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4 Reviews Found

Review #1, by CambAngst 

1st April 2013:
Such a beautiful day for a wedding! You set an absolutely perfect scene at the start of this chapter. It was really humorous to see how much more difficult that seemed to make things for Rose. If it was raining, or cold, or if the day was any less perfect in any way, it would have made it a lot easier for her to decide to make a run for it. Because the whole wedding thing is obviously not her scene. All of those commitment insecurities are boiling over. All in all, a brilliant continuation of your characterization of Rose from the last chapter.

Besides, she’d made a promise to herself to be more okay with all this love stuff. What better place then this to test her new resolve? - Brilliantly put!

She really surprised me with her honest answers to Viktor about not wanting a big wedding and a family. It's a very unusual thing to find in any Weasley character. Charlie always seems like the Lone Ranger of the family, the only one who eschews the ideals of hearth and home and pursues his life's passions without regard to the social norms. I like that look on Rose here. For one thing -- and I would think this even if the site wasn't going Shipless ;) -- it breaks your story out of the tired, old Next Gen romantic narrative. For another, it fits so perfectly with everything you're written about Rose up to this point. There was no hard, left turn into Happily Ever After Land. I don't know if there's such a thing as common law in the wizarding world, but that's the direction the story is heading and she and Viktor are alright with that.

I thought you did an awesome job writing Viktor's brief reunion with Harry. I wasn't sure what you'd make of that, or whether you'd avoid it entirely. What you did with it was so low-key and simple. It was perfect, I thought, for these two characters. They've both had more than enough notoriety in their lives. They don't like it when people make big deals out of things. They really seem to understand one another. So they simply chat, quietly and amiably, until Harry is called away for more pictures. Q.E.D.

I see the evening isn't done taunting Rose with the siren call of domestic bliss and nuclear family stability. The little girl was a pretty adorable touch. At the moment, of course, the Archives are turning "little girl" into "bunny rabbit", but that's neither here nor there. ;) The way that Rose relates to her wasn't unfriendly, but it wasn't maternal at all, either. It set the stage really well for the conversation that Rose and Viktor have about marriage and children. The way that Viktor sort of explains away his relationship with Peter was interesting. He just isn't one to be tied down by feelings of obligation. He seems like the type who would make a really great uncle when he's in the right mood. I guess Hugo and Billy will have to adopt!

The ending was another awesomely humanizing scene for Viktor. I loved the idea that he wants to set Rose apart from all the ones that came before. He wants to put her on something of a pedestal, whether she wants to be there or not. From the point of view of being a sober adult, sitting here and reading a story, it's pretty obvious how much she means to him. Because honestly, it had to be difficult for him to say no in a situation like that. Very nice touch!

I admit it! I couldn't find any typos! I feel so defeated!

Oh, goodness. We're winding down. I already told you I finished reading, so I know what's coming up. I'm savoring the chapters I have left to review!

Author's Response: I'll admit to falling into the cliche of using the weather to reflect a character's mood, but doing the exact opposite here seemed much more fitting. It's almost like the weather is mocking her... and she kind of deserves it for being such a chicken :P

I didn't want Rose to be outright hostile towards marriage and families, but for someone who struggles with commitment, I can't help but see her as at least skeptical about how it might fit into her own life. And while I didn't do it intentionally to avoid falling into a happily-ever-after trap, I do think the idea that every Potter and Weasley falls in love and gets married by the time they're 25 isn't overly realistic. And honestly, if Rose was on the hunt for a husband, I doubt she'd have ever gotten involved with Krum :P

I'm so glad you liked the Harry cameo! I played around with which family members to trot out, but in the end, I thought Harry provided the best opportunity for a little perspective. I totally see it the same way; Harry has been both famous and infamous, and he doesn't really look at Krum and see gossip or scandal. But I also thought it provided some nice contrast. The two are very close in age, and it kind of gives you a yardstick to hold Krum up to -- the kind of life he didn't choose for himself.

Haha! No, mothering doesn't come natural to Rose. And that's exactly what the "bunny rabbit" was meant to show. I'll see if I can work an adoption for Hugo and Billy into the sequel!

