7 Reviews Found

Review #1, by onestop_hpfan18 

3rd August 2016:
I love the depth of which you're writing all of the Quidditch-related scenes. You really know the game of Quidditch. Also, I feel like this fic could be canon with how well you've written the plot, scenes, and characters (both canon and original). It all just fits right into J. K. Rowling's world. Love it.

 Report Review

Review #2, by Penelope Inkwell 

2nd October 2013:
Yay! He DID send the tickets to Ingrid and Mark. I WAS hoping.

Yowza! How did you come up with all that Quidditch strategy? It boggles the mind :)

Author's Response: Honestly? I had NO IDEA how the Falcons were going to play against the Bats until I started to write this chapter. The tactics only really unfolded in my mind as I wrote the team's dialogue. Ironically, I've realised that the tactic they adopt was suggested by Lily way back in chapter 12. Couldn't have done that if I'd tried. Thanks for reviewing!

 Report Review

Review #3, by Slide 

27th September 2013:
D'aww, happy morning times. And James, again, proving he can sensibly balance work and personal when he needs to. It's nice, he's always had the CAPACITY to, he just didn't always choose to use that capacity. Now he's buckling down to get his life in order, it's nice to see. And to see how, even though his England chances are scuppered, he's still growing professionally, involved in the planning and tactics.

It's interesting how the tactics, within Quidditch, can indeed revolve around incapacitating a player. It's something that never got hugely dealt with in the books - the substitutions available (the books implied none, which is a bit odd, though CLEARLY backup players existed as Harper took over from Malfoy in 6). An amusing intricacy of a wizarding world expanded upon.

Yay Cordelia cameo! And again, always interesting to see how the Trio consider the truth when it comes to how much they reveal post-war. I agree the Hallows wouldn't come out; I reckon the Horcruxes might if only to explain what Harry was up while on the run. But good on James for sharing the whole truth. And d'aww, of course he sorted those tickets.

Good stuff!

Author's Response: That was always the trouble with James - on the pitch he understood that he had to take responsibility for his actions ... he just never realised that that was the case OFF the pitch too. So his personal life went a bit awry. Now he has a REASON to buckle down, he's actually managing it quite well. So long as Carlotta sticks around to cook for him, because he still lacks those vital skills.

I'll be honest, I had NO idea how this match against the Bats would pan out until I sat down to write it, and then I made it all up on the spot. I knew the eventual League result, just not how it would happen. And I LOVED coming up with the game play. The substitution thing is one that seems very inconsistent in the books - and I'll admit now, becomes inconsistent here too, although I'm sure I can come up with some sort of explanation when the time comes!

Cordelia's presence in this story is simply for humour purposes. Well, and partly to show that James can't look after a thing. But mainly for amusement. My amusement, of course. The Horcrux thing was interesting to think about. I knew that Ron and Hermione wouldn't agree on what to do, but I actually think I had it the other way round at first - that Ron thought honesty was the best option, but Hermione thought it was too terrible a form of magic to teach the world about. In the end, I flipped it because Ron seemed more likely to want it kept quiet, while Hermione would be TOTALLY anti-censorship. I expect Harry would just explain his year on the run as "preparing to fight Voldemort" and hope nobody asked questions. Interesting things to consider though! Cheers for review yo.

 Report Review

Review #4, by quicksilver 

15th April 2013:
Holy wow...tactics.
(Very impressive. Very.)
This was very well written! I'm looking forward to seeing how their tactics play out on the field.

Author's Response: Glad you liked the tactic stuff, it was good fun to write! Thanks for reviewing :)

 Report Review

Review #5, by nott theodore 

15th April 2013:
In a strange way, it's quite nice to see that James has insecurities just like everyone else - although I guess actually caring about someone can do that to people! As far as women are concerned, James has always been so self-assured and just the fact that he is insecure about Carlotta shows how much he really cares about her.

I am so impressed by your attention to detail and the way you write the discussions about quidditch. The tactics and statistics all seem so realistic that it makes the story seem even more authentic - it's like the sport is one like football that actually exists in our world. I really enjoy reading all the possibilities for the match and the way you highlighted the importance of each role in quidditch. I'm really looking forward to seeing the game!

It's really good to see Carlotta back and her and James acting like a normal couple for once. I'm pleased James decided to trust her and explain the full story of what happened with Voldemort - I feel like it is a huge step forward for him and their relationship.

