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Review #1, by marauder5 

19th January 2015:
It's what - ten years later? - and I'm back to reviewing! Finally! And let me start off by just expressing my pure love for the beginning scene in the hospital wing, where Terry and Tor just feel so NORMAL and carefree and it makes my heart burst with love for them. With everything else going on, those little moments just mean so much, and I love that you included them spying on Ron and Hermione and giggling to themselves like normal teenagers.

Terry bringing up Bentley and the terrible fate of that poor family was also such an intriguing read. I know how torn Tor must be, because as I reader, I feel so torn myself! I mean, her father is obviously not a good person and by my moral standards, she should just cut ties with all those people and run away with Terry (I may have read ahead before reviewing, hehe...) But at the same time, just as she states, those people are all the people she ever cared for before she met Terry. The people who raised her and grew up alongside her. So it's not as black and white or as simple as that...

And can I just say how much I adore Terry's friends? THey whole library bit just makes me so happy, with them teasing Michael about Ginny and Cho, the way they discuss equal rights in the Wizarding vs. Muggle world... It's so spot on and funny enough makes for a really light, enjoyable read, which I assume is because Tor, dspite of everything else, feels really happy and relaxed around them.

PYXIS! I knew it was just a matter of time before someone would start suspecting something. I can't help but feel like he would be the only one out of Tor's friend who might keep it a secret though, to protect her. At least I hope he will...

The Death Eater scene was so brilliantly written. It had a completely different tone than the scenes from Tor's perspective - which it, of course, should. You really do get inside Yaxley's head and it's so faniscating. If JKR had written something from the POV of the other side, I'm sure it would have been exactly like this. I loved it, and yes, I can see why this is one of your favourite chapters. It was absolutely perfect, and once again, I'm in awe at your writing skills. You REALLY should write a book one day.


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Review #2, by Teddy1993 

21st September 2014:
One of your best chapters in my opinion. It's nice to see Terry and Tor back together, although it won't be easy. I liked how Anthony and Michael tried to make Tor feel accepted with them. She can definitely use some new friends. The fact that Pyxis saw them together can't be good however...

I completely forgot about the snake in Tor's bed! Another mystery to solve...

Your story is absolutely amazing! It's a good thing it's a trilogy. I have plenty more to look forward to :) Great job!

Author's Response: Ahh, thank you! I'm glad you liked it, the chapters around this part in the story are some of my favourites. It definitely won't be easy but they're starting to move more into the public eye which could have dangerous consequences but feels nice for the time being. The other boys totally surprised me with how much fun they all are to write.

Yes!! I'm excited for when you find out who left the snake there.

Thanks so much!! :D It really is so lovely and encouraging to hear how you like it, I'm so honoured. Thank you! :D

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Review #3, by nott theodore 

14th August 2014:
Hi Jenna!

Aw, it was so lovely to see Tor and Terry together in this chapter, especially at the beginning when they were relatively carefree and hidden, so they could just enjoy being together rather than worrying about everyone else noticing them. It's really nice to see that Tor's becoming more accepting of the person that she's now become, as well, and knows that she doesn't want to take part in either side of the war. It's actually quite refreshing to see that; there's been so much character development for her since this story began but at the same time it's quite unusual to find characters in fanfiction who didn't support one side or the other during the war, and just did what they could to survive, as I think that would have made up a large portion of the magical population. (Okay, now I'm rambling. Oops.)

It's also really good to see that Terry and Tor are starting to talk more about important things; to some extent, at the beginning of their relationship, I feel a little like Terry, being the older one, spent a lot of time telling her and showing her new things and Tor didn't get as much of a chance for her own views to come through as now. Of course, that probably had a lot to do with the fact she was hiding all the family secrets from him :P So it's good to see that they are discussing things like this now, and I think it'll mean that Tor becomes more aware of just what the Death Eaters are doing. It's good to see her become more confident as well, although I'm a bit worried that the way she seems not to care at times if people see them together is a bit risky, because it could lead to people finding out about them and maybe put Terry in danger (I'm aware of how we're approaching the prologue in these later chapters now and I'm scared about what's going to put him there).

I really enjoyed the scene in the library. It's good that Tor and Terry might be able to spend some time together in public under the cover of the tuition, although I don't think it'll hold for long. Michael and Anthony are really fun and I like the friendship between the three boys. It's great the way that you wrote their discussion about Taurus, and the comparison between Muggle and magical attitudes and laws towards homosexuality. I did spot a typo in that part though - Terry says that his cousin (she) wants him to go with him... Also, as a tiny (picky) detail; they talk about having Muggle officiants for gay marriages but since this is set during the 90s, civil partnership and gay marriage laws still hadn't come into being in the UK. Only a tiny inaccuracy, though!

