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6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by maskedmuggle 

28th August 2013:
Hey!

Ahh poor Rose! I feel so sorry for her, and almost don't believe it myself that Viktor would do such a thing. It definitely seems strange after their -mostly positive - interactions yesterday.. but I thought it was made very clear just how distraught Rose was.

I also liked seeing this "new" side of Peter. It's interesting because Krum in canon seems like a fairly decent guy.. I can't help paralleling how when Hermione was with Krum he seemed "good".. and how Rose will hopefully eventually turn Krum around. I'm actually wondering whether Rose will find out about Hermione/Krum.. I'm hoping she will.. because I'd love to see her reaction to it! As always, I enjoyed reading this! :)

- Charlotte

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Review #2, by CambAngst 

14th March 2013:
Hello, again! Sorry I've been away for a while. The Gryffindor-Slytherin Review Battle has kept me occupied for the past week or two.

I loved the difficulty that Rose had trying to settle back into her day-to-day life after returning from Bulgaria. And it wasn't just the trip to Bulgaria, I guess. That was only the last leg of the whirlwind journey she's been on. Everything she tries to do -- going to work, stopping by her parents' house, going home and cleaning her flat -- seems so flat through her eyes. She's discovered this whole new world of excitement and fulfillment pursuing Krum and it doesn't take her very long to realize that she misses it.

From start to finish, the way you wrote Viktor's overdose was really well done. You didn't introduce any false drama or theatrics into the experience. I've had the misfortune to see it happen once in my life, and the way you wrote it was exactly how I remember it: vomit and silence and paralyzing fear. Even if you know what's happened -- which Rose obviously doesn't -- it tears you apart trying to figure out what to do. You know that the outcome is going to be bad either way, and you -- as a clueless, non-medical professional -- are trying to weigh risks and possibilities that are well beyond your ability to understand.

You finally succeeded in making me feel some empathy for Peter Brooks. Up to this point, I was really on the fence about him. I tend to be on the fence about everyone aside from Rose and maybe Hugo in this story. They all have their own angle on Krum's life; nobody's motivations are pure. But here, Peter displays a bit of genuine emotion. He really does care what happens to Krum and the fact that Viktor has fallen from the wagon hurts him. It was nice to see him connect with Rose just a bit.

The best constructive criticism I can offer you for this chapter comes down to typos, because overall it was very good.

Viktor looked up at here, and just as she thought he might try to say something more, his eyelids fluttered, eyes rolling back into his head. - looked up at her

Shed spent the last two and half months combing through the mans past, unearthing every grisly detail she could. - two and a half months

To talk about how unbelievable ___ up it all is? - unbelievably

So what about her then? What was her roll in all of this? her role in all of this

Things really seem to be accelerating now. I sense a big finish ahead!

Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you had time to stop by again. You all have been reviewing machines!

I hadn't really thought of Rose's return to normality like that, but I can see what you mean. It was meant as more of a calm before the storm -- getting her life back in order so she can start moving forward again -- but I guess her old routine is pretty bland compared to her new life. Hopefully it wasn't just my writing that was flat :P

Wow, I'm really sorry you ever had to witness something like this. I've never been though it myself, but I have been nearby for a few medical emergencies, and it's a terrible feeling. There really is just some level of instinct that either kicks in or it doesn't. It does for Rose here, though I tried to make sure she didn't seem too practiced.

Oh, good! I'm so happy Peter is growing on you. That was totally my intention with that last scene -- to humanize him. I really felt like it was important to give Rose an ally. The two aren't going to become best friends, but they at least understand each other, and may be the only two people with Krum's best interest at heart. Hopefully it says something about Krum too, that he is a man worth caring about.

Typos have already been fixed. I feel like I'm going to need to credit you as an unofficial beta by the end of this. Thanks for the review. I always really enjoy reading what you have to say!


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Review #3, by Dark Whisper 

14th February 2013:
Heartbreaking... just heartbreaking.
Darn those drugs. But he was clean for so long. I appreciated Brooks' take on the situation. He has been through this before. Sometimes, it just happens.

And Hugo as well... not really placing blame, but just accepting that people slip up. Addiction is an extremely powerful thing.

But things seemed to be going so well. Something seems amiss. And since I don't trust too many in the story, I'm wondering if Heart sabotaged him somehow to get Krum in the limelight again... bad publicity is still publicity and he is going for the best seller. Hmm.

And Hugo's claim of miscalculating the dose seems out of place as well. A normal sober person would be extremely careful. And he had his wand laying out. So, hmm.

Either way, poor Krum and poor Rose for having to witness him in that horrible state. Awful.

Again, you describe this scene very well, even being realistic at the sickness involved with drugs. Not pretty, indeed.

