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Review #1, by onestop_hpfan18 

5th August 2016:
Yay, another win under their belt! Also, I wonder if James will end up taking McLaggen's slot in the final. It seems like James, Tamsin, and Emily work better as a team. McLaggen is too haughty, and I think Tamsin doesn't particularly like playing with him. At least, I hope the times she's got a funny expression on her face was because of something McLaggen has done, and not James. Great chapter!

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Review #2, by nott theodore 

4th March 2014:
Hello again! I can't believe I've missed so many updates and haven't left reviews - I've not been reading much fanfiction recently, so it's been hard to keep up. I was excited when I realised I had so much of this story to catch up on, though!

I seriously have missed reading about James and Carlotta, especially since your writing is always flawless and engaging. Somehow at the beginning of this chapter, you managed to make History of Magic sound interesting. I don't think I've ever seen that done before, probably because I'd come to associate the subject with Binns and his boring classes, but since I actually love history it was great to see someone make such an effort to include it in their story. The way that Lily explained all the different aspects was so entertaining and engaging and I think it's fantastic that you managed to do that; your writing there was so rich in detail and convincing that I could imagine a lot of it being written in a magical textbook. I really love the way that we can see things through Carlotta's eyes to an extent in this story, since it means for me that I'm able to rediscover a love and amazement when it comes to magic that I think I'd forgotten after reading about it for so long. It's really brilliant that you can do something like that.

Another aspect I love is that you aren't afraid to shy away from Lily being a Squib, and nor are her family. Obviously it wasn't the ideal thing to happen, but I think it's great that you've shown them all adapting to it so well and doing their best for Lily - I'm really happy that she got the grades that she needed for the job in Muggle Liaison! Haha, it would have possibly ruined her job prospects if she'd written about wizarding history in a Muggle exam!

I'm really intrigued about what Lily and Thaddeus will end up planning to bring about more provisions for Squibs, I think it's a great idea for them to do so as well! I can't believe Squibs have been neglected for so long, really, and I loved the detail that you included about her tutor being named after the famous (or rather, infamous) wizard. The two of them sound like a formidable team when they actually put their minds to something...

I'm glad that the Brigid and Freddie situation doesn't seem to be magically resolving itself, because that makes it seem so much more realistic and believable. He definitely owes her and I'm intrigued to see if anything will happen on her birthday!

You already know that I love the Quidditch scenes, but again I was excited by the way that you returned to it. Everything in this story seems to flow so well and I think that's a real skill, to make those transitions seem natural. It was great to hear about the different strategies and approaches, and going into this detail makes Quidditch seem a lot more complicated and technical, which I think it must be - not just anyone can play professionally. The fact that James had to adapt his play to fit with different players seemed like much more of an important element than I've seen in other Quidditch stories, which I can definitely understand. I'm really glad that he got to play, though, and I'm looking forward to the rest of the matches, even if he doesn't get game time!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Hi! Nice to see you back. :)

If I were lucky enough to be magical, I suspect History of Magic might be one of my favourite subjects, so long as Binns wasn't taking it. I'm a total history nerd (I expect that comes across!) so the thought of magical history is beyond exciting. And it's been a joy for me writing this fic to explore the magical world through Carlotta's eyes, so it's lovely to know you've gained as much enjoyment from reading it. :)

I certainly couldn't have made Lily a Squib and then brushed it off. It's a huge thing for her and the family to deal with, and I enjoy fleshing out her story alongside James'. Perhaps too much! I did have a potential story in the works on Lily, but I think that may manifest itself in a different form, if it's to happen at all. Point is, I know pretty much every detail of her life, and so I like shoehorning her in at every opportunity. :)

I came across the name Thaddeus on the HP Lexicon, and liked it straight away, although I had this sense that I'd come across it before. As it turns out, a character in a fanfic I read is called Thaddeus and my brain recognised it from there, but it took a while before I figured out why it seemed so familiar! I liked it too much to NOT use, and the link with the Squib-Father was a total coincidence. But given it was there, I thought it would be silly not to mention it in the fic. :)

As for Lily and Thad's Squib rights ambition, that will play out in the sequel. If it ever gets written. ;)

Brigid/Freddie isn't going to magically resolve itself, because in its current state it is basically the unstoppable force meeting the immovable object. Freddie makes his position a bit clearer (or tries to, at any rate) in a few chapters' time and I hope it continues to feel realistic.