Oh dear. Pyxis has seen Tor with the three Ravenclaws and I have a feeling that this won't be good... he knows her well enough to realise that there's something going on, I think. Either he'll keep it quiet for her, or let it slip and then something really bad might happen.

It was great to get a glimpse of what the Death Eaters are planning at this point too, because it's been a while since we left Tor's head and found out about her father's actions. It was kind of creepy to see the way that they must have been planning this takeover for months, since in the books it feels kind of sudden. It was really well written, though, and now I'm just a bit anxious about what's to come!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Hola!! :)

Tor has developed a lot and is more sure about who she wants to be and the morals she wants to follow. At the moment, she still is focused on self-preservation, which is why she wouldn't necessarily want to join the resistance movements unless there's something in it to benefit her. I felt like that self-protecting attitude would be quite common for people at the time.

That's very true! Terry is older and he's also very interested in teaching and I think that at first he was trying to be a sort of mentor figure to Tor. They're more...equal? now in a sense especially after their relationship has been tested. Tor is still sometimes in denial about what happens to Muggleborns and what the Death Eaters might do to punish her for being with Terry, and I think it's due to her reluctance to take responsibility for her actions even at this point in the story. She still doesn't really step up in an assertive way.

I've gone and fixed those mistakes! Thanks for pointing them out, I feel like I forget how lots of civil rights for gay marriage are quite recent, even in Canada (2005 apparently, although there were suits brought to the Supreme Court in the 90s so I think I probably got confused by those :P).

Pyxis is definitely a ticking time bomb with this information. He would never hurt Tor intentionally but he also wants to know the truth while not knowing if he can be trusted to keep a secret.

I really liked writing that last section so I'm glad you mentioned it! They are so creepy and scheming, but Yaxley is weirdly one of my favourite characters and it's interesting to see how different he is when among his Death Eater cronies.

Thanks so much for yet another wonderful review, Sian!! :D

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Review #4, by MidnightBlue_x 

12th January 2014:
I just love Tor and Terry so much. I can't wait to see how things progress for them. I loved seeing Michael and Anthony too- I really liked seeing how they interacted with Tor. I'm so excited to read on!

x Ely

Author's Response: Hi! :)

Aw, I'm so glad you like them! :D I'm very happy they're back together. It's also great to know that you liked the Ravenclaw boys as well: they're a riot to write and imagine and get along quite well with Tor. :)

Thanks so much for the lovely review! :D I'm so happy you enjoyed the chapter!

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Review #5, by marauderfan 

12th January 2014:

Tor and Terry are so cute :D I am glad they're able to be honest with each other now, even if it means there are some awkward conversations. Things will get better in time :) I liked Tor's conversation/"working" with the Ravenclaw boys in the library, she fits in quite nicely with them.

I love that you brought up LGBTQ issues in the wizarding world! In some ways, the wizarding world seems more progressive than the Muggles (in terms of gender equality - look at Quidditch for example) but I think in this case, they are behind the Muggle world. The pureblood/mudblood thing is pretty evident of that and I imagine gay couples would be seen the same way (though this is probably more of an issue to purebloods and those concerned with tradition and propriety.) And I love it when social issues come up in fanfic, it just adds such a depth and reality to it all. (And makes me ramble for ages, sorry)

...hm. I wonder what Pyxis is going to do with that information, he saw her! I would assume he won't do anything, since he's one of her friends, he'd just warn her... but I guess there's no way to tell. Uh oh.

OOH THE END IS SO OMINOUS. I mean, I know what's going to happen there with Scrimgeour and Thicknesse because I've read the books, lol, but I really liked that little bit in the POV of a very well respected/feared Death Eater. That part about Amelia Bones was almost touching though - I'd forgotten about her. Perhaps Yaxley's reasons for moving people around in the Ministry are more personal than Voldemort-related reasons :p

Great chapter!! I'm glad to hear the next chapters are finished too, means I have less time to wait till I can read more ;)

Author's Response: Hello!

Ah, they are cute, aren't they? :) Their relationship has reached a more honest level and so it is important for them to be open and understanding. I really love writing the Ravenclaw boys, so I'm pleased you liked that scene!

Yes! I think it would be so interesting to hear from JKR what LGBTQ issues would be like in the HP-verse, but had to go off what we know here. I agree, I think the wizarding world would be a little slow about gay rights and acceptance, also because of the pureblood thing like you said. I loved writing this bit and expressing my thoughts a little through the characters. :)

Hehe, guess you'll have to wait to find out what Pyxis might do or not do! (not very long though!)

I love ominous! I quite liked writing it and from now on is when Yaxley enters the HP-verse and becomes a prominent death eater and character. I picked him to be Tor's father because of the parts which are coming up in this story, really. I'm glad you liked it, and the part about Amelia! We haven't heard from Yaxley in a while so I wanted to remind the readers about him a little and his own secrets and motivations.

Thanks for the lovely review! :D

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