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Review #1, by onestop_hpfan18 

3rd August 2016:
There wasn't any doubt that Sinead was going to choose to play James in the Bats match. I think she just wanted to make him sweat. And I just love seeing James and Carlotta together again. They're so cute and everything is wonderful.

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Review #2, by L.A.P 

9th April 2016:
She looked up at me, and a cheeky smile spread across her face. I could be your house elf, if you want someone to cook and clean for you.

For some reason this for the first time gave me "an image" of what Carlotta looks like. That would be Victoria from HIMYM.

Author's Response: Ah, another reason to get on with watching HIMYM! :) Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #3, by Slide 

27th September 2013:
Of course James plays! Not just dramatically, but I get the impression that, good as Roxanne is, he's still the more reliable regular for such a big game even despite his slump. He's been improving. He just doesn't SEE it, being James. And Roxanne agrees with me. Ha!

Oh God, the situation with Roxanne/Freddie's side of the family. It makes such horrible sense that George and Angelina would struggle to get over Fred's death but it's so horrendous it's been a shadow over their entire lives. Roxanne sums it up properly, in that it should be dealt with and then moved past. But war always leaves its scars. It makes me feel awful for Roxanne and Freddie, but also Brigid - as she's another 'innocent' caught in the crossfire of someone else's soul wounds. This really is the 'sins' of the fathers coming down on their children.

Ooh, and as I comment on taking out a player with a Bludger, it's elaborated on. I mean, of course it's legal, or else why put a Bludger in the game, but it makes sense it would be frowned on.

I love that Kreacher's been mostly reformed, nuts as he is. The House Elf situation is a horribly complicated one. And d'aww domesticity. Yes, it's cute, James. Get used to it.

Author's Response: Roxanne was right; James was ALWAYS going to play in this match. As in, the moment he walked into Sinead's office to beg for his place back, she whacked him straight into the line-up for the last three matches - hence why to her, the team announcement wasn't a big deal. Because it's an obvious choice; James is better than Roxanne. Sinead just chose not to tell him so as to keep him hanging. ;)

Roxanne is important here, in showing that Freddie ISN'T just being stupid. Well, he IS, but at least his fears stem from a valid issue. I've honestly never felt that George/Angelina could be properly healthy. I may have over-exacerbated it a bit here to give Freddie more of a story, but ... there's more to it than "they fell in love". Far more. Poor Freddie and Roxanne. And, yes, poor Brigid too.

Taking player out with Bludger is naughty. Until it's a Lynch. Then it's fine. But yes, the Bludgers are there for a reason, and the tactic isn't illegal, so if you can do it, why not? This is professional Quidditch, not just a bit of fun, and in the right circumstances, it's the right tactic.

Oh, the Carlotta/Kreacher scene. One of my favourites in Rails, I think. Reform has occurred, Kreacher remains his nut-job self. Partly because his nature has a reasonable amount of importance in Derailed. EXCITING. Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #4, by a rollerball 

27th April 2013:
awsome shapter. awsome story. please update soon (:

Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying, thanks for reviewing!

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Review #5, by nott theodore 

23rd April 2013:
Even though I expected that James would be playing in the match against the Bats (which I'm really looking forward to), it was great to see that Sinead picked him over Roxanne. James' humble opinion of his own abilities was really sweet and I've warmed to him even more seeing that, because I think the best sportsmen and women are humble about their talents. Thinking about it, it's probably even harder for two cousins competing against each other for the same spot on the same team than it would be for them to play a match against each other. I really like the way you write their relationship and everything generally to do with quidditch.

The conversation between James and Roxanne was really interesting. It's good to get another insight into Fred's trouble with relationships and to see it from someone who has a similar perspective. Another thing I found fascinating was the discussion about the effect the war has had on all of the elder Weasleys. I've always thought that it must be devastating for George, but I enjoyed the way you included the other siblings in the discussion as well. I think it will be good for James to realise that as much trouble as he had with his relationship with his parents, they weren't as damaged as the others and did their best to protect their children from the effects of the war.

I also really enjoy the way you weave bits of Carla and James into the story while other things are happening, and the way that Carlotta is gradually learning more about the magical world.

I'll look forward to the match next chapter!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: For all James' faults, he's never been big-headed. It's partly because of his hang-ups over Harry's fame - because if you think your progress is down to your famous dad, you're naturally not going to be too cocky! - and partly because there's no way that Ginny would let him become overly confident anyway. He was always going to make the team because this is his story and I couldn't possibly bring myself to leave him on the bench for the last match of the season ;) but Roxanne had a good chance. I can't remember why I originally decided to make her a pro player as well, but I do like the way their familial relationship affects the way they view each other as teammates.

Roxanne's input here was to show that Freddie's not being completely irrational. It just so happens that Roxanne's able to separate her upbringing and family life from her own personal attributes, whereas Freddie's still concerned that the former affects the latter to a point that he can't rectify. The mention of the other siblings was deliberate because I didn't want it to seem as though George was inexplicably the only one languishing in guilt still, but at the same time he is more damaged than, say, Ginny. So yes, James is in fact very lucky - imagine how he might have ended up if his parents were still grieving like Freddie's! It almost doesn't bear thinking about. I'm glad you liked that part in particular :) Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #6, by missclaire17 

22nd April 2013:
James's humility in terms of how he views his own personal Quidditch-playing skill seriously makes me love him more because I REALLY love that in an athlete. The fact that it was obvious for Roxanne that James would be playing and that it was obvious for James that Roxanne had just as good of a shot really spoke to me about their characters and how they do try to find a balance between being competitive and being conscientious that they are family.

The entire bit about Roxanne talking about May 2nd and Fred and George's birthday really was interesting. I always thought that Victoire would hate that she was born on the anniversary of the Battle of Hogwarts, and although you did mention before you do like George and Angelina together, the way you explained that they didn't help each other was believable, everything considered.

What Roxanne said about having to take a shot in love and relationships is so true and it reminded me of James and Carlotta taking a shot with each other. I love it!

Awesome chapter! (:

Author's Response: James has never really had a chance to become big-headed about his talent and success, because he's always linked and compared it to his dad's own talent and fame. Besides, I don't think Harry or Ginny would let any of their children become too big for their boots! He definitely doesn't take it for granted that he'll play, especially as he recognises how good his competition is. And of course, if he lacked that humility then he'd never have had his breakdown in the first place because he'd never have let his hang-ups get the better of him! He would, however, be much worse off for it in many other ways.

I wanted to show Roxanne's side of things with their family issues to show that Freddie's own concerns aren't totally unjustified. Obviously Roxanne is more pragmatic about it all but it hasn't passed her by. I'm really glad you find the George/Angelina storyline convincing because it's one of those issues where people can go either way in terms of how Fred's death affected them, so it's reassuring to know that the stance I've taken here is believable. I guess this is me eking out every last bit of angst from the Voldemort years!

And yes, there's definitely a parallel here with Freddie being scared to take the plunge with Brigid, while James has managed to overcome that hurdle. Freddie could do a lot worse than to look to James for inspiration! Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #7, by ashley 

19th April 2013:
Yay you updated speedily! I loved your James and Roxanne chat. It was really interesting to hear more about George and Angelina's relationship. I love all your quidditch talk. It sounds so realistic! I cant wait for the match next chapter (presuming it is the match the next chapter).

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the chat about George and Angelina. I wanted to provide some balance, to show Freddie's side of things a bit more. The match is in the next chapter - it was actually meant to be in the LAST chapter, but I wrote loads more than I thought I would so it kept getting pushed back! Thanks for reviewing :)

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