I certainly hadn't given Quidditch and its tactics anywhere near as much thought as this before I embarked on this project. I couldn't have imagined going into as much detail as I do now. It's been a lovely experience because I feel like I understand Quidditch so much more now (and more than JK ever intended anyone to, perhaps) but at the same time I never want to write another match again. Once you run out of new things to write about, it just becomes same old, same old, and it's beyond painful. So it really does make my day to get reviews like this which continue to praise my work. Because aside from anything else it means my complete apathy with Quidditch hasn't carried over into the fic itself. ;) Thanks for your lovely review!

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Review #3, by Courtney 

9th October 2013:
Thanks for another chapter. I would love to hear more about Brigid and Freddie and hope she gets some happiness, with or without him. And I always love Lilly and her friends.

Author's Response: The Freddie/Brigid storyline will definitely be resolved soon. They both appear in a couple of chapters' time, and Freddie will (finally) begin to make some inroads. Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #4, by Carina 

8th October 2013:
please keep updating new chapters! this is an amazing fanfiction! I love reading next generation and I love this story! xx

Author's Response: Updates will hopefully be fairly regular right the way through to the end now. Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #5, by Slide 

7th October 2013:
Yay, Lily! Yay world exposition and magical history and geography! Happy day! Tobias agrees with Lily. Like, loads. History is important! Poor, silly Binns. I can't help but wonder if JK has either an aversion to history or had some terrible teachers she was lampooning.

Ooh, you mentioned dropping the name Thaddeus. It is a good name! And I approve of squibs being tutors - I mean, seriously, it does seem like a good line of work for them, especially if they have acclimatised somewhat to the Muggle way of life. There would indeed be pros to straddling both worlds.

Squib rights. I smell future plot.

Demelza's a smart cookie. And of course everyone but McLaggen has either humility or sense or both. Something horrid's going to happen to that guy but I suspect not yet.

Ha, poor James, can't rely on Brigid to organise his life when it comes to... Brigid. Freddie better do something nice. He'll either do something amazing or something awful (my predictions are great, yo). Poor, poor Brigid. I mean, poor Freddie, too, but my sympathy's with her. Maybe it's just being an emotional female which does it!

Hmm. It's all going well in Quidditch. I anticipate James won't play in the Canada game, but something's got to go wrong soon. Or wrong-ness must be dangled. HMM.

Good stuff, though!

Author's Response: I had far too much fun writing about Lily going off on one on history teachings. My nerdness coming out in full there. ;) YES, this is the Thaddeus mention! You have no idea how long I spent trying to work out who was called Thaddeus. Poor Stubbs. Certainly if you're going to try straddling both worlds as a Squib, a tutor is one of the best professions, though I'm not sure my Thaddeus is some kind of secret agent/personal trainer/epic spy figure on the side. But then if he was, we wouldn't know about it, would we?

Keep the Squib right plan in mind. Can't promise how important it will be in Derailed but it will appear in some context.

It's definitely not a bad thing for your sympathies to lie with Brigid! I've been very cruel to her, and yet she's soldiered on, bless her. Although now you're just reminding me that I have more Freddie/Brigid stuff to write. And more Quidditch too. BLEURGH. We'll just end things here, shall we? AND EVERYONE LIVED HAPPILY EVER AFTER. Cheers for the review :)

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Review #6, by a rollerball 

4th October 2013:
awesome chapter, please update soon :)

Author's Response: The next chapter's being edited at the moment, thanks for reviewing!

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