Dark Whisper

Author's Response: It's not the most uplifting chapter, is it? I am glad it felt realistic though. I tried not to gloss over too much while still keeping it site-appropriate.

And I'm glad you could appreciate what Peter said here. I really wanted to cross the line in having him become an ally for Rose, someone outside her family that was on her side. Even though they got off to a rough start, I do think Peter's heart is in the right place.

Yay for suspicions! I definitely wanted this point in the story to be questionable -- did Krum do it to himself or was it done to him, and if so, by who? I didn't want people to be able to guess the ending, but I did want some level of doubt to start creeping in.

Thanks so much for the review!


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Review #4, by Ardeith 

9th January 2013:
Yay! You're back! Because I seriously love this story and think it's pretty unique. :-)

I wasn't going to say this, but I see one of your other reviewers did...Maybe I'm as naive as Rose (did she really not suspect drugs were at the root of his illness? Maybe she was blinded by her affection for him? Not to say that I think her feelings are unrealistic.), but I am kind of wondering if Krum was set up somehow...

Anyway, good chapter. I liked how Peter was so supportive of Rose/Krum's relationship at the end. I think she needed to hear that at this point, because it would be tempting to give up. (I am happy to say that though I so often find myself relating to Rose, this situation does not resonate in my life!)

Author's Response: Thanks, Ardeith. I took an unexpectedly long break there for a bit, but now I'm trying to make up for it with an overload of chapters.

In my mind, I think Rose probably didn't want to what was right in front of her, though I think she would have gotten their eventually. As to what really happened to him, that will be revealed before it's all over.

And I'm very glad to hear you're not on the same page as Rose on this one. That would definitely not be good!

Thanks so much for the review :)


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Review #5, by Jchrissy 

5th January 2013:
MOMO BEAT ME HERE. UGH.

Whatevs. I'll get her on the next chapter.

I'm either going to be extremely naive or extremely optimistic... but I will not believe he's using again. Could someone have done something to set him up? Switch the sugar for his tea??? I mean, like Rose said he does act a bit erratic sometimes, but it just seems like him and not any substance inducing that.

I can't decide what's worse. what she actually walked into or what I was thinking was happening. When no one answered the door and she heard those sounds though... I was so afraid there was going to be someone in there with him. Like he was trying to push her away from him by making sure she'd see him with another woman... what she walked into wasn't much better, but at least it wasn't Gigi.

Becky you have no idea how much I wish I could give you CC in this review. You give me so much helpful advice, and your AN asking for suggestions for improvement really wish I could do that, and I've read through this chapter a second time trying to kind of detach myself and see if there was anything.. but i just couldn't find anything. You write so, so beautifully.. your characters personalities are vivid, realistic, and stay constant throughout the story... and you're just such a talented story teller.

This chapter was so intense and you just want to take all these people away and hug them and put them in a happy perfect world.

I can't wait to find out what happens next... and I can't WAIT until you write an OF. I can tell you that I'm going to be one of the first people in line to buy your book.

Author's Response: That sneaky momo!

Call it whatever you like, I'm just glad you like Krum enough to hold out hope for him. I shan't spoil it, but this isn't the last of this incident we shall see, me thinks. And it's so funny you mention that. I actually had Rose thinking the same thing before she flung open the door (I wrote it all out and everything), but I couldn't get it right without her sounding jealous, and that just didn't fit her character. I'll leave the jealousy to Krum. But you aren't wrong about Krum. He is eventually going to try and push her away. You just know he can't help himself.

Gah! Really, you are too good to me with your reviews. I need to find someone who really enjoys giving harsh feedback just to keep my ego in check. Thank you so much for continuing to read and review. I swear there are times when I'm writing a scene and I have to stop myself from PM-ing you to talk about!


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Review #6, by momotwins 

4th January 2013:
Oh man. Nope, I don't believe it, he's not using again. Well, maybe I don't want to believe it. Jeez. That was a tough chapter. Poor Rose, and poor Viktor, but hey your Hugo is a Healer-in-training! That's how I write him too. High-five for similar head canons ;)

Extremely well-written. I love your writing style. I did see you wrote "angel" when it should've been "angle". And yay I get to be the first review on this chapter!

Author's Response: It was a tough chapter to write too. I've already started on the next one and isn't all that pretty either. Does this say something about me!?!

Healer-in-training -- it just fits Hugo so well, doesn't it? When I "gave" him the job in chapter 7, I didn't even realize it would be convenient for the plot later on. And thank you for the lovely compliment. I'm glad if people like the story, but hearing people like the writing itself is squee-worthy!

Oh, and I fixed the typo, so thank you for that too!



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