The ending (if I did it right) was meant to show two things: (1) that Rose was back in the relationship 100%, intimacy and all, and (2) that Viktor is in love with Rose. I made a point of never having him say the L-word up until or even at this moment, but this is his way of trying to express that. Granted, he does it while also being a jerk, but that's really Viktor in a nutshell. He loves and cares for her, but he's never going to be great at just being a normal, caring boyfriend.

Success!! A chapter without a million typos. And just in time for the story to be almost over. Thanks again for such a wonderful review. I have so much (i.e. too much) fun responding to them.

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Review #2, by Dark Whisper 

14th February 2013:
I love your description of Krum's reaction the night before. He offered no defense, just agreed with her assessment. Loved it!

Weddings... I just love them. I love Harry having a conversation with Viktor. He didn't seem judgemental. And of course, Viktor wouldn't dislike Harry and has respect for him. Glad it happened and he wasn't shunned or ignored.

Her parents' reactions were right on. Hermione and Krum... awkward.

And oh, that dance. Weddings tend to bring up the possibilities of the future... a touchy subject when the two might find themselves on opposing ideas of what that future might look like. It's precisely where age, marriage, and children could be the end of them. Dangerous territory if you ask me and perfectly realistic as it was bound to happen eventually.

And now we are at yet another heart-breaking end to one of your brilliant chapters.

She is drunk, but he refuses her advances. His blunt confession about all those women is a bit harsh, but I was more than happy with his wonderful reason... he wants all of her. With experience comes wisdom and he is so right in this matter. It is chivalrous of him. Even though she might not understand it, he is awesome to turn her down on this night. I love your Krum! Outstanding characterization. I know I'm repeating myself, but it cannot be helped.

Dark Whisper

Author's Response: Weddings! I know it's not exactly the most original setting, but I couldn't resist. I really thought Rose needed at least one person there who didn't think she was crazy, and Harry seemed a good fit. After all he's been through, I'd like to think it wouldn't really occur to him to be bothered by it all.

I thought the same thing... weddings do tend to drag up unaddressed relationship issues. Even if they don't solve their issues in one go, I think they've been through enough at this point to be able to talk about these sorts of things.

I'm so glad you liked the ending. After what they'd just discussed, it felt important to establish that Krum does love Rose, even if he doesn't want to marry her, and also that Rose was really back in the relationship 100%. I couldn't imagine him just blurting out "I Love You," but his heart is in the right place, even if he's words are hurtful.

Thank you for the review!

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Review #3, by Ardeith 

23rd January 2013:
I read this chapter (and enjoyed it!) the other day, but didn't have time to review, so I'm back, hoping I remember what I thought.

I liked Krum's encounter with Harry. And this:

"It was the first time Rose had ever seen Viktor hold an actual conversation with anyone, other than herself or Peter. Both men spoke with confidence and ease. It was a trait Rose was used to seeing in her uncle, but one she hadn’t had occasion to observe in Krum. It was oddly humanizing, and Rose liked it." Another great insight from you! When you start dating someone, you spend a lot of time alone together and it's so interesting to watch them in company! Glad Rose likes what she sees!

And the whole last bits were so well done and made you think about the characters and relationships in general... Krum was so cynical when they were dancing at the wedding, about never wanting to be married again (though you can't blame him!). Rose was so cool with it (I don't think I would be!), when she's young and should be able to look forward to marriage and children. But then back at her place, when he said I want all of you, you know he really does care about her. And not just as another drunk girl! ;-) Is that enough?

Author's Response: Awww, thank you so much for coming back to leave a review. That means a lot to me.

I'm glad you liked the bit with Harry. I think it's so true that you can learn a lot about a significant other by not only the way they treat you, but how they treat others. The ending part was tricky for me to write, but if it got you thinking about them as a couple, then I guess I got close to the mark. It was meant as a sort of follow-up to the whole "I don't want to get married again" conversation. A way for him to show that just because he doesn't want to marry her doesn't mean she isn't special to him.

Now it's up to Rose to decide if that's enough for her.

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Review #4, by Jchrissy 

22nd January 2013:
FINALLY. I thought I was going to explode if I didn’t get to read this chapter soon. I was so excited to read it last night, and then my NyQuil took over :(. You’re being a very, very good updater. You deserve huge cookies.

