanks so much for the awesome review! :D I love reading your thoughts on the story! Thanks for being so supportive and lovely. ♥

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