Your characterisation throughout this story is just so brilliant - each character has their own unique voice, and they never really seem to step out of character or do something that their personality wouldn't generally allow.

As much as I enjoy James, Carlotta and quidditch, I would like to see some more of his family in the next few chapters, particularly Lily! And I'm intrigued about how the situation between Brigid and Freddie will develop!

nott theodore :)

Author's Response: James has a ridiculously large number of insecurities, although most of those are about Quidditch more than his appeal to women! But yes, his feelings regarding Carlotta definitely stem from just how much she means to him. :) I absolutely love writing them when they're being all coupley and normal. And yes, he definitely needed to sit down and finally tell her everything!

I'm glad you liked the strategy chat, I didn't have any of it planned so I kind of made it up as I went along, but I really like how it panned out. :)

The whole family begin to feature more in the next few chapters, never fear! And the Freddie/Brigid storyline will start to unfold soon as well. Next chapter should be up soon, thanks for reviewing!

 Report Review

Review #6, by CharliesRose 

15th April 2013:
So as usual, this chapter was brilliant. I love this story so much! I'm so happy Carlotta's back, better be for good this time otherwise I'm going to break down in tears and explode.
Whatt I really loved about this chapter was all the Quidditch talk about tactics, it obviously takes some serious skill to understand a game like that. I think it's amazing how believable you make it, and I've tried to write about it that way but I'm just useless with sport and even Quidditch is beyond me, so yeah, I'm clearly very impressed.
I can't wait to read more of this story, everytime I am on this website this is honestly the first fic I look for for an update. I love your characters (still waiting to see Lily again, and come to think of it, Brigid and Freddie)) and I love the plot, it's just amazing. Well done again! Happy Writing,

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked the Quidditchy stuff, it's really nice to know that people like that aspect of things! This wasn't planned; I knew they were going to have a bit of a chat about what to do, but I didn't actually know what match tactics they were going to go for until I wrote this chapter, and it all came out of nowhere! I think I give this sport too MUCH thought sometimes, haha.

I'm doing NaNo at the moment so there should be a few updates to come, but I've also got exams coming up so I can't promise too much! Thanks for reviewing :)

 Report Review

Review #7, by missclaire17 

15th April 2013:
I have to say, all of that bit about strategizing was really fun to read. I found myself thinking about the various different ways the Falcons can go about with strategies as well! xD
What I found interesting was that the Beaters were remarkably important in trying to win because of the threat of bludgers taking out a player. I loved that you really showcased the Beaters because sometimes, they're always forgotten.

I also loved the bit about the whole unabridged version of what happened with Voldemort. Definitely, I feel like there would be a lot of pieces to the story that the general public would not know because mass-educating people about horcruxes isn't a very good idea, but at the same time, it makes sense that Harry doesnt like censored history.

I like that James made the decision to tell Carlotta the whole unabridged truth because I think it's a step in their relationship. They don't need any more secrets so I'm glad that James decided to tell Carlotta everything.

It would be rather interesting to read about James telling Carlotta, though xD

INGRID AND MARK!!! Ahhh, Brigid never got along well with Ingrid, did she? Well, James needed to thank the two of them anyways (:

Great chapter! I'm so glad you updated.

Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked the strategy talk, because I did worry that I might have thrown too much in. It honestly came from nowhere; I came up with the idea for the match strategy as I wrote this chapter. And I liked how it turned out, it was nice to throw in something involving the Beaters. :)

I've given the matter of what-Harry-told-the-wizarding-world a fair bit of thought, and I definitely think that there are some elements of the story that he'd be unwilling to make public, especially if they're elements which people don't necessarily NEED to know in order to learn from the war. But yes, regardless of what is or isn't written in books, Carlotta HAS to know everything if she's going to be spending a lot of time with the family. There was a part of me that really wanted to write out the whole conversation between James and Carlotta, but I figured that would just become James' retelling of the books with the occasional input from Carlotta, and it would take up a lot of words for not much payback! But I think I know how it would pan out, and if I ever have the spare time and feel like writing it out, I may do so. It's on the list of potential one-shot material :) Thanks for reviewing!

 Report Review
If this is your story and you wish to respond to reviews, please login
Add a Review