I love how neither of them seem incredibly excited to go to the wedding. Obviously Rose knows they need to, and Krum doesn’t seem like he’s being forced or anything, but they both seem like they’d rather be laying in bed together eating ice cream. Can you blame them, though?

I love that the reception is at the Burrow. It seems that Fleur and Bill started a tradition with getting married there. Though I have to say, having that many people and knowing the majority of them are family would be a bit…. stressful. Good thing Rose is a tough girl.

Ohhh and here is George to remind Rose just why she doesn’t absolutely delight in the idea of these family functions. Hahaha. Poor girl. Thank god for Angelina.

The encounter with Harry was actually really sweet. I’m sure a bit awkward, considering Harry is Rose’s uncle and once watched Hermione and Krum start and end a ‘thing’ and yeah. But at the same time we’ve never known Harry to be judgmental, and I think you make that very clear with that section. Their emotions, the actual pleasure at seeing an ‘old friend’ mixed with the complete awkward situation came through really, really well.

Oh God. My heart just broke when he automatically answered ‘no’ to the wanting to do the whole marriage thing again. Sure, Rose may say now that she isn’t sure, but she’s also still very young. You can’t make that kind of decision to never want a wedding and a marriage but but if she loves Krum enough she will and if he never changes his mind she’ll probably end up heart broken and gah. You are killing me. Then you just made me NOT want to hit Krum when he pulled her back and said that he can imagine her in a dress. WHY ARE YOU PUTTING ME THROUGH ALL THESE FEELS? WHAT HAVE I EVER DONE TO YOU??

It’s so sad that Krums life has gotten to this point where he’s decided two things that seem to make people so happy in life, marriage and children, just aren’t for him. FIX HIM, ROSE.

Fine. I love him again. This last section.. the way you had Rose just a bit on the belligerent side when Krum pulls away (she is Ron’s daughter, it makes sense for her to not really see reason in things even for a few seconds :P) but we get to see just how sweet and thoughtful he’s being.

I just. I don’t know what to do anymore. Sometimes I feel like Rose really does deserve someone better. Someone who can give her the entire life she wants, without all the dark shadows and the constant lurking skeletons. But then Krum does things like this, and I can’t see how anyone else could be more right for Rose. How any two people could be more perfect for each other.

You’re putting my emotions through rollers coasters. I’m so scared to see how this ends :(. You’ll be gentle with these two, won’t you??

You always mention that you don't think emotions are your strongest point, and I think you may be crazy. Everything these characters feel, even that soft current of 'something has to go wrong' that no one wants to admit, is always there. But it's so perfectly placed that it doesn't feel like your shoving their feelings down our throats. And you're making them so real. I'm going to be so sad when this is over :(.

Author's Response: Lol, at this point, I think I'm updating far faster than anyone actually wants to read the story. I'm attempting to crank out the remaining chapters before posting anymore. I started the last (LAST!!) one last night. Maybe I'll even finish today... Wow, that's a scary thought!

I'm so glad you liked the bit with Harry. I thought he, of all people, might 'get it,' or at the very least not see at his place to have an opinion on the matter. He knows what it's like to be scrutinized, and he does have a way with people... Anyway, I'm glad that came through a bit.

The scene where they're dancing was actually really fun to write. I think it's one of the more honest moments between the two of them. With her inhibitions lowered, she's more willing to push him for answers, and to respond in kind.

I was torn on the ending, afraid it was too much, but I thought Rose needed to make it clear she was back in this 100%, and I wanted Krum to be able to show he loves her without actually saying "I love you." In his own way, he was trying to say how much more important she was than any of the girls that came before, but he does it in a way where he's kind of yelling and being a jerk about it. I think I'm just as torn on them as you are. He really has a lot things wrong with him, but he loves her the best way he knows how. But is that enough...

Thank you a million times over for all your support on this. I think I'd have been tempted more than once to toss it all aside without you cheering me on. I'm going to be sad when it's over too, but I'm also getting super excited at the idea of starting something new. I've already started making notes on an OF, and I can totally say I'm not sure I'd have had the confidence to try my hand at it without all you encouragement on this story. Gah!! Now I'm having all the feels :(

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