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Review #1, by onestop_hpfan18 

5th August 2016:
Of course James would have decided to teach all the kids at St. Mungo's that could go outside how to fly out in the hospital's garden. That made me smile, imagining the England team teach kids to fly. I bet they made those kids' day.

Yay for the first win of the World Cup season for England. And James got to play in it. Get his nerves out of the way. Loved this chapter.

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Review #2, by sooophhhh 

4th October 2013:
update please! just read the whole story, omg!

Author's Response: It's up! :) Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #3, by Slide 

27th September 2013:
Boo, last one. But yay, all caught up! What has it BEEN about this summer where we've all just fallen over?

It'd be interesting to properly see a several-day match. There'd be a whole slew of new tactics about it! And just all the love for James in all of this. He's such a good-natured soul, first about fitting into the team, then about getting the chance to play, and then with the kids! Such a softie.

And again we see now how good he is with other players coming around as Emily helps him out in-turn. It's nice, this, the touches on what makes a good sportsman in the bigger picture than just playing the game, and while we've seen James mostly be the big man with the Falcons, an old hand - despite his trip-ups - it's good to see him as the neonate with England, taken under the wing of others. And being James, he'll be smart and learn more than just Quidditch tips from them!

And he does well! Of course our James does well. But the real trials are to come!

Now I get to kick back and enjoy the chapters as they come. And they'd better be coming! I think we both owe each other ninjas at this rate. Good work!

Author's Response: To be fair, I anticipated things grinding to a halt this summer. I was barely in the COUNTRY, let alone in my own house. I thought I might have enough time to pop out a couple of chapters or leave a couple of reviews here and there but, alas, that didn't arise. Although it turns out I finished this chapter way back in April when I last wrote something, and it was just sitting there waiting to be posted, and I completely forgot about it. Still, at least it means I had something to throw up as soon as I could, because I'm a bit stuck on the next chapter. SIGH.

There is a 48-hour plus match coming up, but it doesn't involve James and it doesn't get a huge amount of tactical focus. That's where my whole substitution thing gets interesting/inconsistent. Cheers for the reviews, it's been good for me to refresh my memory on these latest chapters, particularly the Quidditchy ones, because it's given me some ideas on how to resolve my stuckness. Hopefully I should get the ball rolling again this week!

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Review #4, by nott theodore 

17th September 2013:
Ah, I've really missed reading this story, so I'm glad you're back and updating! (Although I know what real life can be like, so don't worry about it when you're not able to update).

Eep, I'm so happy James got his first cap! I really love how humble he is about his own talent and everything; he doesn't want to hog the limelight for himself (unlike other people I could mention *coughMcLaggencough*) and he doesn't ever expect that he'll be a part of things. It makes him such a likable character because he's so unassuming and modest, which is nice to see in a sports player!

One of my favourite things about this story is the way that you go in depth with Quidditch and seem to have tactics and structure to every game and training, which isn't something I've seen done often before, even in stories that focus on Quidditch players. I think you're one of the best writers on this site as far as including things like that is concerned! The details help to build up such a vivid picture of what's going on in the game and all the different possibilities and outcomes for each game; it makes it a real sport, like football or rugby. I really love the way you write about it, if you couldn't tell! :P

I was so happy to see Carlotta being able to watch James play in his first match for England too, even if it meant that she couldn't watch Spain - she's become such an important part of his life and he's an important part of hers, and even though this chapter doesn't focus on their relationship it still shows that it's developing.

I felt so nervous for James when he was scared about playing and messing up, so I'm pleased that there was someone there who could talk him through it and do for him what he'd done for Jake. It must be strange for him being the inexperienced one all of a sudden. And I'm really pleased that England won their first game as well as James winning his first cap!

At the moment I doubt that he'll get to play against Spain because it's a harder game and I think Demelza will want to give the other Chasers a chance to play together, but I have a suspicion (probably more like a hope, but never mind) that he might get to play against Canada in McLaggen's place - that would be really cool! Of course, there's nothing to say it'll happen, but I look forward to the next chapter anyway!

Sian :)

Author's Response: I've missed writing this fic! I've been on my feet near enough all summer, this is the first time I've had to properly sit down and assess things since June. Whoops!

I honestly can't imagine my James being at all big-headed about his Quidditch success. I guess that's the point - that he's not that kind of character. I imagine Ginny would do everything possible to keep him grounded, but a lot of it stems of course from his insecurities about Harry's fame - because how could he possibly grow big-headed when he attributes all of his successes to being a Potter? Bless him.

Sometimes I wonder if I go TOO in depth with the Quidditch, and make it too complicated, so it's really reassuring when people say they enjoy that aspect of things! More of that to come, you'll be glad (and, I expect, unsurprised) to know.

At the moment, the main focus IS on James' Quidditch career, not Carlotta, but all the same they are becoming more intertwined in each other's lives - at least, she is in his - so I'm glad that's apparent without being in-your-face. I like your thoughts on James' future playing prospects ... but I'm saying nothing. All will be revealed! Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #5, by a rollerball 

15th September 2013:
please hurry up and update :)

Author's Response: I'm half way through the next chapter at the moment, so hopefully it should be up in the next week or so. Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #6, by Ruri 

14th September 2013:
I am so delighted that you updated this again. I was just wondering about it yesterday (not for the first time). I went through both this site and FF to check the reviews of this story to see if you had left a note on someone's review explaining your lengthy absence. This is one of my favorites, and I am quite glad to see it going still. Another excellent chapter too!

Author's Response: Sorry again about the delay! My summer was manic, I barely had any time to sit down and do ANYTHING, let alone write fanfic. Things should pick back up again now though. Thanks for reviewing, and for sticking around! (And for reminding me to update on FF too...)

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Review #7, by missclaire17 

13th September 2013:
When I saw that you updated, I'm not going to lie. I squealed with the new update.

JAMES WON HIS FIRST CAP! Oh gosh, I was feeling nervous just waiting for the game to begin with him. I always figured that James would play this first match, and I think he did fairly well. I don't think he'll play in the next game, and the Canada game is the big one.

McLaggen sounds like such a Quaffle-hogging jerk sometimes. I mean, he's a professional! No matter what, I'm glad that they won! First game for England, first cap, and they won!

I'm excited for the rest of the World Cup. Quidditch is getting more and more intense! How many more chapters do you have left before this novel is finished?

And don't worry about the lack of updates. I know what it is like to be so busy that you can't update. I'm just glad that you're back! :D

Author's Response: I am back! Sort of. The next chapter is proving troublesome but hopefully I'll get somewhere with it in the next couple of days.

Hmm, I'm intrigued by your theories on what games James will play! Not that I'm going to tell you if you're right or wrong though, you'll have to wait until the time comes. McLaggen is a TOTAL jerk, in both Quidditch and life. The apple doesn't fall far from the tree! He'll get his comeuppance in time.

I'm pretty certain I know how many chapters are left of this fic, and there aren't too many to go now. I don't want to give an actual figure though, in case it changes (which it's likely to do, knowing my writing!) but I THINK it will be less than 70 chapters. Don't quote me on that one. Thanks for reviewing, it's really nice to know you're still reading! :)

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